Town Slayer
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 " Repressed Desire"A vigilante seeks justice for all abused women.
7 total reviews
Comment from Harry Smith
This is another great chapter that the reader enjoyed. The chapter was filled with lots and lots of imagery and emotions. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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This is another great chapter that the reader enjoyed. The chapter was filled with lots and lots of imagery and emotions. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much for your nice review, I'm so glad you liked it, take care.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Mistydawn
I will say once again you know how to keep a reader wanting to read more,smiles especially the what I call romance between Jackie and Ben.
Honestly I staring to believe your serial killer will be unknown until he/she gives up and reveals who they are (if they are even from this Earth
Gert
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
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Hello Mistydawn
I will say once again you know how to keep a reader wanting to read more,smiles especially the what I call romance between Jackie and Ben.
Honestly I staring to believe your serial killer will be unknown until he/she gives up and reveals who they are (if they are even from this Earth
Gert
Comment Written 12-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much for your great review and your kind words. I'm trying to decide how descriptive I should get with Janet and Ben's love scenes. What would you like to see?
Thank you again for your kind review and all your support, take care.
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You are welcome Misty
just what you did in in the scene with Jackie and Ben in the log cabin will be sizzling enough
Gert
Comment from apky
It looks like Jackie has found herself everything she needs for the moment; a job, a place to live, and maybe a heartthrob too. Yay! All power, lady.
Unfortunately all my sixes are gone.
She remembers how he started(past tense here...) to kiss her but then pulls(present tense here..., a no-no. Choose one tense and stick to it) away.
(insert open quotes)They're completely harmless as long as you feed them.
Who says this, Misty?: Jerry, set up roadblocks across the city, Rachel, get our canines out there, see if we can flush her out.
You also need the speech quotes with it if this is a direct speech.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
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It looks like Jackie has found herself everything she needs for the moment; a job, a place to live, and maybe a heartthrob too. Yay! All power, lady.
Unfortunately all my sixes are gone.
She remembers how he started(past tense here...) to kiss her but then pulls(present tense here..., a no-no. Choose one tense and stick to it) away.
(insert open quotes)They're completely harmless as long as you feed them.
Who says this, Misty?: Jerry, set up roadblocks across the city, Rachel, get our canines out there, see if we can flush her out.
You also need the speech quotes with it if this is a direct speech.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much for your kind review and all your support I'm so glad you continue to enjoy this story."
I changed started to starts and change the last sentence to this: Jerry, start setting up roadblocks, Rachel, get our canines out to the scene; see if we can end this once and for all.". Better?
Thank you again for all your help and support, it means a lot to me, take care.
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Perfect!
Comment from Ric Myworld
You've created a story that has me torn between right and wrong, punishment and forgiveness, duty verses one last chance for a happy life. For good or for evil, or can evil sometimes not be so bad... Thanks for sharing. :-)
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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You've created a story that has me torn between right and wrong, punishment and forgiveness, duty verses one last chance for a happy life. For good or for evil, or can evil sometimes not be so bad... Thanks for sharing. :-)
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your kind review. My killer IS getting justice for victims, So you have to give her a little credit despite her illegal approach. Poor Jackie/Janet she finally got the only thing she's ever wanted and was always deprived of, love.
Thanks again for all your support, take care.
Comment from royowen
It looks like Janet is going to be fine with a guy named Ben, who really fancies her too. She is fantasising about him. Meanwhile our killer is trying to escape the cops, and hides in a dumpster to do so. Great episode, things are starting to close around Our killer, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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It looks like Janet is going to be fine with a guy named Ben, who really fancies her too. She is fantasising about him. Meanwhile our killer is trying to escape the cops, and hides in a dumpster to do so. Great episode, things are starting to close around Our killer, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much for your nice review. Janet and Ben have a sweet romance coming their way. The killer, well she has to outsmart trained dogs. Not an easy task.
Thanks again for all your support it means a lot to me, take care.
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Most welcome
Comment from Ulla
Hi there. This is a very interesting new chapter to your book. I really do like the story line.
"You never saw me got it?" = "You never see me get it?"
I'm looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Hi there. This is a very interesting new chapter to your book. I really do like the story line.
"You never saw me got it?" = "You never see me get it?"
I'm looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much for such a nice review, I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the helpful suggestion,
thank you again for all your support, take care.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, you have a good style when you write, you don't waffle, and that's good for the reader. I think your dialogue is strong, too, realistic. The only thing I noticed is this:
He cleans up nice
It needs a full stop. Thanks for sharing your story, and that very appropriate picture, Ana.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Hello, you have a good style when you write, you don't waffle, and that's good for the reader. I think your dialogue is strong, too, realistic. The only thing I noticed is this:
He cleans up nice
It needs a full stop. Thanks for sharing your story, and that very appropriate picture, Ana.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much for your kind review and all your wonderful praise, I'm glad you enjoyed the story and that you like the cover. Take care.
