"The Gift of Life II"
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Comment from karenina
"To Relinguished..." >>>correct spelling: RELINQUISHED
"There is only Two Choices...">>>should be there ARE only two choices
"One is a Girl and the others a Boy." ">>>should be EITHER the OTHER'S a boy OR the OTHER IS a boy.
""A reassuring, quick, smile as I ponder Your *life?" "---Why the asterisk before *LIFE??
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The above are all easy edits which I think you likely overlooked because of the passion and content of the poem. Easily corrected. The poem itself is heart-wrenchingly honest. A beautiful testament of a father's love....
Karenina
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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"To Relinguished..." >>>correct spelling: RELINQUISHED
"There is only Two Choices...">>>should be there ARE only two choices
"One is a Girl and the others a Boy." ">>>should be EITHER the OTHER'S a boy OR the OTHER IS a boy.
""A reassuring, quick, smile as I ponder Your *life?" "---Why the asterisk before *LIFE??
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The above are all easy edits which I think you likely overlooked because of the passion and content of the poem. Easily corrected. The poem itself is heart-wrenchingly honest. A beautiful testament of a father's love....
Karenina
Comment Written 22-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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And thanks again for your wonderful review.
Ricky....
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My pleasure
Comment from apky
You are so right, Ricky. Sometimes existence is just some really mean SOB. But with His Grace, we shall survive...
"Existence is not always a sure bet, you start up that ship and set a course that God directs."
"To, Create a New and Better Life."
"For, this is a Gift for all to enjoy."
"There is only Two Choices...
"One is a Girl and the others a Boy."
Good to find your work here again, Doc. Long time I read from you.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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You are so right, Ricky. Sometimes existence is just some really mean SOB. But with His Grace, we shall survive...
"Existence is not always a sure bet, you start up that ship and set a course that God directs."
"To, Create a New and Better Life."
"For, this is a Gift for all to enjoy."
"There is only Two Choices...
"One is a Girl and the others a Boy."
Good to find your work here again, Doc. Long time I read from you.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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And thanks for your wonderful review again love.
Hope all is,well and swell in Tour Neck of the woods!
Ricky....
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All's fine, Doc. We're all in the footbal World Cup fever!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem about your son, Jay. You used very good descriptive words and very heartfelt too. You always seem to write from your heart which is great. May God bless you my friend! Teri
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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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This is a very well written poem about your son, Jay. You used very good descriptive words and very heartfelt too. You always seem to write from your heart which is great. May God bless you my friend! Teri
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Comment Written 22-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Teri...
Always a pleasure to hear from you and thanks from the bottom of my heart and my son Jay's donated Heart.
Ricky.....
