Dewdrops And Snails
2-10-2 poem competition11 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This 2-10-2, Dewdrops and Snails, has the correct format and looks to the snail to indicate when the strategic exit is required. The pathway seems greased for smooth movement.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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This 2-10-2, Dewdrops and Snails, has the correct format and looks to the snail to indicate when the strategic exit is required. The pathway seems greased for smooth movement.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Comment from zanya
Yes a portrayal of the onset of Winter and some of its more specific aspects that remind us that the coldest season is about to unfold- their beauty shines through
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Yes a portrayal of the onset of Winter and some of its more specific aspects that remind us that the coldest season is about to unfold- their beauty shines through
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
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Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 2-10-2 writing prompt.
Your story of the beautiful winter is clear and well written within your verse.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 2-10-2 writing prompt.
Your story of the beautiful winter is clear and well written within your verse.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
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Comment from Katya
Almost. Not quite. I hate to give it a four and can't quite give it a five. I feel the "and" in the ten syllable line makes it a little too weak; I look for terrific intensity in these very short forms. But I can't imagine how to do away with the "and" and still keep the syllable count.
It's a good encapsulation of winter in a mild climate. Not just rain. Snails. Glistening.
Nice work!
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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Almost. Not quite. I hate to give it a four and can't quite give it a five. I feel the "and" in the ten syllable line makes it a little too weak; I look for terrific intensity in these very short forms. But I can't imagine how to do away with the "and" and still keep the syllable count.
It's a good encapsulation of winter in a mild climate. Not just rain. Snails. Glistening.
Nice work!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
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Comment from tfawcus
I don't mind the dewdrops glistening on the leaves but I'm at war with those blessed snails. All of the silver trails are leading straight into my vegetable patch!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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I don't mind the dewdrops glistening on the leaves but I'm at war with those blessed snails. All of the silver trails are leading straight into my vegetable patch!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Thank you. Must be their hiding place.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a funny relationship in effect between dewdrops and snails in winter as they make silvery trails that glisten in Nature making a good view to observe; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us; good luck with the contest. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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This speaks a funny relationship in effect between dewdrops and snails in winter as they make silvery trails that glisten in Nature making a good view to observe; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us; good luck with the contest. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
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Comment from Pamusart
This is about the sixth or seventh entry I have reviewed for this contest. This is a good entry. I think of winter, I think of ice and snow. The dew drop would be frozen! But, as winter yields to spring. That is when your scenario would occur. Still winter. But also spring. Hood luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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This is about the sixth or seventh entry I have reviewed for this contest. This is a good entry. I think of winter, I think of ice and snow. The dew drop would be frozen! But, as winter yields to spring. That is when your scenario would occur. Still winter. But also spring. Hood luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
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Comment from Gloria ....
This is lovely, even though with just the wording itself I wouldn't have conceived a snail, it works. That is the magic of poetry.
A beautiful presentation too so best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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This is lovely, even though with just the wording itself I wouldn't have conceived a snail, it works. That is the magic of poetry.
A beautiful presentation too so best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
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Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What an interesting title and topic. Love the artwork. The 2-10-2 format is a fun and challenging one. You did a good job telling a quick little story about the coming of the snails and their trails!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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What an interesting title and topic. Love the artwork. The 2-10-2 format is a fun and challenging one. You did a good job telling a quick little story about the coming of the snails and their trails!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
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Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Thanks for sharing your
2-10-2. Is such powerful syllables and words. And that color green signifies life and I love it and also green identifies with power and moving forward. Powerful statement in such few words. Thank you so much for sharing
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Thanks for sharing your
2-10-2. Is such powerful syllables and words. And that color green signifies life and I love it and also green identifies with power and moving forward. Powerful statement in such few words. Thank you so much for sharing
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
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