This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Joe is Angry!"Veronica is sent back again
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Comment from Brett Matthew West
Local dialect adds another dimension to the telling of this well crafted story. The characters easily come to life, especially "Rosie". Strong storyline makes for interesting reading.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Local dialect adds another dimension to the telling of this well crafted story. The characters easily come to life, especially "Rosie". Strong storyline makes for interesting reading.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Brett, that is so nice of you to say that. I did get a bit worried. I'm really pleased with you response and so glad it helps bring out my characters to their natural way of speaking. Which it is. Thank you! :) Sandra xx
Comment from Pamusart
No need to apologize for the dialect. It is integral to the story. I have now read at least three chapters and things are becoming more clear with each one. I got confused at first because I thought Joe had disappeared into the future. Caught up now. I look forward to the next chapter. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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No need to apologize for the dialect. It is integral to the story. I have now read at least three chapters and things are becoming more clear with each one. I got confused at first because I thought Joe had disappeared into the future. Caught up now. I look forward to the next chapter. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Joe did disappear into the future, but he's been back a little while now. He learnt how to make chocolate while he was there. Now he wants to make it and sell it. Chocolate bars were't around for another few years in his time. Now to get Sir John on board, or it will all collapse. Thank you so much, Pamusart, for the lovely review. I'm so pleased you have caught up and understand whats going on. Things are coming together slowly now. Big hugs, Sandra xxx
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Comment from l.raven
Hi Sandra, sure give a woman a chocolate company...and she'll follow you anywhere...or I would...the only thing the doctor said was alright today...was my blood sugar...hummmm...LOL...OK!!!...time to go see Mr. Crabby Patty....see if Joe can get so money...this was a great chapter my wonderful sweet friend...but I love them alllll...your story is very well written you...and very well told...love you muchoooooo....Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hi Sandra, sure give a woman a chocolate company...and she'll follow you anywhere...or I would...the only thing the doctor said was alright today...was my blood sugar...hummmm...LOL...OK!!!...time to go see Mr. Crabby Patty....see if Joe can get so money...this was a great chapter my wonderful sweet friend...but I love them alllll...your story is very well written you...and very well told...love you muchoooooo....Linda xxoo
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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LOL! Chocolate is a good comforter, as well as full of goodness that my body loves ... it seems to store a lot when I eat it! LOL. Thank you, dear friend, for the lovely, fun review! It's Mr Crabby Patty's turn next ... that'll be fun. Big hugs, my friend and love you lots too!!! xxxx Sandra xxxx
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you and me both sweet girl...I love the way it melts in my mouth...not in my hand...LOL...you are always sooooooo welcome...you and your family have a wonderful Easter Sunday my special friend...and tell Mr. Crabby Patty to leave Joe alone...I own a gun...LOL...time for some chocolate...yum...yum...loveeeeee to you all...Linda xxoo
Comment from Ricky1024
"Joe is Angry was well written with great theme and imagery.
I liked the depth here.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Thanks for this and have a blessed Easter Day.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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"Joe is Angry was well written with great theme and imagery.
I liked the depth here.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Thanks for this and have a blessed Easter Day.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Thank you so very much for the lovely review, Ricky, I really appreciate your comments. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Mistydawn
This is a very well-written very interesting story the characters quickly came to life. The description was perfect. I could see Joe steaming mad and Rossie taking out her frustrations on the washboard mumbling under her breath. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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This is a very well-written very interesting story the characters quickly came to life. The description was perfect. I could see Joe steaming mad and Rossie taking out her frustrations on the washboard mumbling under her breath. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Mistydawn! I'm delighted you enjoyed reading this part. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from giraffmang
Nice work in this chapter from yourself and especially old Joe...lol
and flounced out the door - I always say you can't beat a good flounce.
lad's eyes'll turn normal when 'es older."- technically this should be 'e's for the contraction of he's.
"Yeh aint going, and that's that!" - elsewhere you use the apostrophe for ain't.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Nice work in this chapter from yourself and especially old Joe...lol
and flounced out the door - I always say you can't beat a good flounce.
lad's eyes'll turn normal when 'es older."- technically this should be 'e's for the contraction of he's.
"Yeh aint going, and that's that!" - elsewhere you use the apostrophe for ain't.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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I still missed 2!! I went over and over, checking the speech tags, and missed the 'aint' and 'e's! LOL I'll get it right one time ... I hope! It's become a challenge now. Thank you so very much, my friend, for your wonderful help as always. I honestly appreciate your reviews. Big hugs, my friend and Happy Easter! Sandra xxxx
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, I must admit there are times when I have to reread some lines of your dialog to completely understand what's being said. But I've always enjoyed listening to people's different dialects in conversation, and since becoming addicted to your stories, I've learned to appreciate reading them too. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Well, I must admit there are times when I have to reread some lines of your dialog to completely understand what's being said. But I've always enjoyed listening to people's different dialects in conversation, and since becoming addicted to your stories, I've learned to appreciate reading them too. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Thank you so very much, Ric! That has made my day. It's a bit worrying sometimes when there is a lot of dialogue, and combined with the English UK spellings, lol, it's a lot to ask! Thank you my friend, for the lovely 6 stars. I really appreciate that. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Zue65
The local dialect is appropriate and made the story more credible. I like this chapter for it cleared some points and allowed me to follow the thread easily even though I was not able to review some previous chapters. Very well done.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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The local dialect is appropriate and made the story more credible. I like this chapter for it cleared some points and allowed me to follow the thread easily even though I was not able to review some previous chapters. Very well done.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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That is so nice to hear, Susan. Thank you so very much. I'm so pleased you are enjoying it. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from write hand blue
Hi Sandra, it looks like Veronica has got things under control for the good of Rosie, Joe and Francis. I like the interaction and period speech between the characters. The coming move to Bristol will give another dimension to the story, that's if Sir John agrees to all this.
Great work.
~Mel~ xxx
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Hi Sandra, it looks like Veronica has got things under control for the good of Rosie, Joe and Francis. I like the interaction and period speech between the characters. The coming move to Bristol will give another dimension to the story, that's if Sir John agrees to all this.
Great work.
~Mel~ xxx
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Thank you so very much, Mel, for your lovely review. I'm glad you mentioned the period speech, I never know if I've overdone it or not. The thing is, my characters would sound awful if they spoke 'correctly'. So thank you for that, also. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Katya
I enjoyed your characterization and dialogue. Good description as well. Having one character speak and think with a different dialect from the locals is a good device to help the reader stay oriented
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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I enjoyed your characterization and dialogue. Good description as well. Having one character speak and think with a different dialect from the locals is a good device to help the reader stay oriented
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Thank you so very much for you lovely review, Katya, for your really encouraging review. I'm delighted you enjoyed the dialogue! Big hugs, my friend. Sandra xx
