Fantasy
Inner reflection12 total reviews
Comment from karenina
I felt myself in that introspective twilight space h a great between awake a nd in a dream state...it was a warm and safe spot where I was free to drift in peace!
Karenina
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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I felt myself in that introspective twilight space h a great between awake a nd in a dream state...it was a warm and safe spot where I was free to drift in peace!
Karenina
Comment Written 25-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Yes. The past can be idealized creating a fantasy that can be used to improve the present. Thank you for your lovely review and give star rating
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It can be healing to revisit the past.....
Karenina
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is an excellent poem talking about inner reflection. I like the wording and the wonderful way that it flows and rhymes. I enjoyed reading this. Well done Pam!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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This is an excellent poem talking about inner reflection. I like the wording and the wonderful way that it flows and rhymes. I enjoyed reading this. Well done Pam!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Jeffrey for your lovely review and give star rating
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Rather mystical this time Pam. But so true sometime in life we go through different phases and some things become a fantasy because it haunts us from the past and stares us right in the face. The picture is somewhat abstract I guess that's what fantasies pro-ject
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Rather mystical this time Pam. But so true sometime in life we go through different phases and some things become a fantasy because it haunts us from the past and stares us right in the face. The picture is somewhat abstract I guess that's what fantasies pro-ject
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Mary for your lovely review and five star rating. Yes, it is an abstract called Howling Wolf
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
It may be simple but the rhyme is right on the button and very many layers make up this deceptively simple poem. It is a sign of a great writer that I enjoyed every moment and for this I must give you a six as you richly deserve. Kindest regards and well done love Meia x
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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It may be simple but the rhyme is right on the button and very many layers make up this deceptively simple poem. It is a sign of a great writer that I enjoyed every moment and for this I must give you a six as you richly deserve. Kindest regards and well done love Meia x
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Meia for your lovely review. Thank you for the six star rating. It is humbling. I really appreciate it. Keep writing
Comment from lyenochka
It's a pleasant yet profound reflection. I was struck by " fantasy of where I've been " which makes me think that our memories of the past may not be accurate but it bumps into today's reality and after reflection, both the "fantasy" and the "reality" fall into one cohesive view.
May I ask where are you from? As you rhyme "been" and "again" and these are different sounds for us on the west coast, we say these a bit differently. Just curious.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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It's a pleasant yet profound reflection. I was struck by " fantasy of where I've been " which makes me think that our memories of the past may not be accurate but it bumps into today's reality and after reflection, both the "fantasy" and the "reality" fall into one cohesive view.
May I ask where are you from? As you rhyme "been" and "again" and these are different sounds for us on the west coast, we say these a bit differently. Just curious.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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Thank you, lyenochka for your nice review and rating. I have always pronounced been as Ben. And so does everyone else I know. Again has a hard g and is pronounced a-gen. So to me they rhyme. I looked up and been can be pronounced bin. Is that what you are talking. Difficult when you do not know all of the dialects. Might be even easier to rhyme than I thought. However, everyone here will think they don?t rhyme. Lol
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Lol. I think you could convince me they rhyme. I pronounce 'been' more like 'bin' and again as 'agen.' Close. But you may find the English accents from around the world pronounce them very differently.
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Hi. I decided that no matter how I rhymed been it will be wrong for some people. So, I had to change the first two verses. Because the
first verse could no longer stand on its own.
?This fantasy came from the past
Arriving here to me at last
And when this happens, time disbands
Into a world I understand
The permanence I thought was mine
Could not believe the winds of time
I am somewhere in the middle
Center of forgotten riddles?
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I like it! Although I did like your original but only wondered about the rhyme. With this pair there's no question.
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Thank you for letting me know. I had no idea that most of the world pronounced been as bin. Take care.
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I can only speak for west coast US.
But it's fun to meet others who have different pronunciation especially from our friends in the southern hemisphere.
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I am from West Coast of US
and we all pronounce been as Ben
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Fascinating! Guess all use west coasters come from other parts of the country. My husband comes from the East cost.
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my husband also comes from the east coast he has a new england accent. from Boston
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a great poem of introspection, Pam. Travelling back through those times sometimes just happens when twigged by something else and once processed through a shower of greater self- acceptance can provide a measure of peace.
Thank you for sharing. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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This is a great poem of introspection, Pam. Travelling back through those times sometimes just happens when twigged by something else and once processed through a shower of greater self- acceptance can provide a measure of peace.
Thank you for sharing. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Gloria for your lovely review and five star review
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
In my candid understanding, the work reminisces a disposition akin to the prior state of the Prodigal son in the Bible before he resolved to go back to his father.
The work obliquely and creatively highlights the protagonist's recapitulation of his blissful past, the hurt and spinelessness the present moment inflicts on him and how the urge to bow to the blissful past lay HEAVY on his eyes.
This is an outstanding work. If not for anything, it sank down into my red bone marrows. Please, do keep this pattern and flag flying!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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In my candid understanding, the work reminisces a disposition akin to the prior state of the Prodigal son in the Bible before he resolved to go back to his father.
The work obliquely and creatively highlights the protagonist's recapitulation of his blissful past, the hurt and spinelessness the present moment inflicts on him and how the urge to bow to the blissful past lay HEAVY on his eyes.
This is an outstanding work. If not for anything, it sank down into my red bone marrows. Please, do keep this pattern and flag flying!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Lloyd for your wonderful review and five star rating
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Keep on flourishing!
Comment from Wetbelly01
I Like It!... I think you've got a splendid poem here...
Nice smooth rhythm and rhyme... Great subject matter...
Didn't come across any 'glitches'...
My compliments!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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I Like It!... I think you've got a splendid poem here...
Nice smooth rhythm and rhyme... Great subject matter...
Didn't come across any 'glitches'...
My compliments!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Wetbelly01 for your wonderful review and five star rating
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, very poetic inner reflections. I enjoyed your thoughtful verse. These are my favorite lines, the ones that resonated with me, and I think they are very true of everyone. Some reflection on the past is both futile and destroys one's peace.
'...A mind that glows with peace sublime
Does not need travel back in time ...'
Nicely written, and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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Hello, very poetic inner reflections. I enjoyed your thoughtful verse. These are my favorite lines, the ones that resonated with me, and I think they are very true of everyone. Some reflection on the past is both futile and destroys one's peace.
'...A mind that glows with peace sublime
Does not need travel back in time ...'
Nicely written, and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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I already wrote this once. Thank you for your lovely review and five star rating?
Comment from jaded831
The first two lines, to me, didn't quite rhyme. The rest of the poem had a great rhyme scheme. Your words were insightful and the flowed easy. They made me think, I like that. Your words stand alone. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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The first two lines, to me, didn't quite rhyme. The rest of the poem had a great rhyme scheme. Your words were insightful and the flowed easy. They made me think, I like that. Your words stand alone. Thanks for sharing.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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Thank you, jafec831 fir your review. Poetry does not always have to rhyme. Are you seriously deducting a full point for that?
