The High Tundra Drifter
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Comment from apky
Not to blame the writer for the reviewer's lack of knowledge, but I did feel lost on some of those intricate knowledge stuff. Stuff like mosquitoes' wings providing light that can ignite other substances and all that, all the way to the moon?
When my lack of knowledge is taken out of the equation, this read was grammatically flawless, no a spag I could detect.
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Not to blame the writer for the reviewer's lack of knowledge, but I did feel lost on some of those intricate knowledge stuff. Stuff like mosquitoes' wings providing light that can ignite other substances and all that, all the way to the moon?
When my lack of knowledge is taken out of the equation, this read was grammatically flawless, no a spag I could detect.
Comment Written 20-May-2018
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
It may be an idea to start putting this together as a book with chapters or at least include a 'part one (or whatever)' to indicate a larger work. It's best to put this at the top as people don't always read the author notes.
but not enough cause a chain - to cause.
There are some nice touches of inventiveness in this. The flaming mosquitos and the troublesome methane expelling trolls. That's neatly worked.
millions of mosquitos stated flapping their wings - started.
How long could she endure. - should probably have a question mark here.
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Hi there,
It may be an idea to start putting this together as a book with chapters or at least include a 'part one (or whatever)' to indicate a larger work. It's best to put this at the top as people don't always read the author notes.
but not enough cause a chain - to cause.
There are some nice touches of inventiveness in this. The flaming mosquitos and the troublesome methane expelling trolls. That's neatly worked.
millions of mosquitos stated flapping their wings - started.
How long could she endure. - should probably have a question mark here.
Comment Written 20-May-2018
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Got it. I have started a book and will insert these chapters. you are a great help!
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No problem
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The book is The High Tundra Drifter. This is the real nickname for the chair of the biology department at Florida International University. We used to work together on a department of energy grant in the tundra in the mid-seventies.
He stayed with science and I did not but we have stayed in touch. He is a respected global warming researcher. Starfire represents non scientists who work to mitigate global warming.
It will be a children's book where they will be guided to form their opinions some hopefully different than presented in the book.
It is intended to be nutty and scatological enough to keep kid's interest. It is still very much in draft stage.
The Drifter has not given formal permission but he knows I'm doing it. I'll withdraw it if he determines it does not meet his standards.
