Old Granny
Dribble Flash Fiction16 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
You invested a lot in this small write. the scene is written clearly and vividly. these are tricky things to pull off but you did a good job with this one.
Personally I can't wait for my second childhood.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
Hi there,
You invested a lot in this small write. the scene is written clearly and vividly. these are tricky things to pull off but you did a good job with this one.
Personally I can't wait for my second childhood.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to review.
Comment from Harry Smith
Well the picture said a lots about this short story that is very well written with lots and lots of imagery and the reader found it to be very interesting. I like the writers work.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
Well the picture said a lots about this short story that is very well written with lots and lots of imagery and the reader found it to be very interesting. I like the writers work.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thanks so much Harry. I appreciate it!
Comment from karenina
Awwww. This is like a Hallmark Dribble Flash Fiction! I'm a sucker for a happy ending and this is just too cuddly and sweet not to adore! The older I get the more romantic these gray haired romance scenario seem to me....
Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
Awwww. This is like a Hallmark Dribble Flash Fiction! I'm a sucker for a happy ending and this is just too cuddly and sweet not to adore! The older I get the more romantic these gray haired romance scenario seem to me....
Karenina
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thanks so much!! I appreciate it.
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I am not QUITE that old...but oh, God, hear my plea---bless such happiness to me!
Comment from JDRBAR
This captures so much more than I thought so few words could possibly do. It evokes a wonderful image of an old woman who can look back on her life with love and contentment.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
This captures so much more than I thought so few words could possibly do. It evokes a wonderful image of an old woman who can look back on her life with love and contentment.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
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Thanks so much for the good review.
Comment from Marge Setzer
Sweet bit of nostalgia without being saccharine. I can picture Granny in her shawl rocking back and forth sentimentally thinking about an old beau. I like the picture but am not sure about the pillows unless, of course, her beau was in the military. Or maybe you meant to say swing instead of rocker???? Thanks for sharing. Marge
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
Sweet bit of nostalgia without being saccharine. I can picture Granny in her shawl rocking back and forth sentimentally thinking about an old beau. I like the picture but am not sure about the pillows unless, of course, her beau was in the military. Or maybe you meant to say swing instead of rocker???? Thanks for sharing. Marge
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Thanks so much for the great review.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Dribble Flash Fiction writing prompt.
Your short story tells clearly of Granny's flashback to the porch swing.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
I think this is a good entry for the Dribble Flash Fiction writing prompt.
Your short story tells clearly of Granny's flashback to the porch swing.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Thanks so much!
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
I loved that your dribble flash fiction begins with a sound...it pulled me in. I could visualize the scene also with the shawl. You gave just enough descriptives to make it great. Well done!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
I loved that your dribble flash fiction begins with a sound...it pulled me in. I could visualize the scene also with the shawl. You gave just enough descriptives to make it great. Well done!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Thanks so much!! I really appreciate it!
Comment from Spitfire
Beautifully written prose with poetic devices: onomatopoeia with "creak, creak", alliteration with hunched and huddled. Dramatic use of ellipsis before the daring thought. Captures the coming of age for this old dear.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
Beautifully written prose with poetic devices: onomatopoeia with "creak, creak", alliteration with hunched and huddled. Dramatic use of ellipsis before the daring thought. Captures the coming of age for this old dear.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much for the great review and stars.
Comment from LIJ Red
Looks like a proper dribble flash to me, and calls memories of old folks in the nursing home, making some kind of motion on and on, and leaving you wondering what they think they are doing...excellent post.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
Looks like a proper dribble flash to me, and calls memories of old folks in the nursing home, making some kind of motion on and on, and leaving you wondering what they think they are doing...excellent post.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Thanks so much!
Comment from judiverse
Great verbs make this. Excellent atmosphere and setting with the porch swing. The word "granny" indicates age, especially with the addition of the shawl. The anticipated action was the kiss, which she had been anticipating. There is no age limit on romance. Great entry for this dribble fiction contest, and best of luck. judi
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
Great verbs make this. Excellent atmosphere and setting with the porch swing. The word "granny" indicates age, especially with the addition of the shawl. The anticipated action was the kiss, which she had been anticipating. There is no age limit on romance. Great entry for this dribble fiction contest, and best of luck. judi
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Thanks so much!!
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You're welcome. Great entry. judi