Summer Rain
A Rondeau for Potlatch41 total reviews
Comment from Dan-C
I love this poem and the picture is a perfect fit. In a week where we have seen a lot of rain here in Florida it rings so true.
thank you for sharing such a lovely work.
Dan
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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I love this poem and the picture is a perfect fit. In a week where we have seen a lot of rain here in Florida it rings so true.
thank you for sharing such a lovely work.
Dan
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Thank you for reviewing it. I appreciate your comments. Rain in Florida???? wow! I wish it would rain here. Stay on the high ground. lol
Comment from LIJ Red
Last half of the first line---glad to see that, so did I. Alberto has been lambasting
us with short but noisy downpours so your Rondeau is most fitting Looks excellent to me.
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Last half of the first line---glad to see that, so did I. Alberto has been lambasting
us with short but noisy downpours so your Rondeau is most fitting Looks excellent to me.
Comment Written 29-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Thank you. I'm sorry you're getting lambasted. I'd like to have some of that here. Stay on the high ground. lol
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a beautifully written Rondeau. The rhyming and flow are outstanding. Image is perfect. Truly a wonderful poem. I like how you have thought to bring pine needles into the piece. Marilyn
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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This is a beautifully written Rondeau. The rhyming and flow are outstanding. Image is perfect. Truly a wonderful poem. I like how you have thought to bring pine needles into the piece. Marilyn
Comment Written 28-May-2018
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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Thank you, Marilyn. I'm glad you like the pine needle bit.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Lovely Rondeau damommy, with beautiful descriptions that almost makes one feel we're in a rain shower. Your refrain line works great, and though I hate the dreary rainy days, I really enjoyed this one.
cheers.
valda
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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Lovely Rondeau damommy, with beautiful descriptions that almost makes one feel we're in a rain shower. Your refrain line works great, and though I hate the dreary rainy days, I really enjoyed this one.
cheers.
valda
Comment Written 28-May-2018
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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I'm so glad you did, Valda. Thank you for such a nice review.
Comment from Artasylum
Your Rondeu is a hit so great job on this. Hey Damommy, what an interesting write. You invite us to see the world through soft, gentle raindrops. Good job. yours, diana
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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Your Rondeu is a hit so great job on this. Hey Damommy, what an interesting write. You invite us to see the world through soft, gentle raindrops. Good job. yours, diana
Comment Written 27-May-2018
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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Thank you. I appreciate such lovely comments.
Comment from jenintorre
I love the imagery in this poem. It is very atmospheric with great rhyme and rhythm, a joy to read. Very well chosen artwork. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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I love the imagery in this poem. It is very atmospheric with great rhyme and rhythm, a joy to read. Very well chosen artwork. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 27-May-2018
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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Thank you for reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Swampfox1
I like the entire first part the very best with the rain vanishing in the fog like thieves. Rain does have a very mesmerizing effect on the mind when idle. I think you did a great job with the poem, loved ever word of it and certainly do appreciate you sharing it . Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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I like the entire first part the very best with the rain vanishing in the fog like thieves. Rain does have a very mesmerizing effect on the mind when idle. I think you did a great job with the poem, loved ever word of it and certainly do appreciate you sharing it . Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 27-May-2018
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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And I appreciate you reviewing it, and saying such nice things. Thank you so much.
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you're welcome and thanks
Comment from F. Wehr3
I really enjoyed this poem, Yvonne. It has excellent descriptive quality. I liked the way you composed this in a mixed meter format, with the last line of stanza two and three at six syllables while rest of the lines had eight. Great job!
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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I really enjoyed this poem, Yvonne. It has excellent descriptive quality. I liked the way you composed this in a mixed meter format, with the last line of stanza two and three at six syllables while rest of the lines had eight. Great job!
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 27-May-2018
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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Oh, how I appreciate this lovely review. Your kind comments mean a lot to me. Thank you.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very well done. A colorful way to tell a mini-story about a rainfall. I had just watched a youtube video about tsumanis when I read this. It's surprisingly similar in how the wave grows stronger, destroying all in its path, and then recedes for the last time leaving it peaceful... but with total destruction. I suppose a heavy rain can do that to ants, etc. :)
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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Very well done. A colorful way to tell a mini-story about a rainfall. I had just watched a youtube video about tsumanis when I read this. It's surprisingly similar in how the wave grows stronger, destroying all in its path, and then recedes for the last time leaving it peaceful... but with total destruction. I suppose a heavy rain can do that to ants, etc. :)
Comment Written 27-May-2018
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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It probably seems that way to ants, but I've read they can live submerge for 14 days. There goes the idea of drowning the little suckers. lol
Thank you for a lovely review.
Comment from MelB
This is a well written poem with nice use of the repeating line, Yvonne. Great use of alliteration. Great job on the challenge and an enjoyable read!
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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This is a well written poem with nice use of the repeating line, Yvonne. Great use of alliteration. Great job on the challenge and an enjoyable read!
Comment Written 27-May-2018
reply by the author on 27-May-2018
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I'm so glad you think so. Thank you so much.
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You're most welcome.
