Perennials of War
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
Every since Shana and Anderson are in Texas
I feel us readers are going to find unexpected events taking place.
I'm not to good listening to so many people taking all at once ( reminds me of some of Woody
Allen's movies, but the way of how your wrote your various conversation yes very clear to me
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Hello Barb
Every since Shana and Anderson are in Texas
I feel us readers are going to find unexpected events taking place.
I'm not to good listening to so many people taking all at once ( reminds me of some of Woody
Allen's movies, but the way of how your wrote your various conversation yes very clear to me
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, Shana was a little overwhelmed.
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You are welcome Barb
Gert
Comment from Sasha
Terrific work with this chapter, seriously. I don't know who I felt worse for Anderson or Shana. What a difference between the brothers. I a sure Anderson would love to gag and hogtie his brother. Nice work with the dialogue too. Very realistic and well done.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Terrific work with this chapter, seriously. I don't know who I felt worse for Anderson or Shana. What a difference between the brothers. I a sure Anderson would love to gag and hogtie his brother. Nice work with the dialogue too. Very realistic and well done.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Thank you. Having raised four boys, they are completely different.
Comment from royowen
Poor Shana meets Drew's family, parents, Michael and Susan, bother Michael, and I think she probably likes them, but they are a little overpowering. They want some answers as to how they all got involved with the Russian mafia, well done Barb, an excellent episode, blessings, Roy
Typo : I know it's going to be (a) doozy, 2: (Fill) free to add at anytime. Feel?
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Poor Shana meets Drew's family, parents, Michael and Susan, bother Michael, and I think she probably likes them, but they are a little overpowering. They want some answers as to how they all got involved with the Russian mafia, well done Barb, an excellent episode, blessings, Roy
Typo : I know it's going to be (a) doozy, 2: (Fill) free to add at anytime. Feel?
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the catches. I can't believe I did that with as many times as I edited. This is embarrassing.
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You do fine Barbara, don't worry,
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Flows well, interesting characters, particularly "Drew". Depicts the interactions of the scenes spot on. Ending lends to several possible scenarios you could further develop this tale into. Well done.
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Flows well, interesting characters, particularly "Drew". Depicts the interactions of the scenes spot on. Ending lends to several possible scenarios you could further develop this tale into. Well done.
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, oh, this definitely deserves a six. Drew is so sweet with shana,and he also manage to pacify his boisterous brother. A lovely into to Drew's parents. Just a minor thing: I don't have clue what rock you found him under." = I don't have a clue..." All best. Ulla:)))
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Hi Barbara, oh, this definitely deserves a six. Drew is so sweet with shana,and he also manage to pacify his boisterous brother. A lovely into to Drew's parents. Just a minor thing: I don't have clue what rock you found him under." = I don't have a clue..." All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
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I hate leaving out those little words. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from c_lucas
Being from a large family, I am not intimidated when groups of people talk all at once. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
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Being from a large family, I am not intimidated when groups of people talk all at once. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
