On Waves of Deepest Blue...
Cinquain: Second place winner...47 total reviews
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Mrs. KT, this is beautiful from beginning to end, and I think it is a wonderful entry for the Cinquain Poetry contest .... best of luck! You have a magic about your carefully chosen words, they are always soft and enticing. Nicely written.
Thanks for sharing your poetry, which I always find a pleasure to read and review, Ana.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello Mrs. KT, this is beautiful from beginning to end, and I think it is a wonderful entry for the Cinquain Poetry contest .... best of luck! You have a magic about your carefully chosen words, they are always soft and enticing. Nicely written.
Thanks for sharing your poetry, which I always find a pleasure to read and review, Ana.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello Ana!
I am so very pleased that you enjoy my cinquain.
I really did enjoy penning this one...
Thank you ever so much for your exceptional rating and complimentary review!
diane
Comment from nartoonla
And the us is what makes the world go round besides money, the us that lives in memory and in our day, past, present and future days, the me and you.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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And the us is what makes the world go round besides money, the us that lives in memory and in our day, past, present and future days, the me and you.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend!
So pleased you stopped by!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a free boundless adventure into the waves of memories' cherished nights and in the deep oceans sensualises all moments to the lovers; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR
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This speaks a free boundless adventure into the waves of memories' cherished nights and in the deep oceans sensualises all moments to the lovers; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your lovely review!
diane
Comment from Eternal Muse
Diane, this was superb! Award-winning presentation draws the reader in, but your words are real treasure. Loved it to bits. Good luck in the contest - this would make a strong contender.
Love, Y.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Diane, this was superb! Award-winning presentation draws the reader in, but your words are real treasure. Loved it to bits. Good luck in the contest - this would make a strong contender.
Love, Y.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend,
I am so honored by your exceptional rating and complimentary review!
I so enjoyed penning this piece...
Thank you again! So appreciated!
diane
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Cinquain Poetry writing prompt.
Nicely said, your touching verse has a good message.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Cinquain Poetry writing prompt.
Nicely said, your touching verse has a good message.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello Sharon!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Pamusart
This is a good entry for the contest. I am finding it hard to understand why you are using us rather than we since we is the subject. On the same last why singular was when it is plural we or if you decide to keep us still should be were. We were adrift
Knowing you, there is probably a good reason. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Ok so the subject is us and the verb is us. Us was adrift erc
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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This is a good entry for the contest. I am finding it hard to understand why you are using us rather than we since we is the subject. On the same last why singular was when it is plural we or if you decide to keep us still should be were. We were adrift
Knowing you, there is probably a good reason. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Ok so the subject is us and the verb is us. Us was adrift erc
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello Pam,
I have read your review a number of times. I must admit, that I am confused, and I don't really understand your question.The narrator is speaking in this poem; thus the subject is not "we." It is as if the narrator is saying to the one she loves/loved, "I am adrift...when all life needed to make sense was us"...
Hope this helps.
I enjoyed penning this piece.
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review...
diane
Comment from karenina
Wow. Smooth. elegant, silly soft Cinquain....not choppy or forced as so many cinquains seem to be..... Seems to me to touch emotions this is how a cinquain ought to flow.....
Karenina
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Wow. Smooth. elegant, silly soft Cinquain....not choppy or forced as so many cinquains seem to be..... Seems to me to touch emotions this is how a cinquain ought to flow.....
Karenina
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello Karenina,
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
diane
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It takes TALENT to make a cinquain so smooth.......
