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April NaPoWriMo NationalPoetcontest

Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Peace of Mind"
Daily poems for April 2018

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Comment from Susan B. Lamphier
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Christine--What a special poem you have written. Your thoughts are sincere, and the format is musical and pleasant. Nice, easy reading with your rhyme. Lovely graphic. Well done!

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
    Hi Susan, Thanks very much and I am sincere in my thought re this maybe one day we will world peace lets hope anyway . Cheers and have a lovely day Christine
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
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I love the powerful message conveyed in this poem that resonates from beginning to end. War is and always will be a terrible thing in spite of the reasons. The cost of lives lost is a high price, especially the children. You presented this well and I enjoyed reading it. Well done.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
    Hi Jeffrey, Thank you and one can only hope for world peace I hate war and can not understand why we cant learn form it. We wernt just born to die in battle. something is wrong with this theory. Thanks for your undrestanding comments Cheers Christine
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written poem. I don't think anyone would vote to have a war or become a victim of war. Unfortunately, it seems there are no hope that we will be spared the horrors of a full blown war.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
    Hi Sandra, I hope we never get to that stage and maybe one day the world will wake up to what is happening As always many thanls and a few to go until the end of April. Cheers Christine
Comment from Michael Steinert
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First off this is a wonderful and challenging contest you are participating in. Second these are the kinds of questions that keep me up at night, can we fix it?
Have a great night!
Mike

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
    Hi Michael. Thanks for your reviews of my work and it is quite challenging to keep up I am only 3 behind so must get going LOL If only we could have world peace maybe one day Cheers Christine
Comment from Harry Smith
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This presentation is very peaceful. The reader really enjoyed the poem that is written with lots and lots of imagery and emotions. Liked the picture selection.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
    Hi Harry, Thanks again your review is most welcome and have a great day Cheers Christine
Comment from BeasPeas
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This is lovely, Christine. I would think everyone would agree with you. This stanza resonated with me:
"Life should be so precious a gift to us all
Not put on a war line to watch it just fall
We must cherish each day with love in our hearts
Do right by each other, and not tear apart."
The only thing the normal person wants is a tranquil life and to live it in peace. Marilyn

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
    Hi Marilyn, Thanks so much Yes that was a favourite stanza of mine also. Maybe one day but in the mean time much more to write getting there Many cheers Christinexx
Comment from aryr
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This was rather well done Christine. This was so very, very true, world peace is indeed needed if the world is going to survive. I liked the rhyme pattern and what the words said. The price of war is too much with the loss of lives. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
    Hi Ary, Thank you so much and wouldn't it be nice to have this and war is so devastating to so many world wide. Many cheers to you from across the world Christine
reply by aryr on 22-Apr-2018
    You are so welcome Christine, it would be wonderful.
Comment from Henry King
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I hear and feel what you wrote in this beautiful poetic plea. The rhythm and rhyme make this poem flow smoothly through the mind. Your words make people think and wonder. Your words give the sense of feeling and vision you projected. Well done.

Mankind has seen war since records began with the scribing of runes on rocks and tablets of clay. Until we can defeat ignorance, jealousy and bullying, there is only hope and prayers. The committees that run government are only as good as the least member of that committee. Most of those committee members are given their position through winning popularity contests called elections.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
    Hi Henry, Thank you for you lovely review and yes I agree with you summary still one must not give up hope Many Cheers and peace be with you Christine
Comment from Dan-C
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Your poem was very well written and your hope for world peace is a noble one. I too hope and pray for peace. As long as there are men and woman in charge there will be war, there always has been. Mankind can not by itself find the peace we so desperately need.
Thank you for sharing such a thought provoking poem.
Dan

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
    Hi Dan, Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem I think if many hope for peace maybe one day it will happen. I am pleased to share with you Cheers Christine
Comment from pome lover
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And I am so thankful to live in America!
Your words are wonderful and your wish, admirable. I don't think it will ever happen, though, as there are so many countries where fighting is their way of life.
I am truly afraid of the influx of Muslims in this country. I don't like it, and I don't trust them. Sorry. I am off the track of your lovely, peaceful poem. I do wish it were true - that it would come to pass.
Katharine - pome lover

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
    HI Katharine, Thank you so much for a look in at my poem and I think peaceful life styles are to be cherished and not taken for granted many don't have this luxury. Cheers Christine