Attitude Adjustment Needed
2nd Place Winner: Diamante Contest Entry40 total reviews
Comment from Artasylum
I feel like I just took a journey from the bottom of the world and then was launched to the moon. this was a fun read... I had to read it twice to know where you were going with it. thanks, diana
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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I feel like I just took a journey from the bottom of the world and then was launched to the moon. this was a fun read... I had to read it twice to know where you were going with it. thanks, diana
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Hello Diana,
Thank you ever so much for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Diamantes are not everyone's favorite poetic format for expression, but I find them challenging and rewarding!
Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
I really liked this little poem
you have penned for it speaks
of the truths that nobody ever thinks about
loved it
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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I really liked this little poem
you have penned for it speaks
of the truths that nobody ever thinks about
loved it
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Hello Abby!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Comment from JDRBAR
A beautiful transition from a negative to a positive while keeping with the form of the poem. The words are so very true and should be taped to every bathroom mirror in America.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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A beautiful transition from a negative to a positive while keeping with the form of the poem. The words are so very true and should be taped to every bathroom mirror in America.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
So very much appreciated!
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Apathy
indifferent, insensitive
uncaring, unwilling, unfeeling
jaded disinterest (disinterest), responsive concern....all of the threats to our modern life and you describe it so well. Apathy is the enemy of us all kindest regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Apathy
indifferent, insensitive
uncaring, unwilling, unfeeling
jaded disinterest (disinterest), responsive concern....all of the threats to our modern life and you describe it so well. Apathy is the enemy of us all kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Hello Meia,
Thank you ever so much for your excellent rating and thoughtful review.
So pleased you appreciate my diamante...
Comment from Bill Schott
This diamante, Attitude Adjustment Needed, has the correct format and shows the necessary mind shift that is required to move from from our extinction course to a positive and life-affirming future.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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This diamante, Attitude Adjustment Needed, has the correct format and shows the necessary mind shift that is required to move from from our extinction course to a positive and life-affirming future.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Hello Bill,
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review.
So appreciated!
Comment from Swampfox1
I am still learning about these types of poems. I find that you did do a good job at putting this together, and that is what counts. It is just as good as the example and that makes it a great job. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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I am still learning about these types of poems. I find that you did do a good job at putting this together, and that is what counts. It is just as good as the example and that makes it a great job. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your excellent rating and review!
Diamantes are not everyone's favorite poetic format, but they are fun and challenging to pen!
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You are correct. Thanks for sharing. They certainly are very challenging.
Comment from apky
This is what we call in German "starker Tabak" - strong tobacco.
It made me imagine you as an artist with a canvas, splashing the colours hard, furiously, dipping again and again into the strongest shades and using them generously to make them stand out vividly. To shake society awake and aware.
Really an excellent splash wisdom.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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This is what we call in German "starker Tabak" - strong tobacco.
It made me imagine you as an artist with a canvas, splashing the colours hard, furiously, dipping again and again into the strongest shades and using them generously to make them stand out vividly. To shake society awake and aware.
Really an excellent splash wisdom.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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Oh my goodness!
I don't speak German, but I surely love that phrase! "Starker Tabak!" That sounds like a wonderful title for a new poem! :)
Thank you so much for your excellent rating and thoughtful review. Even if I have managed to "nudge" society awake and aware, it's a step in the right direction! Thank you, again!
Comment from Pamusart
I would suggest capitalizing Responsive. Leaving in lower case implies it is another adjective for Apathy.
This is a good entry for the contest. I did not count syllables ir words.
One more point. Apathy is a noun. Responsive is an adjective. In case you care. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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I would suggest capitalizing Responsive. Leaving in lower case implies it is another adjective for Apathy.
This is a good entry for the contest. I did not count syllables ir words.
One more point. Apathy is a noun. Responsive is an adjective. In case you care. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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Hello Pam,
There is no need to capitalize responsive. It is an adjective, placed in the fourth line to serve as a descriptor of the upcoming antonym, compassion = responsive concern
There is no need to count syllables in a diamante, but if you had, surprisingly, there are equal syllables in all but one line.
Apathy IS a noun; Compassion is the end noun/antonym that I chose to lead the reader. Thus Compassion IS capitalized.
Thank you for stopping by...and for your excellent rating...
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No, I did not count syllables. I just did not know you were listing antonyms. I had no clue
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There is a description of the form and requirements of a diamante that FanStory included/posted on the bottom of each participant's poem. Very informative. It takes a reader/writer step by step as to what type of words are required in a diamante and the progression from the beginning word to is concluding antonym. The diamante is not everyone's favorite poetic form, but it is challenging and rewarding to pen.
Comment from LIJ Red
A thought strikes me, I might have gone from apathy to empathy, just to beat the same sound into beginning and end...not a criticism, just an idea, Excellent diamante.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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A thought strikes me, I might have gone from apathy to empathy, just to beat the same sound into beginning and end...not a criticism, just an idea, Excellent diamante.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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Hello LIJ,
I toyed with empathy, but as I researched more about the intricacies, nuances, and subtleties of the word, compassion struck a deeper note/chord with me and my message
Thank you for your suggestion, however!
And thank you for your excellent rating and review. So appreciated.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Wow, the extensive author notes really help the reader with this post. I loved your diamante poem. It reminded me of the saying, 'the reason bad men prosper, is because good men do nothing..." Not word for word, but something like that. I agree with the sentiment of your writing, though, apathy is a killer, and our responsibility as members of planet Earth is for us to take responsibility. Thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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Wow, the extensive author notes really help the reader with this post. I loved your diamante poem. It reminded me of the saying, 'the reason bad men prosper, is because good men do nothing..." Not word for word, but something like that. I agree with the sentiment of your writing, though, apathy is a killer, and our responsibility as members of planet Earth is for us to take responsibility. Thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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Hello Ana,
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review. I always remember my 9th grade English teacher sharing with our class that "Apathy is man's greatest sin." Those words resonated so powerfully with me all those years ago; they still do...
So pleased you enjoyed...
