"The Gift of Life II"
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Comment from Dean Kuch
Hi Ricky.
Long time, no see...
I believe what you've stated here is true. It is our children that fill us with hope and life. They provide us with something to look forward to in the future.
I believe spirits exist as Christ himself is in spirit form.
Having said that, I'm sure Jay's spirit is right with you right now, as well as everywhere you go. And he will be until the day your spirits reunite.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Hi Ricky.
Long time, no see...
I believe what you've stated here is true. It is our children that fill us with hope and life. They provide us with something to look forward to in the future.
I believe spirits exist as Christ himself is in spirit form.
Having said that, I'm sure Jay's spirit is right with you right now, as well as everywhere you go. And he will be until the day your spirits reunite.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Why did Douglas Dean it seems that my best work always comes from above when it specially when it deals with my son Jason.
Ricky....
Comment from A. Willow Bends
I would not award 6 stars just in sympathy. You should know that about this piece up front. This is beautiful. If I had a better word to describe it, I would. One cannot critique a life experience and make suggestions for betterment when one has not walked through your experience. Suffice it to say, this is formatted beautifully. The photo enhances your exquisite and honorable words. You have nailed it as a tribute to your loved one. I hope you find solace in your writing. It is therapy and I hope it will bring you a peaceful place in your heart and mind. Your talent is obvious. It will be interesting when you can reach out to all the other topics available because this particular piece is an indication of where you can go and that would indicate very far. Best of Luck to you in your work.
Wendy
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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I would not award 6 stars just in sympathy. You should know that about this piece up front. This is beautiful. If I had a better word to describe it, I would. One cannot critique a life experience and make suggestions for betterment when one has not walked through your experience. Suffice it to say, this is formatted beautifully. The photo enhances your exquisite and honorable words. You have nailed it as a tribute to your loved one. I hope you find solace in your writing. It is therapy and I hope it will bring you a peaceful place in your heart and mind. Your talent is obvious. It will be interesting when you can reach out to all the other topics available because this particular piece is an indication of where you can go and that would indicate very far. Best of Luck to you in your work.
Wendy
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thanks Wendy.
I will post another "Shed More Tears Fairytales and Fables."
For you!
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment from friartuck
A touching poem indeed! I can't begin to know your feelings in this, but I sense them in your word pictures and thoughts. Your message comes through the grief, but even though there's the knowledge that this grief is permanent, there's also the hope that some unknown good will emerge through that organ donor program. Thank you for sharing this!
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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A touching poem indeed! I can't begin to know your feelings in this, but I sense them in your word pictures and thoughts. Your message comes through the grief, but even though there's the knowledge that this grief is permanent, there's also the hope that some unknown good will emerge through that organ donor program. Thank you for sharing this!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thanks again for your wonderful review and time Friartuck.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment from Sefiros
Really powerful stuff. The rhyming scheme was a little off but your point was made regardless. Enjoyed the use of metaphors to explain your content - the two-sided coin, accepting both the good and the bad things in life. You never know what your kid will grow up into. All you can do is teach them and hope for the best.
Sorry for your loss.
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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Really powerful stuff. The rhyming scheme was a little off but your point was made regardless. Enjoyed the use of metaphors to explain your content - the two-sided coin, accepting both the good and the bad things in life. You never know what your kid will grow up into. All you can do is teach them and hope for the best.
Sorry for your loss.
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Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thanks this is almost an 'All Times Best."
Ricky
Comment from Insignificant Weed
Doctor Ricky: I owe you a deep, remorseful, and sincere apology for the way I tore up your entry "The Watermelon." There I was sitting in my ivory tower making judgments about something I had no knowledge about. Lost in a world or grammar and fine language, I totally missed the depth of feeling.
After reading this poem, I can't express to you my abject sorrow for the loss of your son. I now see what I didn't understand - instead of turning to drugs or alcohol, you turned to writing to release your pent up feelings of utter loss. I can't think of anything worse than losing a child - and then donating his organs. You are something else!
My understanding is that you threw all conventions out the window - capital letters, punctuation, spelling, grammar and turned to pouring out the grief felt in your heart. That is so special.
If you have it in your heart, check out my portfolio and my meditation of Psalm 116. It answers a lot of major questions and dilemmas we face. But, then again, I remain an Insignificant Weed.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Doctor Ricky: I owe you a deep, remorseful, and sincere apology for the way I tore up your entry "The Watermelon." There I was sitting in my ivory tower making judgments about something I had no knowledge about. Lost in a world or grammar and fine language, I totally missed the depth of feeling.
After reading this poem, I can't express to you my abject sorrow for the loss of your son. I now see what I didn't understand - instead of turning to drugs or alcohol, you turned to writing to release your pent up feelings of utter loss. I can't think of anything worse than losing a child - and then donating his organs. You are something else!
My understanding is that you threw all conventions out the window - capital letters, punctuation, spelling, grammar and turned to pouring out the grief felt in your heart. That is so special.
If you have it in your heart, check out my portfolio and my meditation of Psalm 116. It answers a lot of major questions and dilemmas we face. But, then again, I remain an Insignificant Weed.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thanks and no problemo with the 'Watermelon Thing.'
My style is t emphasize the positive.
Ricky...
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You are too much! Luv ya, buddy. And luv the positive
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Just call me Dandelion not Flower!
Ricky
Comment from kiwijenny
To rear or to raise is a two sided coin...I like that it made me think..
Choices impact our children. I determined through God to do the very best I could. But there are no guarantees in raising children, but one...God. He is the only guarantee
God bless Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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To rear or to raise is a two sided coin...I like that it made me think..
Choices impact our children. I determined through God to do the very best I could. But there are no guarantees in raising children, but one...God. He is the only guarantee
God bless Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Always a pleasure to hear from you kiwi.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment from l.raven
Hi Ricky, it's true our kids are what give us life...something to live for....your story brings me to tears my sweet friend...I believe in spirits Ricky...if I didn't I won't believe in God/Jesus...because they are spirits as well...so I know the spirit of Jay is right with you...if you don't mind me asking...who is the little girl in the picture???...she's beautiful...thank you for sharing Jay with us...and with others as well...very well written...love Linda xxoo
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Hi Ricky, it's true our kids are what give us life...something to live for....your story brings me to tears my sweet friend...I believe in spirits Ricky...if I didn't I won't believe in God/Jesus...because they are spirits as well...so I know the spirit of Jay is right with you...if you don't mind me asking...who is the little girl in the picture???...she's beautiful...thank you for sharing Jay with us...and with others as well...very well written...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Glad again to see and hear from you L.Raven.
It's been so long I forgot your first name!
Ricky...
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glad to see you as well Ricky....Linda love xxoo
Comment from Possummagic
I can feel the raw emotion in your recounting of this story of the life and loss of your only son
Jay who lost his very short battle with life and you wanted his heart to beat on in another child. A beautiful sentiment and a very difficult desicion. God bless! PM
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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I can feel the raw emotion in your recounting of this story of the life and loss of your only son
Jay who lost his very short battle with life and you wanted his heart to beat on in another child. A beautiful sentiment and a very difficult desicion. God bless! PM
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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And thanks for your wonderful review and time Possummagic.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
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You have my thoughts and prayers. PM
Comment from Spitfire
I went back and read a few of these. First of all, I'm so sorry for your loss which apparently was about twelve years ago. What a beautiful child.
That you donated his heart is awesome. Your faith definitely helped you through this.
I do find the quotation marks distracting and wonder why you used them. Also, maybe a couple of spaces between the last line and your word count. Actually, I'd leave that part out.
Best line for me: so sensed Your Uncertainty, Your Fears, Your Uneasiness...
"For, So, So, Many, Tears
Excellent symbolism with box and key.
Shari.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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I went back and read a few of these. First of all, I'm so sorry for your loss which apparently was about twelve years ago. What a beautiful child.
That you donated his heart is awesome. Your faith definitely helped you through this.
I do find the quotation marks distracting and wonder why you used them. Also, maybe a couple of spaces between the last line and your word count. Actually, I'd leave that part out.
Best line for me: so sensed Your Uncertainty, Your Fears, Your Uneasiness...
"For, So, So, Many, Tears
Excellent symbolism with box and key.
Shari.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thanks Spitfire from the bottom of my broken heart...
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today Hi Liberty.
You never completely heal from a Double Loss ...
(Wife and Son)
But I have learned to Journal the pain away.
Thanks for this and have a blessed day
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
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I was surprised at how long it took me to get over my mother's death. She was ready to go and told me not to mourn her. Still...
A double loss, I can't imagine.
Why do put Dr. if front of your name now?
And what happened to that foxy picture of you?
Comment from Liberty Justice
SIX STARS 6******BEAUTIFUL! As usual, Ricky, your writings are so unique, so creative, so sorrowful with a touch of joy. I feel you pain; but, please tell me you are not sitting around moping and worrying. Please tell me you have healed mentally and emotionally and you have talked with counselors who can help you seek peace of mind. Please write back to me and tell me you have found "PEACE." WELL DONE. Check out my writings and 2 books, also. lolol your friend liberty justice
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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SIX STARS 6******BEAUTIFUL! As usual, Ricky, your writings are so unique, so creative, so sorrowful with a touch of joy. I feel you pain; but, please tell me you are not sitting around moping and worrying. Please tell me you have healed mentally and emotionally and you have talked with counselors who can help you seek peace of mind. Please write back to me and tell me you have found "PEACE." WELL DONE. Check out my writings and 2 books, also. lolol your friend liberty justice
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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T ou never completely heal from a Double Loss but I have learned to Journal the pain away
Thanks for this and have a blessed day.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
