How Did That Song Go?
A Frog, a short attention span, a whole new song.48 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
Eck.. Scary sight. I've heard the first line way too many times. It must be common phrase. You could always play around and change it. Good lyrical flow of rhythm and rhyming. Good visual imagery. Well thought out and fun for like Halloween. Creative. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Eck.. Scary sight. I've heard the first line way too many times. It must be common phrase. You could always play around and change it. Good lyrical flow of rhythm and rhyming. Good visual imagery. Well thought out and fun for like Halloween. Creative. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Hey sweetie... This first line is a song that was written in the forties. It is famous and people sing it regularly as a lullaby to their children. Your reviews are so great. Love when you stop by, yours, diana
Comment from BeasPeas
LOL! That will teach that old witch. Love this. It's amusing and fun. Froggie is adorable. So well described in this short piece. Each line offers the reader something. Last line is a gem. Marilyn
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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LOL! That will teach that old witch. Love this. It's amusing and fun. Froggie is adorable. So well described in this short piece. Each line offers the reader something. Last line is a gem. Marilyn
Comment Written 28-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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The froggy was a strange one... I was flipping through the pages on fanartreview . He popped out and started singing star light, star bright and the rest is history. yours, diana
Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
GREAT ENTRY IT GAVE ME A FLASH
BACK OF WHEN I WAS A KID GOOD
LUCK IN THE CONTEST MY FRIEND
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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GREAT ENTRY IT GAVE ME A FLASH
BACK OF WHEN I WAS A KID GOOD
LUCK IN THE CONTEST MY FRIEND
Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Thanks Abby... I was wondering why you did all caps... Thanks for stopping in and reading.
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I ALWAYS DO USE ALL CAPS BECAUSE I CAN SEE WHAT I HAVE WRITTEN BETTER
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Good to know... yours, diana
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Ha! This is a cute entry for the ABC contest, Artasylum! Those witches can turn themselves into anything. This time the frog got the upper hand.
Creative and fun to read! Best wishes for the contest. ~~ Connie
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Ha! This is a cute entry for the ABC contest, Artasylum! Those witches can turn themselves into anything. This time the frog got the upper hand.
Creative and fun to read! Best wishes for the contest. ~~ Connie
Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Hey... bichon... thanks for your stellar review... yours, diana
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You're very welcome! ~~ Connie aka bichonfrisegirl
Comment from N. Rabwar
I thought this poem is humorous and has excellent imagery. I like the image "eerie cloud filled night". Is the reference witches moon a full moon? It is a fine ABC poetry contest entry.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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I thought this poem is humorous and has excellent imagery. I like the image "eerie cloud filled night". Is the reference witches moon a full moon? It is a fine ABC poetry contest entry.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Thanks so much N. Rabwar for your glowing review and stopping to read. thanks again yours, diana
Comment from Alexander Vasa
hahahaah Hello ArtAsylum, cute poem, I enjoyed it and the great pic of Mr. Frog, or toad, as he may be. I think you've done a great job with this one. The only tiny thing I noticed is the space missing in the title.
I see it is for the competition, so best of luck. Nice to catch a post of yours today, and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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hahahaah Hello ArtAsylum, cute poem, I enjoyed it and the great pic of Mr. Frog, or toad, as he may be. I think you've done a great job with this one. The only tiny thing I noticed is the space missing in the title.
I see it is for the competition, so best of luck. Nice to catch a post of yours today, and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Hey Ana... always a pleasure, I can figure out what the missing title is...I want to fix it kiddo so please help me here. I ran right off to fix and can't find what your telling me. Help! I seriously love it when problems are pointed out by other writers. yours, diana
Comment from Teri7
This is a very cute and interesting ABC poem you have penned for the contest. You used very cute descriptive words and very cute imagery with the picture of the frog. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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This is a very cute and interesting ABC poem you have penned for the contest. You used very cute descriptive words and very cute imagery with the picture of the frog. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Hey Teri... thanks so very much for reading it was a whim... go figure. cute frogs thanks Teri
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Love, love, love it. What a fun and lighthearted poem to read. I enjoyed the (croaks) added in! This is a wonderful ABC formatted poem. A solid entry for this contest. Good luck to you.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Love, love, love it. What a fun and lighthearted poem to read. I enjoyed the (croaks) added in! This is a wonderful ABC formatted poem. A solid entry for this contest. Good luck to you.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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It was a whim poem... I was searching through images on fan art and I swear this frog sang star light, star bright.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Diana,
So, the cycle is complete,
the witch curses one into a toad
the toad shoots out its tongue
and catches the passing witch
Fair is fair, foul is foul
croak is croak and so is the witch
STUV I like this very much
wish I had the extra bright star
but I'm all out
Good luck in the contest, my friend
Robert
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Hello Diana,
So, the cycle is complete,
the witch curses one into a toad
the toad shoots out its tongue
and catches the passing witch
Fair is fair, foul is foul
croak is croak and so is the witch
STUV I like this very much
wish I had the extra bright star
but I'm all out
Good luck in the contest, my friend
Robert
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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I like your poem better can I change mine to the one you have here. A fun read. yours, diana
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Your poem is ten times better. Don't change a thing. lol
Comment from Pamusart
This is a good entry for the contest. I would capitalize the T that is part of your acrostic. You capitalized the S, U, andV. Why not the T? I had trouble finding. I had to search every word after the S to look for a word beginning with T. It could be so much simpler for the judges. Well written poem. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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This is a good entry for the contest. I would capitalize the T that is part of your acrostic. You capitalized the S, U, andV. Why not the T? I had trouble finding. I had to search every word after the S to look for a word beginning with T. It could be so much simpler for the judges. Well written poem. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Pam thanks for that I went in to change a word and screwed up the T... Thanks kiddo and thanks for your help yesterday. appreciated. yours, diana
