Comment from frogbook

Excellent

Whoa-that was just excellent, though not so much for the jellyfish! Very interesting pic and described very well. Great word choices.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018

Thanks, FB

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

It's hell ain't it? One minute you are, the next where the hell did you go? Despite it all, I would rather go through hell every day than die and become extinct, so I muddle through hoping that something good will one day come my way.

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018

Good things coming.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Quite a profound one, using the end of life of a jellyfish to remind us of mortality. I didn't know that jellyfish looked like that outside of water! My favorite lines were:
"gossamer turns globulent;
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indignity will complement"

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018

Thanks, lyenochka

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Bill, it does look like the lethal variety. I hope it wasn't what you meant in your very well written poem. One moment life was a joy, the next it was not. I liked it a lot. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018

Thanks, Ulla. Just an 'end-of-the-line' poem.

Comment from Cindy McIntyre

Excellent

"What was fluid is no cement," is very telling. And, "life was joy--and then it went" are honest to our society. Life does fly by so fast. I like that your short poem was filled with a life lesson. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018

Thanks, Cindy

Comment from cailinraine8

Excellent

aww such a sad end to the poor jellyfish... maybe there is jellyfish heaven, who knows what all exists in our many realms and galaxies... no one can judge after all. ha. I feel out of my element most of the time, I never did fit on this planet and still don't, but I have become ok with that. :) Seriously a nice job of this... one of my favourite words is "gossamer".. mmmmm. Nice.

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018

Thanks, Cailin

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Excellent work with your rhyme in this. I could care less about jellyfish, but your poem does give reason to reflect, as stated in your last line "Life was joy--then it went." It's a good thing when a poem like this has you reflecting on the meaning of life. We will have to ask the jellyfish. Excellent alliterative sound with "gossamer" and "globulent." Very thought provoking. judi

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018

Thanks, Judi

reply by judiverse on 24-Mar-2018

You're very welcome. judi

Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko

Excellent

The work reminisces the gory and undignified ending of a specie taken out of its tuft to face its wrath away from its natural environment.

The work highlights the collateral damage occasioned by the change of environment, and the specie's eventual demise.

The work earns its texture through the use of metaphor, oxymoron, assonance and alliteration.

Excellent work! Keep the flag flying!

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018

Thanks, Lloyd, for the thorough review. Bill

reply by Lloyd T. Okoko on 24-Mar-2018

Remain Blessed!

reply by Lloyd T. Okoko on 24-Mar-2018

Remain Blessed!

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Bill, This is a very well written poem about the jellyfish. You used very good descriptive words with an amazing picture to go with it. I do not know how you find some much to write about the jellyfish, but somehow you do! Great job. I did not see any spag or errors! Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018

Thanks, Teri

Comment from Alexander Vasa

Excellent

Hi Bill, this is witty. Did you make up that word glob.... I liked your poem. It's fun and descriptive. A story of the life and death of a jelly-fish in a succint and clever way. Thanks, Ana.

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018

Thanks, Ana. Yes, I couldn't find 'globulent' anywhere.

reply by Alexander Vasa on 24-Mar-2018

love it when people get creative with words, maybe i should call you Seuss,hahha