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Daily poems for April 2018

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Comment from BeasPeas
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Hi Christine. I am LOL! on this one. At least he knew what he was getting into when he married you. It sounds like you do a lot for him, too. Congratulations on your 44 years. An enjoyable write. Marilyn

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
    Hi Marilyn Thanks so much and yes he knew from the start but we haven't done too bad own everything now despite my spending and he would probably have a fit if he saw how much I spend on FS LOL Shhhh Cheers Christine
Comment from aryr
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This was a great poem, Christine, it was presented as a self evaluation which was honest. I am glad that your husband appreciates all that you do out of love and I smiled when I read that you were determined to spend his money. Very very enjoyable. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 05-Apr-2018
    Hi Ary, Thanks for reading my poem and yes still spending but I also work so we spend each others LOL Cheers Christine
reply by aryr on 05-Apr-2018
    You are so welcome, ahaaa that's a great plan.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This NAPOWRIMO poem, A Loving Wife, leaves many indications that the role of partner is being played well, though the purse strings may need a tighter tug.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
    Hi Bill, Thanks for your review and yes he is well looked after LOL so purse strings will remain untied Ha Ha No we share the money Cheers Christine
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
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This was a joy to read. You had so many details that were entertaining. Forty-four years of a love affair is a good reason to celebrate and it deserves a good poem such as this to be written to explain it to others. The ending was funny!

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
    Hi Cindy, thanks for reading my poem for this April daily write I thought it may be OK to share and yes I still spend al his money but he is still around LOL Cheers Christine
Comment from Susan B. Lamphier
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Nicely done! You gave me a chuckle, with a poem that tells me all about your marriage, in a rhyme scheme that is easily read. That couldn't have been easy, and you must have had quite a time crafting it. I was thinking, as I looked over all of your chores through 44 years of marriage, aren't you tired? ; )

Well done!

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
    Hi Susan, Yes at times LOL but the chores are easy with just us two bit the dog is the messy one A husky who shed hair everywhere . Not a bad effort 44 yrs so have no complaints and still money to spend Ha Ha. it was fun to write 2 down 28 to go Cheers Christine
Comment from lyenochka
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I love your humor. I make my husband's lunches, too. I think it's just one small way we show our love. Congratulations on the 44 years. We will celebrate only 37 - you're ahead of us.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
    Hi Helen, Well done for your 37 we have ours on the 17 th April so I guess this will have to be my 17 th poem on that date LOL .Yes a good innings so far and still spending Ha Ha Cheers Christine
Comment from Joy Graham
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You're a hoot, Chrissy :) After we pay the bills there isn't much left for me to spend here. You may spend your day picking up your husbands clothes and ironing his shirts, but I'm here reading and reviewing most of my day. David irons better than I do so he has always been the ironer of the family.

Way to go, two poems done and 28 still to go. This is more enjoyable than I initially thought.

Joy xx

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
    Hi Joy, Thank you and yes I know the Bills just keep coming in and seems to be rising all the same so money slips through easily. LOL I have durbed my spending of late as we are saving to go on a big holiday in Australia next year so we are both still working retirement soon . I hate ironing but won't wear unironed clothes so I guess I am the one. My husband is quite a handy man but I do the housework. Yes 28 to go better get busy . The days just goes and I spend enough time ( and money ) here also Cheers Christine
Comment from Mark Valentine
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Not that I would ever wish ill on anyone, but should (God forbid) something happen to your husband, would you marry me? Oh, wait, I'm married too - dang it!

As for poem # 2 - great rhymes - the enjambment and "second/reckoned" rhyme in the first couplet start this one off strong, and it stays strong to the finish. The iambic tetrameter is flawless as far as I can see. More importantly, the message is wonderful - it speaks to lasting love, and the kinds of things we do for our spouses out of that love.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
    Hi Mark, Thank you for your read and proposal but I will have to decline bigamy is not allowed here LOL. I had fun with this one and stretched the truth a wee bit for poetic licence however I do most of the housework and hes does pick up his clothes. Yes 44 years on the 17 April so that will be my theme for that days poem. we are a pretty go pair Cheers my friend Christine
Comment from Liberty Justice
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Chrissy how beautiful! Your testimonial of your 44 year marriage. You two are so blessed. Thousands of women like myself have husbands lovers who left us with broken hearts for another woman. So hurtful! Such a lovely caring poem. lol liberty justice

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
    Hi Liberty Justice, Thank you for reading my poem and yes we have made it through the years and pretty much well settled and share similar things although I am the gad about and do many things and he hs his mancave in the shed. LOL. It must be awful to be betrayed and I hope one day your find someone new. Cheers Christine
reply by Liberty Justice on 04-Apr-2018
    No, Chrissy, I am done with love and searching. I am destined to be without a man, and I am dealing with that! I will never give another man a chance to leave me for another woman and break my heart. lol liberty justice
Comment from William Ross
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Nice, seems to me your husband is very rich in having a very loving wife like you, wealth is not just money. Thanks for the share and have a great day.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
    Hi William, Thank you for your review and comments and yes you are quite right richness is not about money it is more important to have a rich relationship and we havent done to bad 44 yrs on 17 the April. Cheers Christine