A Double Rainbow in New York
A sonnet in mainly iambic tetrameter45 total reviews
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
So wonderful. I loved that the photo, your two personal "rainbows," were the arcs of beauty in your life, on a drab day. What a grand tribute to your daughter and granddaughter. A true joy to read.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
  |
So wonderful. I loved that the photo, your two personal "rainbows," were the arcs of beauty in your life, on a drab day. What a grand tribute to your daughter and granddaughter. A true joy to read.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
-
Many thanks for the sixth star, Cindy. Glad you enjoyed this poem about two people who are indeed rainbows to brighten life! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is really cute and very well written. I like the writing style and message conveyed here. That is a really sweet double rainbow. I don't think that I've ever seen one before. Well done Tony!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
 |
This is really cute and very well written. I like the writing style and message conveyed here. That is a really sweet double rainbow. I don't think that I've ever seen one before. Well done Tony!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
-
Many thanks, Jeffrey. I appreciate your review and kind words. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
Lovely one, Tony. I especially liked the concluding lines:
"a human child can blaze a trail
when in the arc of parenthood.
Indeed she is the pot of gold
for which her mother's heart was sold."
The "arc of parenthood" does change our perspective on life in general.
One comment about the word "lower" second line. That is a transitive verb and I wondered what it was "lowering." Perhaps "glower" might match "scowl" better?
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
|
Lovely one, Tony. I especially liked the concluding lines:
"a human child can blaze a trail
when in the arc of parenthood.
Indeed she is the pot of gold
for which her mother's heart was sold."
The "arc of parenthood" does change our perspective on life in general.
One comment about the word "lower" second line. That is a transitive verb and I wondered what it was "lowering." Perhaps "glower" might match "scowl" better?
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
-
Many thanks, Helen. I appreciate your review and kind words. 'Lower' was a spelling mistake. I have corrected it now. I had intended 'lour', (look angry or sullen; scowl). Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Gloria ....
Your poetry is always exquisite, Tony and this is no exception. It is most poetic how you've juxtaposed the maudlin thoughts and scowl of sky against the double rainbow of not only two umbrellas, but also a daughter and granddaughter. A perfect pairing with mood, tone and photograph and one for all posterity.
Just beautiful.
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
|
Your poetry is always exquisite, Tony and this is no exception. It is most poetic how you've juxtaposed the maudlin thoughts and scowl of sky against the double rainbow of not only two umbrellas, but also a daughter and granddaughter. A perfect pairing with mood, tone and photograph and one for all posterity.
Just beautiful.
Gloria
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
-
Many thanks, Gloria. I appreciate your review and kind words. Glad you liked the contrasts in this one. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Ginnygray
A lovely double rainbow in NY being a mother and daughter. The second stanza is my favorite in this sonnet where the writer tells the readers that when he is facing life's struggles and trials, he gets joy and hope to dispel all gloom from his daughter and granddaughter. The summation couplet describes his granddaughter as the pot of gold that his daughter's heart was sold!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
|
A lovely double rainbow in NY being a mother and daughter. The second stanza is my favorite in this sonnet where the writer tells the readers that when he is facing life's struggles and trials, he gets joy and hope to dispel all gloom from his daughter and granddaughter. The summation couplet describes his granddaughter as the pot of gold that his daughter's heart was sold!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
-
Many thanks, Ginnyray. I appreciate your summary and supportive comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from N.K. Wagner
They could be mine as well, Tony. Mother and child, large umbrella and small, main rainbow and paler shadow. All these images bring happiness to a loving heart. We'll written was always, sir. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
|
They could be mine as well, Tony. Mother and child, large umbrella and small, main rainbow and paler shadow. All these images bring happiness to a loving heart. We'll written was always, sir. :) Nancy
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
-
Many thanks, Nancy. I appreciate your kind comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from meeshu
what a great poem, a celebration. a dreary day saved by a rainbow, transformed by a smile from child. very happy in the end.............meeshu
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
|
what a great poem, a celebration. a dreary day saved by a rainbow, transformed by a smile from child. very happy in the end.............meeshu
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
-
Many thanks, Meeshu. I appreciate your kind comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Children do happen to bring love and brightness to any situation. I enjoyed reading your sonnet. I'm a fan of sonnets and you're certainly did not disappoint.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
|
Children do happen to bring love and brightness to any situation. I enjoyed reading your sonnet. I'm a fan of sonnets and you're certainly did not disappoint.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
-
Many thanks, Barbara. I'm glad you enjoyed this variation on the sonnet format. I agree with your comments about children. They certainly do brighten one's life! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Sonnet about the double rainbow where the pot of gold is a precious child and a beautiful photo to complenent your poem and brighten up a grey rainy day in New York.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
|
A very well-written Sonnet about the double rainbow where the pot of gold is a precious child and a beautiful photo to complenent your poem and brighten up a grey rainy day in New York.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
-
Many thanks, Sandra. I appreciate your supportive comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from ameen786
As always, your poetry is a true delight to read my friend, aptly applied poetic tools-alliteration, rhymes, word choice, phrasing, enjambment and the flow; of course the passionate family theme; simply delightful, thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
|
As always, your poetry is a true delight to read my friend, aptly applied poetic tools-alliteration, rhymes, word choice, phrasing, enjambment and the flow; of course the passionate family theme; simply delightful, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
-
Many thanks, Ameen. I appreciate your supportive comments. Best wishes, Tony
