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Animal poetry and short stories

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Comment from nomi338
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What better place to release some of the water that was given to you at birth. The human body contains water that is not unlike salt water of the sea, or so I am told. It is simply a matter of giving back as I see it.

 Comment Written 11-May-2018


reply by the author on 11-May-2018
    If I were a sponge, I?d look for a restroom.
Comment from judiverse
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You start out with such lovely imagery with the beach and the sea foam, then you add your third line about Peter having to pee. Maybe it was all that water? It sometimes produces the urge. What a great picture of the sponge. This is quirky and would do well in a 5-7-5 contest, as it has the element of the unexpected. judi

 Comment Written 10-May-2018


reply by the author on 10-May-2018
    Thanks, Judi
reply by judiverse on 10-May-2018
    You're welcome. judi
Comment from Ginnygray
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Well Bill this one had quite a surprise satorie in the third line of this 5/7/5. Peter having to pee after being filled with sea foam, was very a clever metaphor and imagery!

 Comment Written 10-May-2018


reply by the author on 10-May-2018
    Thanks, Ginny
Comment from Ava Wilson
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Ha ha ha. This was hilarious and I absolutely loved it! I love how you gave the sponge a name - Peter. Very well done and good luck!

 Comment Written 10-May-2018


reply by the author on 10-May-2018
    Thanks, .Ava
Comment from Susannah Womac
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Many people use the short poems to be poignant and over-simplistic, but I love that you decided to go with humor. I've never read a poem about a sea sponge before, so kudos on the creativity!

 Comment Written 10-May-2018


reply by the author on 10-May-2018
    Thanks, Susannah