This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Rosie Meets Sir John"Veronica is sent back again
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Comment from alexisleech
Bravo, Sandra! The visuals in this chapter were excellent, and I was in the room with all the characters, every step of the way. Rosie is such a likable character, and I can just imagine the expression on her face when the goons went screaming to the door.
I think Sir John must be convinced by now, and if he isn't, then I'm sure Ver will change his mind!
Hugs from cloudy Glasgow,
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2018
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Bravo, Sandra! The visuals in this chapter were excellent, and I was in the room with all the characters, every step of the way. Rosie is such a likable character, and I can just imagine the expression on her face when the goons went screaming to the door.
I think Sir John must be convinced by now, and if he isn't, then I'm sure Ver will change his mind!
Hugs from cloudy Glasgow,
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 08-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2018
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Thank you so very much, Alexis, for the lovely 6 stars and the wonderful review. :)) I really appreciate all the support you have given me, and I'm thrilled you are still enjoying my story! Thank you! Big hugs from a drizzly UK. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from WriterFrancis
This was a very good piece of work, it was very well put. The words flowed like water on the page and went so smoothly together. Keep it up! XOXOXOXOXO
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2018
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This was a very good piece of work, it was very well put. The words flowed like water on the page and went so smoothly together. Keep it up! XOXOXOXOXO
Comment Written 08-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2018
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Hi there, and welcome to Fanstory! I am thrilled you enjoyed this part even though you've not read the rest. It's so encouraging that you were able to get something out of it. I'll be going to read your story. A big hug for the 6 stars!! xx Sandra
Comment from wordsfromsue
What a fun chapter, Sandra!!
I loved the way Veronica came in at the end and stepped up the terror campaign! What a hoot!
I can't wait to see how Rosie handles everything. :-)
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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What a fun chapter, Sandra!!
I loved the way Veronica came in at the end and stepped up the terror campaign! What a hoot!
I can't wait to see how Rosie handles everything. :-)
Comment Written 07-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thank you so very much for the 6 stars and wonderful review, my dear friend! You are really kind! Big hugs. :)) Sandra xxxx
Comment from Stephen Wilkes
You write very well and being British myself the implied accent is wonderful. It's a little difficult to give a full review based on reading one chapter I know but I have to say I became involved in the story immediately even at this late stage. I liked that much of the text is speech, a little like a play, it kept the story moving at quite a pace...keep writing my friend.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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You write very well and being British myself the implied accent is wonderful. It's a little difficult to give a full review based on reading one chapter I know but I have to say I became involved in the story immediately even at this late stage. I liked that much of the text is speech, a little like a play, it kept the story moving at quite a pace...keep writing my friend.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Hello, Stephen, and welcome to FanStory! Lovely to meet you. I'm delighted you enjoyed this part of the story, I know how difficult it must be to jump in this far into the story, so I really appreciate your comments. The fact you liked the dialect of some of my characters is high praise coming from a fellow English author. If you wanted to 'catch up' I've put a link at the bottom that will take you to a synopsis of the previous parts. If you have any problems moving around the site, drop me a message in my 'Contact' area, you'll find it on my profile page on the left-hand side. It can be daunting! Thank you for all your kind comments! Sandra xxx
Comment from Sugarray77
What a great read and continuing chapter in your story. You used a lot of vigorous language and action sequence to liven up this write. Well done on this.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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What a great read and continuing chapter in your story. You used a lot of vigorous language and action sequence to liven up this write. Well done on this.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thank you, sugarray, for this lovely review! I'm delighted you enjoyed reading it! Big hugs, my friend. Sandra xx
Comment from Zue65
I am excited as to how Veronica, the time traveler will turn around the story for Joe and Rosie. The plot is getting more and more intense and I will surely wait for the next post. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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I am excited as to how Veronica, the time traveler will turn around the story for Joe and Rosie. The plot is getting more and more intense and I will surely wait for the next post. Keep writing.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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She has a couple more tricks up her sleeve, lol. Thank you so much Susan, for your lovely review, I'm glad you enjoyed this part. Big hugs, my friend! Sandra xxx
Comment from Janilou
I want to go buy your book and read it from the beginning.
Loved this word "idjits" Too funny!
Sometimes when people use a lot of slang or local dialect, it is difficult to read. Not so here. Your characters feel completely natural and I can imagine listening to them speaking like that.
I found nothing to correct or edit.
Fabulous work.
Jan
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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I want to go buy your book and read it from the beginning.
Loved this word "idjits" Too funny!
Sometimes when people use a lot of slang or local dialect, it is difficult to read. Not so here. Your characters feel completely natural and I can imagine listening to them speaking like that.
I found nothing to correct or edit.
Fabulous work.
Jan
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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What a lovely thing to say, Jan! Thank you so much. The first book in this trilogy is doing really well, I'm just flying high with the reviews I've had, (more on the English Amazon site if you want to check them out. Which I would!! lol) What I liked most about your review was your comments on the dialect, it has to be 'readable' first time or you lose the reader. So, again, thank you!! Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Artasylum
And they say women avoid conflict... good for her! Even better she scared them. my hero. The words, font, colors surrounding the letters are all great... looking forward to more. yours, diana
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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And they say women avoid conflict... good for her! Even better she scared them. my hero. The words, font, colors surrounding the letters are all great... looking forward to more. yours, diana
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much for this delightful review, Diana, I'm so pleased you enjoyed the action in the piece. More coming soon. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Sir John looks quite the
gentleman in the picture, but
too bad he doesn't act like he looks!
-This is another excellent chapter, Sandra.
-I like how confident Joe is to talk
to Sir John about the plan.
-Sir John is interested until the request
for funds comes up; then, he becomes vehement,
as if he doesn't have the money!
-Ver. does a great job with Jake and Tod.
-You might say she threw the book at them:)
-Rosie is stunned, to say the least.
-Now we wait to see how the plan
will develop, as it is a sensible one.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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-Sir John looks quite the
gentleman in the picture, but
too bad he doesn't act like he looks!
-This is another excellent chapter, Sandra.
-I like how confident Joe is to talk
to Sir John about the plan.
-Sir John is interested until the request
for funds comes up; then, he becomes vehement,
as if he doesn't have the money!
-Ver. does a great job with Jake and Tod.
-You might say she threw the book at them:)
-Rosie is stunned, to say the least.
-Now we wait to see how the plan
will develop, as it is a sensible one.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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I think most wealthy people would become suspicious once the word, 'money' is mentioned. That's the way they get to be so rich. I think that's where I went wrong!! LOL. Now that Veronica has scared the living daylights out of the goons and left Sir John on his own ... what next? Thank you for another excellent review, Pam, and all the lovely stars! Lot's of big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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You are right about your observation of money, and the more you have. It is also part of Sir John's character, too, I think. You are welcome for the review and stars, Sandra. I guess you and Ver. will have to figure out what next!
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
So that's Sir John in the picture. Looks more like Charles Dickens, to me! lol
Sir John is a bit craftier than we assumed. Quite natural that he wouldn't just give Joe
a house and expenses, at least not without some major assurances.
Your ghostly, time-traveler escapade in Sir John's room
is good for laughs. I'm sure your readers will enjoy that scene
and it would play well in a movie or TV show someday (think positive).
There is little concern about consistency, though
with books flying across the room.
That seems a bit beyond Veronica's ability.
(just a thought from a fellow time traveler)
Perhaps some smaller objects, like pennies or pens or sharp pins, etc.
What could Rosie possibly be thinking?
Well done. Another fine chapter that doesn't yet resolve the problem
so the dilemma continues
Robert
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Hello Sandra,
So that's Sir John in the picture. Looks more like Charles Dickens, to me! lol
Sir John is a bit craftier than we assumed. Quite natural that he wouldn't just give Joe
a house and expenses, at least not without some major assurances.
Your ghostly, time-traveler escapade in Sir John's room
is good for laughs. I'm sure your readers will enjoy that scene
and it would play well in a movie or TV show someday (think positive).
There is little concern about consistency, though
with books flying across the room.
That seems a bit beyond Veronica's ability.
(just a thought from a fellow time traveler)
Perhaps some smaller objects, like pennies or pens or sharp pins, etc.
What could Rosie possibly be thinking?
Well done. Another fine chapter that doesn't yet resolve the problem
so the dilemma continues
Robert
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Charles Dickens! You might be right, the picture was one of hundreds and there wasn't a name on any of them. Perhaps Sir John is his brother!! LOL. The book, I was remembering the diary she used in the first book, but I think I'll make a change there anyway, so that the reader can visualise that scene and believe what she's throwing is feasible. I like it when you point out things like that, especially as you've been with me all the way through. Think positive, I like that, too. lol. Our Rosie is no pushover, her time is coming. Thank you, my friend, for this lovely, helpful review and all the lovely stars. Big hugs. Sandra xxxx
