The Gift from God
With every loss comes a gift8 total reviews
Comment from Pamusart
This is a good entry for the contest. Sounds clinical. Like for every action there is an equal and opposite reaction. Maybe it is a law of the universe that everything must always in balance. It is pretty amazing that our universe gets up each day and colors our world. It knows when Harmony is missing. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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This is a good entry for the contest. Sounds clinical. Like for every action there is an equal and opposite reaction. Maybe it is a law of the universe that everything must always in balance. It is pretty amazing that our universe gets up each day and colors our world. It knows when Harmony is missing. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Saying a poem is clinical sounds bad - was that your intent? I.e., should I change it? Thanks
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Oh no. Sorry. I did not mean your poem was clinical. It just made me think about action/reaction and harmony of the universe. I thought maybe MY THINKING was clinical. Nothing clinical about your poem. It is beautiful
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A bitter sweet write Frank, losses are grief filled and our blessings seem few, but as you say we need to count them, wise words and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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A bitter sweet write Frank, losses are grief filled and our blessings seem few, but as you say we need to count them, wise words and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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And there is my favorite critic - your words always carry insight. Cheers Frank
Comment from tfawcus
I agree with the intention here. There is always a silver lining if one looks hard enough. My only slight criticism is that the poem's meaning is somewhat obscure without the accompanying notes ie it depends on them for its meaning.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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I agree with the intention here. There is always a silver lining if one looks hard enough. My only slight criticism is that the poem's meaning is somewhat obscure without the accompanying notes ie it depends on them for its meaning.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Changed toll for loss - maybe better at standing alone?
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Yes, I think that?s an improvement.
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still needs more? - in some ways it weakens the feel - but needing an explanation is never good for art of any form one might think- Thanks
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks the true belief that every loss comes with a gift for what we lose becomes less than gifts from God always bountiful; well written, well done; thank you for sharing this with us; good luck with the contest. B A CHANGE INSPIRER-WRITER -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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This speaks the true belief that every loss comes with a gift for what we lose becomes less than gifts from God always bountiful; well written, well done; thank you for sharing this with us; good luck with the contest. B A CHANGE INSPIRER-WRITER -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thanks
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written six-word poem. God's gift is free to all who love the truth of His word and obey His call. We find His gift in the fruits of the Spirit of love and hope.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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A very well-written six-word poem. God's gift is free to all who love the truth of His word and obey His call. We find His gift in the fruits of the Spirit of love and hope.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thanks
Comment from Sherman541
A very beautiful picture of a very sweet little girl. A very lovely six word poem. A true statement, a lot of work they are, but so worth all of the work. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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A very beautiful picture of a very sweet little girl. A very lovely six word poem. A true statement, a lot of work they are, but so worth all of the work. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thanks
Comment from oliver818
Great poem, it's so short but has a solid character to it. I like the contrast you make with toll and bountiful. It works really well. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Great poem, it's so short but has a solid character to it. I like the contrast you make with toll and bountiful. It works really well. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thank You!
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Only six words for this competition. I like yours, you've chosen well, and the priest gave good advice that you've made good use of it in this verse. I have no suggestions for improvement, and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Only six words for this competition. I like yours, you've chosen well, and the priest gave good advice that you've made good use of it in this verse. I have no suggestions for improvement, and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Yes priests have a way of saying things! Thanks
