Comment from barbara.wilkey

Exceptional

Your contest entry is perfectly written. I saved a six until I read the perfect post to give it to. It's your's. This says so much in such a few words. Wonderful! You made ever word count. Good luck.

 Comment Written 12-May-2018

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reply by the author on 12-May-2018

Awe, Barbara, thank you so much. You can't imagine how pleased I am. You just made my day. Thank you again. All best, Ulla:)))

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

Ah, Ulla, I knew this flash fiction was based on true events because I heard a similar storm described in your memoir. I love the opening action that threw the reader into your story. Nice use of verbs:

The wind picked up. Huge waves battered against the hull. Foam sprayed.

Just when I thought a killer wave was going to drown you, you have a Little-Nemo-in-Slumberland moment by awakening from a nightmare:

I sat up with a jolt and gazed around me. A soft light filtered through the sand-coloured curtains.

My only suggestion is to correct the misspelling of "recesses."

Thank you for sharing your killer flash fiction. I wish you contest success.

 Comment Written 12-May-2018

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reply by the author on 12-May-2018

Hi Andre, thank you so much. How pleased I am for your great review, and that you liked my story. I've made the correction. How the 's' sneaked in, I have no idea. Thanks so much again. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from giraffmang

Good

hi Ulla,

Sorry to say it but you're quite a bit shy on this one. I make your wordage 132 and this needs to be between 148 -152 to qualify.

The dark shadow receeded into its rescess - recesses. Although I'd look at replacing either receeded or recesses due to the closeness in word.

The dream thing is a little bit of a cliché in these type of things. You could change this to some sort of premonition with her heading off as the storm arose or suchlike.

All the best
G

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 Comment Written 12-May-2018

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reply by the author on 12-May-2018

Hi G, I'm so glad I saw your review, and realised that I've somehow lost some of my writing. How it happened only God knows, But it's now resurrected. The word count is now 152 when I count manually. I'll have a look into the dream-thing. It was actually a dream I had, but I see what you mean about cliche. I'm in the States visiting my American brother and family, so I don't have that much to spend on the site. Thanks again for a great review. All best. Ulla:))

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Is "rescess" supposed to be "recess"? What a nightmare this would be to find yourself in. Suppose boaters have one more thing to worry about. Should make an interesting entry into this contest.

 Comment Written 12-May-2018

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reply by the author on 12-May-2018

Thanks a lot Brett. I'm glad you liked it. I'm surprise you recess is still misspelled. I edited that at least ten hours ago. All best. Ulla:))

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the 150 Words Writing Prompt writing prompt.
Your short story of the storm in your dreams is well told.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 11-May-2018

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reply by the author on 11-May-2018

Thank youso much, Sharon. I'mso glad you liked it. All the best.Ulla:)))

Comment from Ava Wilson

Excellent

This is a great story with a creepy ending. I would love to see what ends up happening next. You did a fantastic job on this!

 Comment Written 11-May-2018

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reply by the author on 11-May-2018

Thanks a lot, Ava. I'm so glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

Nicely done, Ulla. The dream is about a terrible storm, the kind that sailors dread and wonder if they will survive. Apparently when you awake, you're either in port or in a house overlooking the port and a storm has blown over. Did you ever read 'Typhoon" by Joseph Conrad? That is one of the best descriptions of a storm that I've ever read.
Great job!
Carol

 Comment Written 11-May-2018

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reply by the author on 11-May-2018

Hi Carol, yes, I did read 'Typhoon' and you're right. That was a real good story. Thanks so much for the great review. My flash is based on what really happened. I've sailed all my life. I'm glad you liked it. All the best, Ulla:)))

Comment from apky

Excellent

When I began to read this I thought it was the continuation of the sailing story!

Wonderfully adventurous, well paced and never leaves the reader to take a breath once the reader is pulled in. I thoroughly enjoyed the story and was even pleasantly surprised at the twist in the end.

 Comment Written 11-May-2018

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reply by the author on 11-May-2018

Hi Aki, Thank you so much. And I'm glad you like it. At the moment I can't write my sailing story. I'm ever so happy to have divorced but those years of sailing is still too close to my heart to write about. I do want to come back to it , though, and I will. All the best.Ulla:)))

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

this is good, Ulla. it is hard to do anything earth-shattering in one hundred and fifty words. your imagery is outstanding. good luck in the contest......meeshu

 Comment Written 11-May-2018

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reply by the author on 12-May-2018

Thanks a lot meeshu, I'm so glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Thank Goodness it was only a dream, or should I say a nightmare? What a relief to understand it was only a bad dream. Well done Ulla dear. I know you have probably had
a similar experience in real life. Maybe you have had this dream. Well done.Nancy

 Comment Written 11-May-2018

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reply by the author on 12-May-2018

Awe, thank you very much, Nancy. Yeah, it's based of what actually did happen. A hug. Ulla:)))