Comment from ngage

Excellent

First, really enjoyed the photo. Great choice. You have a exceptional ability to capture the readers attention not only by your writing skills, but your imagination to visually bring it to life.
You never disappoint. I always enjoy each chapter from the beginning to the end. You should be rewarded on this site for your exceptional talent.
Nate

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018

Awww... thank you, Nate :)
You truly brought a skip to my step today. I can't thank you enough for your time and kind words.
Sincerely,
Shana :)

Comment from rwilliam

Exceptional

Oh COOL photo!!

WOW. There was a lot of drama in this chapter and you wrote it all so very well! Are you sure you're not a part time Doctor? LOL.

Great writing my friend.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018

Thank you girl :)
Glad you liked the photo. I thought it was captivating.
Your feedback put a spring in my step this afternoon! And I wish I was a part time doctor. Haha! You're the best!
Your friend and fan,
Shana :)

Comment from royowen

Exceptional

A fantastic episode dear Shana, it's so lovely that the two babies Jem and Jax are still alive, but some doubt about Tessa, I was wondering about transfusion, but it's your story, and I'm sure you've got worked out I'm sure. Lilith is a good touch, I'm sure we'll here more of her, you're a awesome writer dear Shana, well done, blessings, Roy

Typo : He feared (for) the woman he loved.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018

Thank you my dear friend! Your dedication means everything. And thanks for catching my typo. I don't know how I missed that. You're the best!
Always your fan,
Shana :)

reply by royowen on 10-Apr-2018

You deserve every glittering one

Comment from apky

Exceptional

You always have this great eye for the most captivating artworks. I love this one too - so invocatory!

And this was once again edge of seat. I chewed my nails during the entire time Helen and Cassie delivered Tessa and Jace's babies, and no sooner had i breathed out again and you slipped in the cliffhanger. Now my heart is racing for Tessa again, hoping nothing happens to her.

Brilliant again, well-paced, thrilling and suspenseful.

Would you like to hold you(yourr) first born, Jace?

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018

Thank you so much!!! :)
And thanks for mentioning the photos. I love searching for something eye catching. Your review put a skip in my step today. Always grateful for your time, kind words, awesome review and helpful tips. Thanks for catching my typo.
Always your fan and friend,
Shana :)

reply by apky on 10-Apr-2018

Ooops! I made it worse - what's yourr?
Of course I meant "your".

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018

I figured that's what you meant. You're a gem my friend :)

Comment from Harry Smith

Excellent

I really, really love the picture selection and really enjoyed reading this chapter of your book. The chapter is full of imagery and emotions. The reader will be back to read more.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018

Thank you, Harry :)
I enjoy searching for photos to match my chapter. I'm always hoping it will catch the readers eye. Looking forward to hearing from you again. More Breedline adventures to come!
Sincerely,
Shana :)

Comment from Janilou

Excellent

This is a fast-paced chapter with a lot going on with multiple characters. As such I had a little trouble keeping track of who was who, but your author's notes are very extensive and helpful.
I didn't see any errors in your work and I have no suggestions for improvement.
All the best,
Jan

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018

Thank you, Jan :)
So happy to hear you enjoyed this chapter. I do have a lot of characters and I'm thrilled to hear my author's notes help out. I'd love to hear back from you. More Breedline adventures to come!
Sincerely,
Shana :)

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks another interesting punch of climax with ever good catch in the beginning, shinning and stepwise plot development though steady but elongated with thematic perspectives, metaphysical flavour, fantasy spirit, horror, crime, and mystery, thrill, lead to a unified moral lessons; minute fictional expressiveness; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018

Thank you, DR Alcreator :)
It's so nice to hear from you! Your feedback is inspiring and encouraging. Stay tuned... more Breedline adventures to come my friend.
Sincerely,
Shana :)

Comment from Alexander Vasa

Excellent

Hello, it is sad when she dies saving someone. I enjoyed this chapter, with your vivid characters and the conversations they have, which brings them to life. You write very effectively, and this is a great genre that you need a good imagination for, and you definitely have that.

The only time I stumbled over the words was here:

scrubbing a hand through his short trimmed hair. Scrubbing didn't fit for me, but that is just something tiny and didn't affect the rating of your very engaging story. You have gone to a lot of trouble with your author notes, and that is good for a reader coming into the narrative some way in.

Thanks for sharing another chapter of your manuscript, it is a work I would recommend, Ana.

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018

Thank you, Anastasia :)
It's good to hear from you again. Your feedback is helpful and encouraging. This is why I enjoy sharing my story on this site. I've learned so much from helpful people here. It's the only way you grow and continue to get better at your craft. I do appreciate you! :)
Sincerely,
Shana :)