The Bee
A bit of a buzz63 total reviews
Comment from ameen786
You did no favor to the bee my friend, you saved your honey in doing that; beautiful story in vivid descriptive verses with perfect rhymes; thanks for the treat.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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You did no favor to the bee my friend, you saved your honey in doing that; beautiful story in vivid descriptive verses with perfect rhymes; thanks for the treat.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I appreciate the sixth star, Ameen, and entirely agree. My motive was largely selfish! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Bucketlist
I love it! Bee what it may, a synergistic relationship, it's very cute. You can feel good about buzzing to help. Your reward is much more than honey - it's beeing a life saver. I'm all for this simple subject poetry
Hug,Trisha
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I love it! Bee what it may, a synergistic relationship, it's very cute. You can feel good about buzzing to help. Your reward is much more than honey - it's beeing a life saver. I'm all for this simple subject poetry
Hug,Trisha
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I appreciate the sixth star, Trisha, for the tale of my heroic rescue operation! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from meeshu
excellent Tony. well written verse and really nice flow of language. very visual depiction of twig in the pool and the insect fighting to be free. one point--if the writer saw a bee outside the hive it was a drone and not female......meeshu
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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excellent Tony. well written verse and really nice flow of language. very visual depiction of twig in the pool and the insect fighting to be free. one point--if the writer saw a bee outside the hive it was a drone and not female......meeshu
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I appreciate your review, Meeshu, of this tale of my heroic rescue operation! Actually it is the female bees that collect the pollen and nectar. (I looked it up to make sure!). The drones just laze around looking for the opportunity for bit of sex. Typical males, one might say! Best wishes, Tony
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where can I apply for the drone job. thank you for correcting me on bees, maybe I was thinking about ants......meeshu
Comment from Gloria ....
Aw I really like this one, saving the honey bee. And written in vivid and loving language I might add.
Great job Tony.
Gloria
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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Aw I really like this one, saving the honey bee. And written in vivid and loving language I might add.
Great job Tony.
Gloria
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I appreciate your review, Gloria, of this tale of my heroic rescue operation! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from nancy_e_davis
What a wonderful presentation for an exceptional poem. You had me mesmerized hoping the Bea would indeed dry out and recover to live another day. She did. Simply marvelous Tony. Well done! Nancy
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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What a wonderful presentation for an exceptional poem. You had me mesmerized hoping the Bea would indeed dry out and recover to live another day. She did. Simply marvelous Tony. Well done! Nancy
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I appreciate the sixth star, Nancy, for this tale of my heroic rescue operation! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from MercurySeven
You captured that struggle just right, with empathy, lovely descriptions, and a musicality only the light touch of metred rhyming verse can provide. The details paint a vivid picture, especially "swirl of half-chewed hay" and "sodden wings". My favourite stanza is this one, for its intimacy and clarity of storytelling:
Her jointed legs brush moisture from her head,
meticulous, and with exacting care.
She tries her wings; a sudden vibrant spread
of gossamer beats hard upon the air,
And you ended it perfectly, with a refreshing mix and emotion and humour:
in drunken flight, as is my heart, set free
as home I trudge - to honey for my tea.
A well-deserved six stars!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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You captured that struggle just right, with empathy, lovely descriptions, and a musicality only the light touch of metred rhyming verse can provide. The details paint a vivid picture, especially "swirl of half-chewed hay" and "sodden wings". My favourite stanza is this one, for its intimacy and clarity of storytelling:
Her jointed legs brush moisture from her head,
meticulous, and with exacting care.
She tries her wings; a sudden vibrant spread
of gossamer beats hard upon the air,
And you ended it perfectly, with a refreshing mix and emotion and humour:
in drunken flight, as is my heart, set free
as home I trudge - to honey for my tea.
A well-deserved six stars!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I appreciate the sixth star, MercurySeven, for this tale of my heroic rescue operation! Thanks, too, for your words of encouragement about the poem. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from antonieta
I enjoyed reading your poem. I liked that you saved the poor bee but I always like the last two lines, if there were no bees there wouldn't be honey for tea.
Thanks for sharing
Antonieta
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I enjoyed reading your poem. I liked that you saved the poor bee but I always like the last two lines, if there were no bees there wouldn't be honey for tea.
Thanks for sharing
Antonieta
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I appreciate your review, Antonieta, of this tale of my heroic rescue operation! You are right - no bees = no honey. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Good use of details. Well crafted example of an English sonnet. Rhyme scheme adds another dimension to the poem. Makes you wonder if the bee survived?
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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Good use of details. Well crafted example of an English sonnet. Rhyme scheme adds another dimension to the poem. Makes you wonder if the bee survived?
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I appreciate your review of this tale of my heroic rescue operation, Brett! Touch and go, I should think, as to whether or not the bee survived to make another few hundred flights gathering nectar for my next teaspoon of honey! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from damommy
Very detailed but still poetic. I like how you show us how she recovered, and did it in a beautifully worded sonnet to the little bee.
We're studying sonnets in Jim's next class. This is a great example for us to follow.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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Very detailed but still poetic. I like how you show us how she recovered, and did it in a beautifully worded sonnet to the little bee.
We're studying sonnets in Jim's next class. This is a great example for us to follow.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I appreciate the sixth star, Yvonne, for this tale of my heroic rescue operation! Thanks, too, for your words of encouragement about the poem. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What a lovely poem. I love that you provide a very detailed description of the bees activities--bedraggled (great word choice) and washes while her wings are dried. Your last two lines are so well-written. What a joy to read. I like how you show your connection to the bees but also use "honey" in a playful way.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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What a lovely poem. I love that you provide a very detailed description of the bees activities--bedraggled (great word choice) and washes while her wings are dried. Your last two lines are so well-written. What a joy to read. I like how you show your connection to the bees but also use "honey" in a playful way.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I appreciate your review, Cindy, of this tale of my heroic rescue operation! No bees = no honey. Best wishes, Tony
