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Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Scene at a Dentist's Office (Part 2)"Pons and Ned meet at different locations
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Comment from karenina
There is a mystery to sctiptvwriting, for me. Utilizing essentially onecscene of dialogue to give a complete picture...but doggone it you do it! Kind of reminds me of the little skits on Jackie Gleason.
Fumny!
Karenina
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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There is a mystery to sctiptvwriting, for me. Utilizing essentially onecscene of dialogue to give a complete picture...but doggone it you do it! Kind of reminds me of the little skits on Jackie Gleason.
Fumny!
Karenina
Comment Written 11-May-2018
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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Thanks, Karenina. I like working with Ned and Pons.
Comment from Ulla
Hahahahaha, Bill. Wonderful, and what an imagination you've got. I think Pons was right in his assessment to get Ned out of that chair before it was too late. A great write. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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Hahahahaha, Bill. Wonderful, and what an imagination you've got. I think Pons was right in his assessment to get Ned out of that chair before it was too late. A great write. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 10-May-2018
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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Thanks, Ulla
Comment from brenda faye curtis
I think the most amazing part of the scene might be having the opportunity to use phallusies in a sentence. How often does one mistake unrelated objects for a penis? I hope it's not often, because that could lead to most unfortunate results.
Like all your Pons and Ned scripts, it's very entertaining!
reply by the author on 09-May-2018
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I think the most amazing part of the scene might be having the opportunity to use phallusies in a sentence. How often does one mistake unrelated objects for a penis? I hope it's not often, because that could lead to most unfortunate results.
Like all your Pons and Ned scripts, it's very entertaining!
Comment Written 09-May-2018
reply by the author on 09-May-2018
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Thanks, Brends
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You're welcome, Bill.
Comment from judiverse
This is similar to some of the skits done by Abbott and Costello. A lot of the radio comedians depended on misuse of language for their humor. This dentist is really something else. He reminds me of Trump's personal physician. Great references to his age and his acquaintance with Benjamin Franklin. This really leaves Ned with his dental issues unresolved. Great touch with the dentist's advice to remember the Maine and brush twice a year. judi
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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This is similar to some of the skits done by Abbott and Costello. A lot of the radio comedians depended on misuse of language for their humor. This dentist is really something else. He reminds me of Trump's personal physician. Great references to his age and his acquaintance with Benjamin Franklin. This really leaves Ned with his dental issues unresolved. Great touch with the dentist's advice to remember the Maine and brush twice a year. judi
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Thanks, Judi.
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi Bill,
What a fine scene you have developed here.
the dentist chair always puts me on edge--the stuff of nightmares for me.
I found sympathy for Ned right away. Lol.
I felt that frisson of fear when you lose confidence in your dentist.
Well done-touched a nerve with me. Lol.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Hi Bill,
What a fine scene you have developed here.
the dentist chair always puts me on edge--the stuff of nightmares for me.
I found sympathy for Ned right away. Lol.
I felt that frisson of fear when you lose confidence in your dentist.
Well done-touched a nerve with me. Lol.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Thank you, Shirley. This guy reminds me of my dentist except for everything I said.
Comment from nomi338
Thank God you got Ned out of there. It's bad enough to have to see a dentist in the first place, but it's even worse when the dentist is a nearly blind crackpot. Letum' all fall out and get some falsies.
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Thank God you got Ned out of there. It's bad enough to have to see a dentist in the first place, but it's even worse when the dentist is a nearly blind crackpot. Letum' all fall out and get some falsies.
Comment Written 07-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Thanks, nomi, for pulling for Ned.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I agree... Dr. Dennis is definitely not sane. Neither is the author from whose warped brain this story came. But I love it just the same. It was fun to have a third person in the story this time. Dr. Dennis was the perfect choice. :)
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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I agree... Dr. Dennis is definitely not sane. Neither is the author from whose warped brain this story came. But I love it just the same. It was fun to have a third person in the story this time. Dr. Dennis was the perfect choice. :)
Comment Written 07-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Thanks, Phyllis. The doc may need more explaining.
Comment from Artasylum
Your notes very funny! Such a mixed read. If you are in a contest great good luck. A'int nun of them spags in your 'rittin.
He's got a peck avem. Hey! I made a joke there!" Joke away Ned!
Thanks again! di
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Your notes very funny! Such a mixed read. If you are in a contest great good luck. A'int nun of them spags in your 'rittin.
He's got a peck avem. Hey! I made a joke there!" Joke away Ned!
Thanks again! di
Comment Written 07-May-2018
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Thanks, Di, for the great review. Bill
Comment from royowen
Well done Bill, I enjoyed this additional adventure of the half-witted pals Pons and Ned, who struggle a little with the Queen's English, mind you, put two halfs together and you've got a whole. This script in the dental surgery is hilarious, the Humpwhistlian nature of the dialogue is priceless, and the quick wit of the dentist is great, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Well done Bill, I enjoyed this additional adventure of the half-witted pals Pons and Ned, who struggle a little with the Queen's English, mind you, put two halfs together and you've got a whole. This script in the dental surgery is hilarious, the Humpwhistlian nature of the dialogue is priceless, and the quick wit of the dentist is great, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 07-May-2018
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Thanks, Roy, for the great review. Bill
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Most welcome Bill
Comment from Phillip C Kuhn
Ned is my favorite character but all 3 of them were rich within themselves in some sort of was, I'm imagining the Doctor is a vampire, am I right? Good work
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reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Ned is my favorite character but all 3 of them were rich within themselves in some sort of was, I'm imagining the Doctor is a vampire, am I right? Good work
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Comment Written 07-May-2018
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Thanks, Phillip, for the great review. I may have to do a third scene to answer that question. Bill
