His Gift to Us
He thought we were worth it33 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
Here we have a retelling of the gospel story of the crucifixion in rhyme over twenty-two lines. It is this total that causes the only problem i have with the poem which, in its present form is likely to be disqualified as a minimum of twenty-four lines is required according to the rules published by the contest sponsor. For that reason alone I can only award four stars. If you can remedy this to comply with the contest requirements I would be appy to reassess.
2nd Review.
The added two lines bring this into compliance and fit seamlessly into the whole. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Here we have a retelling of the gospel story of the crucifixion in rhyme over twenty-two lines. It is this total that causes the only problem i have with the poem which, in its present form is likely to be disqualified as a minimum of twenty-four lines is required according to the rules published by the contest sponsor. For that reason alone I can only award four stars. If you can remedy this to comply with the contest requirements I would be appy to reassess.
2nd Review.
The added two lines bring this into compliance and fit seamlessly into the whole. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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I will do that. thanks.
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I added the lines. Thank you.
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I have added to my review and regarded as promised.
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Thank you.
Comment from TPAC
A captivating account of the Holy Text story, the king who served his lower brethren, attempting to inform them of their unrighteous deeds. I found it a pleasant read with comforting views.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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A captivating account of the Holy Text story, the king who served his lower brethren, attempting to inform them of their unrighteous deeds. I found it a pleasant read with comforting views.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much. I appreciate that.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the crucifiction of Jesus who sacrificed his life to save the lives of human beings because we are worthy in God's eyes. He thought we are worthy, but are we
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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A very well-written poem about the crucifiction of Jesus who sacrificed his life to save the lives of human beings because we are worthy in God's eyes. He thought we are worthy, but are we
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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You're so right. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from nomi338
Sadly he is being looked down on and opposed to this day. Hatred, violence immorality, greed, false religious prideful teaching, false prophets abound throughout the land selling the good news which was to be told for free. The day is coming when all the haters, the scoffers will gnash their teeth in recognition of the price they will have to pay for their sinful ways.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Sadly he is being looked down on and opposed to this day. Hatred, violence immorality, greed, false religious prideful teaching, false prophets abound throughout the land selling the good news which was to be told for free. The day is coming when all the haters, the scoffers will gnash their teeth in recognition of the price they will have to pay for their sinful ways.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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That day will come and I worry about the scoffers. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Zue65
Writers in this site that glorify God in their poetry are the true warriors of God. Evangelizing and bringing the gospel to the readers through writing is such a noble purpose that all Christians must seek. Thanks for inspiring us.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Writers in this site that glorify God in their poetry are the true warriors of God. Evangelizing and bringing the gospel to the readers through writing is such a noble purpose that all Christians must seek. Thanks for inspiring us.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thank you for reviewing. Much appreciated.
Comment from Octavia
This was lovely, mystery author. The rhyme and meter, sonnet perfect. Even better when read aloud. I think this is the most inspiring part of the Bible. Jesus, after all the amazing miracles, shatters the last fear - overcoming even death.
Great job!
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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This was lovely, mystery author. The rhyme and meter, sonnet perfect. Even better when read aloud. I think this is the most inspiring part of the Bible. Jesus, after all the amazing miracles, shatters the last fear - overcoming even death.
Great job!
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for these lovely remarks.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
We know the Lamb of God who came to earth
was crucified and died to prove our worth.' A stunning and moving tribute to the Lord Jesus Christ I loved it it was so well written and put together, intensely moving kindest regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2018
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We know the Lamb of God who came to earth
was crucified and died to prove our worth.' A stunning and moving tribute to the Lord Jesus Christ I loved it it was so well written and put together, intensely moving kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2018
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What a wonderful review, Meia. Thank you so much.
Comment from Sherman541
Very nicely rhymed and though sad, you have told a wonderful and happy story. Easter is upon us and we are again, as every year celebrating the re-birth of Christ. Happy to know he was chosen to save us all from sin. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2018
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Very nicely rhymed and though sad, you have told a wonderful and happy story. Easter is upon us and we are again, as every year celebrating the re-birth of Christ. Happy to know he was chosen to save us all from sin. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2018
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Thank you for this wonderful review. It's very much appreciated.
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you are most welcome :)
Comment from Henry King
An excellent retelling of the crucifixion and rising of Christ in poetic form. While the rhyme pattern founders at times, the crafted words make the story complete. The meaning is clear enough for every reader to comprehend the author's belief and intent. Well Done.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2018
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An excellent retelling of the crucifixion and rising of Christ in poetic form. While the rhyme pattern founders at times, the crafted words make the story complete. The meaning is clear enough for every reader to comprehend the author's belief and intent. Well Done.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2018
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Where did you think it foundered? I deliberately changed meter in places to break it up. Thank you for very nice remarks.
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I wanted to explain better. I didn't want to sound argumentative. The little short parts are Pantygynt form. I thought it would break the monotony of the long poem. I appreciate your review very much. Even though you thought it foundered, you still gave me a lovely five. Thank you.
Yvonne
Comment from ameen786
Perfect timing with this spiritual write that captures the essence of Christianity in simple down to earth vocabulary that's so meaningful in excellent rhymes; thanks for sharing and good luck!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2018
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Perfect timing with this spiritual write that captures the essence of Christianity in simple down to earth vocabulary that's so meaningful in excellent rhymes; thanks for sharing and good luck!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2018
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Thank you for this wonderful review. I'm glad so glad you liked it.
