Echoing Memories of Regret
Free Verse: When You and I Were We47 total reviews
Comment from Eternal Muse
What a well written, incredibly sophisticated poem. Loved your language and the use of metaphors. A top-drawer free verse that I enjoyed immensely, even though, as you may know, I am a rhyme fanatic (lol).
Loved these:
Yet, somewhere, somehow,
along this passage of perfection,
our paths diverged, changing course.
I wish you luck in the contests. I'll look in the booths, if it's still running, you got my vote.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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What a well written, incredibly sophisticated poem. Loved your language and the use of metaphors. A top-drawer free verse that I enjoyed immensely, even though, as you may know, I am a rhyme fanatic (lol).
Loved these:
Yet, somewhere, somehow,
along this passage of perfection,
our paths diverged, changing course.
I wish you luck in the contests. I'll look in the booths, if it's still running, you got my vote.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend,
I so wish I possesses your gift for creating rhymed verse, but sadly, I do not...
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review!
Comment from Heather Knight
This is so beautiful. I love the metaphors and the story you tell within your poem. It took me back to my childhood and made me think of my relationship with my own sister.
Thanks so much for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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This is so beautiful. I love the metaphors and the story you tell within your poem. It took me back to my childhood and made me think of my relationship with my own sister.
Thanks so much for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Hello Maria!
I am so honored by your exceptional rating and heartfelt review.
Very pleased that my words took carried you back to your childhood and sister...
This was a rather difficult poem for me to pen...
Comment from Ogden
Your poem is beautifully written. It speaks of regret, but certainly not regret of the unconventional love that it describes.
Good luck with your emotional entry.
Don (aka Ogden)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Your poem is beautifully written. It speaks of regret, but certainly not regret of the unconventional love that it describes.
Good luck with your emotional entry.
Don (aka Ogden)
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Hello Don!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review...
A rather difficult poem for me to pen...
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a wonderful free verse. I imagine it as best girlfriends who went through those panty-girdle years and impossibly restrictive social mores, to have emerged on the other side of it, as not best friends.
I might be totally off base, but I've got my compass, so I can't be that far off due North.
Superb free verse with emotion and best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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This is a wonderful free verse. I imagine it as best girlfriends who went through those panty-girdle years and impossibly restrictive social mores, to have emerged on the other side of it, as not best friends.
I might be totally off base, but I've got my compass, so I can't be that far off due North.
Superb free verse with emotion and best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Hello Gloria,
Thank you ever so much for your excellent rating and thoughtful review...
Keep that compass handy! :)
Comment from Swampfox1
This is a great contest entry. I like, " Yet, somewhere, somehow,
along this passage of perfection,
our paths diverged, changing course.
Individual differences emerged:
temperaments collided," I like how the words flow so easily, and especially like passage of perfection. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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This is a great contest entry. I like, " Yet, somewhere, somehow,
along this passage of perfection,
our paths diverged, changing course.
Individual differences emerged:
temperaments collided," I like how the words flow so easily, and especially like passage of perfection. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Hello Swampfox1!
I am so pleased my poem resonated with you.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review
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you're welcome
Comment from Harry Smith
Excellent presentation. The colors just look good together. The picture complimented the poem that is very well written with lots and lots of imagery...
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Excellent presentation. The colors just look good together. The picture complimented the poem that is very well written with lots and lots of imagery...
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
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Hello Harry!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Comment from bob cullen
Generally I'm not a fan of free verse, but this was truly magnificent. The words flowed together with wonderful fluency and together the conveyed the most beautiful image of oneness until the oneness separated.
I loved this poem and was saddened by the reality of its message.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Generally I'm not a fan of free verse, but this was truly magnificent. The words flowed together with wonderful fluency and together the conveyed the most beautiful image of oneness until the oneness separated.
I loved this poem and was saddened by the reality of its message.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Hello bob cullen,
I am so honored that my poem resonates with you.
This was a difficult poem for me to pen...not because it is written in free verse, but because of the topic.
I, too, am "saddened by the reality of its message"...
Thank you, again!
Comment from royowen
A stream of consciousness is the only way I can write free verse. But you've chosen some great language to write it in, it appears to be an ode, to "passing ships in the night", but nevertheless very eloquent in its delivery and presentation, well done, good job, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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A stream of consciousness is the only way I can write free verse. But you've chosen some great language to write it in, it appears to be an ode, to "passing ships in the night", but nevertheless very eloquent in its delivery and presentation, well done, good job, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Hello Roy!
This one was a tough one to pen...
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review...
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Most welcome
Comment from meeshu
so well written. fantastic vernacular. this power in message and even more powerful in its language. a proclamation in prose. good luck in the prompt contest.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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so well written. fantastic vernacular. this power in message and even more powerful in its language. a proclamation in prose. good luck in the prompt contest.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Hello meeshu!
This was a tough one to pen...for the many reasons offered.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Comment from apky
When I began to read this poem, I perceived a nexus of child and parent.
But when I got to the mention of Amish, I found myself wondering if it is some pupil and mentor in spiritual guidance, sailing that ship always due north.
By the time I reached the last stanza I found myself wondering if this is perhaps a bond of siblings?
I'm still scratching my head...
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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When I began to read this poem, I perceived a nexus of child and parent.
But when I got to the mention of Amish, I found myself wondering if it is some pupil and mentor in spiritual guidance, sailing that ship always due north.
By the time I reached the last stanza I found myself wondering if this is perhaps a bond of siblings?
I'm still scratching my head...
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Hello apky,
It's a poem about sisters...what once was and is no longer...
The Christmas tree boughs, the Amish quilt, the religious references, the meadows, the building of an imaginary ark = all the things these sisters once did...and do no more...
Thank you for your excellent rating and for stopping by. Hope I have cleared a few things up for you...
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Yes, you have - for which I thank you.
Have a blessed weekend!
