Help Me Fix The Roof
Accepting the things you cannot change.26 total reviews
Comment from Six-Star Writer
This is obviously about more than the roof. It almost read like a letter. I like the style. I hoped he would get the "roof" fixed. My life is full of holes, so I know how he feels.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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This is obviously about more than the roof. It almost read like a letter. I like the style. I hoped he would get the "roof" fixed. My life is full of holes, so I know how he feels.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
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Thank you so much for breathing one last breath into this to get it an All Time Best status upgrade. Much appreciated!
Comment from Val Crisson
Well, I have to give this a six, as so many thoughts went through my mind while reading it. It reminds me of a marriage falling apart, or old neighbors with a feud they can't resolve. Or is it the reality of rain we need. "Hold my ladder steady" - great line
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2018
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Well, I have to give this a six, as so many thoughts went through my mind while reading it. It reminds me of a marriage falling apart, or old neighbors with a feud they can't resolve. Or is it the reality of rain we need. "Hold my ladder steady" - great line
Comment Written 07-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much for the sixth star. Much appreciated!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello!
While I imagine your well-crafted poem could be about a relationship between a couple, to me it resonates the state of our world today. Such tumultuous times, and everyone has complaints, but few offer solid/workable solutions. I loved the references of roof, hammer, and ladder = solid poetic and visual imagery.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Hello!
While I imagine your well-crafted poem could be about a relationship between a couple, to me it resonates the state of our world today. Such tumultuous times, and everyone has complaints, but few offer solid/workable solutions. I loved the references of roof, hammer, and ladder = solid poetic and visual imagery.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 07-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Your interpretation is 100% correct. Thank you!!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem. While a couple is together they sometimes fight about the simplest things, the one is willing to fix the problem while the other just go on about the problems.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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A very well-written heartfelt poem. While a couple is together they sometimes fight about the simplest things, the one is willing to fix the problem while the other just go on about the problems.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your time and kind review!
Comment from Artasylum
Hey Clockwise... this is frenetic and it reads as if you are standing there nervous, desperate and worn out. I love the repetition of the Roof and Ladder it works. thanks for the read. yours, diana
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Hey Clockwise... this is frenetic and it reads as if you are standing there nervous, desperate and worn out. I love the repetition of the Roof and Ladder it works. thanks for the read. yours, diana
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your time and kind review!
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, clockwise, :)
Good poem. I want to share my favorite stanza:
And one day after I'm dead,
should drought bring thirst and pain,
you might then hear all I've said,
and not mind so much the rain.
Have a great weekend.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Hello, clockwise, :)
Good poem. I want to share my favorite stanza:
And one day after I'm dead,
should drought bring thirst and pain,
you might then hear all I've said,
and not mind so much the rain.
Have a great weekend.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thank you for reading and your generous review.
Comment from Fabiha_N
This poem is very well-written! Each word paints a clear image in my mind, and the entire piece conveys a true message. I like the metaphors you used, which accurately says that "some things you can't change, but it may get better in the future."
Great work :)
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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This poem is very well-written! Each word paints a clear image in my mind, and the entire piece conveys a true message. I like the metaphors you used, which accurately says that "some things you can't change, but it may get better in the future."
Great work :)
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thank you for reading and your generous review.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
A lovely and interesting verse. Well said, well rhymed, nice rhythm.
I like the way your story weaves between rain coming through the roof and the storms in your lives.
Well done, and thank you for sharing this with us.[
Sharon
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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A lovely and interesting verse. Well said, well rhymed, nice rhythm.
I like the way your story weaves between rain coming through the roof and the storms in your lives.
Well done, and thank you for sharing this with us.[
Sharon
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thank you for reading and your generous review.
Comment from ameen786
An outstanding poem, full of wisdom, reflecting upon the ups and downs of a relationship; the verse has a wonderful beat to it when read aloud; the last stanza is a killer, quite poignant; thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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An outstanding poem, full of wisdom, reflecting upon the ups and downs of a relationship; the verse has a wonderful beat to it when read aloud; the last stanza is a killer, quite poignant; thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Wow, a six! Thanks so much. I always seem to struggle when closing a poem, I am glad you think I nailed it this time.
Comment from RGstar
I have heard something similar to this, yet, I like your rhetoric, as well all the metaphors used...the main...the hammer and roof.
If only we could think this way more often as well show reasoning and resilience and patience, our relationships would last longer and become stronger.
Bravo.
I am giving you a six for those reasons, as well, nicely presented.
RGstar
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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I have heard something similar to this, yet, I like your rhetoric, as well all the metaphors used...the main...the hammer and roof.
If only we could think this way more often as well show reasoning and resilience and patience, our relationships would last longer and become stronger.
Bravo.
I am giving you a six for those reasons, as well, nicely presented.
RGstar
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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Very high praise from one of my favs! Thank you, sir.
