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Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Bill. Your Ode to Parakeet is well written, if not right up an animal lover's alley. Still, there are some clever lines within this piece and I admire your reference to Keats. So, I guess you are finished with the 'keets?' I may have to beg off on your next chosen theme as I have a phobia about those critters. Let me know when it's over and I'll resume reviewing. Marilyn
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Hi Bill. Your Ode to Parakeet is well written, if not right up an animal lover's alley. Still, there are some clever lines within this piece and I admire your reference to Keats. So, I guess you are finished with the 'keets?' I may have to beg off on your next chosen theme as I have a phobia about those critters. Let me know when it's over and I'll resume reviewing. Marilyn
Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Maybe they would worm their way into your heart.
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Oh yuk! I make 100% sure that my pups get their HW meds each month. Good luck with the new project although I'll be absentee on that one. :( Marilyn
Comment from lyenochka
Oh! Poor bird. Great meter and rhymes. I especially liked "Decembered." Why would wet wings ignite? I think I like your poem much better than Keats' as his is overly melodramatic.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Oh! Poor bird. Great meter and rhymes. I especially liked "Decembered." Why would wet wings ignite? I think I like your poem much better than Keats' as his is overly melodramatic.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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I was going to change it to the more probable 'dry wings ignite', but felt that the alliteration and general satirical nature of the piece would allow for it.
Comment from judiverse
If there is a happy parakeet out there, you'll probably find a way to get rid of it too. Birds' Lives Matter! Angel dandruff--that's great. Decembered is great as a verb, rather a Poe-like line. What a sad fate for the poor parakeet. Excellent rhyme and flow. judi
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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If there is a happy parakeet out there, you'll probably find a way to get rid of it too. Birds' Lives Matter! Angel dandruff--that's great. Decembered is great as a verb, rather a Poe-like line. What a sad fate for the poor parakeet. Excellent rhyme and flow. judi
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Judi. It was the parakeet finale.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Oh dear,
Not the sweet tale I'd hoped for.
Poor parakeet to have suffered such neglect in life and to be
thus remembered in death.
Though not familiar with the poetry of Keats( unless in the deepest
recesses of my mind) it is clear you are a fan.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Oh dear,
Not the sweet tale I'd hoped for.
Poor parakeet to have suffered such neglect in life and to be
thus remembered in death.
Though not familiar with the poetry of Keats( unless in the deepest
recesses of my mind) it is clear you are a fan.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Going more for the play on the title and poet?s name than style .
Comment from nomi338
This reminds me so much of the story of a bird that was rescued by a cow who warmed him up with a fresh load of dung. The bird was so happy that he started to sing and was soon discovered by a cat that ate him. Moral of the story: when you find yourself in a pile of crap, keep your mouth shut, Also, just because somebody craps pn you doesn't mean they are your enemy, If someone pulls you out of a pile of crap doesn't mean that they are your friend. These are just some of the lessons this story teaches.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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This reminds me so much of the story of a bird that was rescued by a cow who warmed him up with a fresh load of dung. The bird was so happy that he started to sing and was soon discovered by a cat that ate him. Moral of the story: when you find yourself in a pile of crap, keep your mouth shut, Also, just because somebody craps pn you doesn't mean they are your enemy, If someone pulls you out of a pile of crap doesn't mean that they are your friend. These are just some of the lessons this story teaches.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Nice story.
Comment from Ginnygray
Very clever, Bill. The poor para keet. He deserves the honor of a poem since he was so mistreated and died from the cold and them perished in the fire. I like your last stanza immensely!)! "To burn up in the cage in which he'd frozen"
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Very clever, Bill. The poor para keet. He deserves the honor of a poem since he was so mistreated and died from the cold and them perished in the fire. I like your last stanza immensely!)! "To burn up in the cage in which he'd frozen"
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Ginny
Comment from Artasylum
OUCH... this is so sad... Us humans are truly awful sometimes. yours, diana.
The parakeet, a sprite within a basket,
left on the porch, the wire home his casket;
brought inside to thaw beside the fire,
wet wings ignited so--a funeral pyre.
I hope they never adopt a parakeet again...
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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OUCH... this is so sad... Us humans are truly awful sometimes. yours, diana.
The parakeet, a sprite within a basket,
left on the porch, the wire home his casket;
brought inside to thaw beside the fire,
wet wings ignited so--a funeral pyre.
I hope they never adopt a parakeet again...
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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I have been pretty cruel, poetically.
Comment from royowen
Well done Bill, a very "up"beat on a parakeet my friend, beautifully written in articulate, rhyming verse, not sure about being frozen and burnt up heh heh. But you've drawn a brilliant verbal picture of our winged friend, written in smooth pentametric aabb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Well done Bill, a very "up"beat on a parakeet my friend, beautifully written in articulate, rhyming verse, not sure about being frozen and burnt up heh heh. But you've drawn a brilliant verbal picture of our winged friend, written in smooth pentametric aabb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Thank you, Roy, for the thorough review. Bill
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My pleasure Bill
Comment from karenina
Well yuck! What parakeet tragedy you bring us! If I were of parakeet persuasion I fly long and high above YOUR house! Things just don't end up well with you and fine feathered things! LOL
Karenina
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Well yuck! What parakeet tragedy you bring us! If I were of parakeet persuasion I fly long and high above YOUR house! Things just don't end up well with you and fine feathered things! LOL
Karenina
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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I see your point. Maybe worms will fare better.
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heh heh
Comment from damommy
Eeek! Poor bird.
Fun to read, though. Like the rhymes and the John 'para' Keats.
You never run out of subjects to write about. Always a pleasant surprise.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Eeek! Poor bird.
Fun to read, though. Like the rhymes and the John 'para' Keats.
You never run out of subjects to write about. Always a pleasant surprise.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Thanks, da.. Ready for worms?
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Ready!
