His Gift to Us
He thought we were worth it33 total reviews
Comment from Alexander Vasa
What a beautiful poem for the Easter season. You show the trials of Christ very poetically in your well-written verse. I loved it and saw nothing wrong or jarring. Definitely a poem I would recommend to others for review, Ana.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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What a beautiful poem for the Easter season. You show the trials of Christ very poetically in your well-written verse. I loved it and saw nothing wrong or jarring. Definitely a poem I would recommend to others for review, Ana.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much. What a lovely thing to say. Much appreciated.
Comment from Aussie
SPAG: whom they CONDEMNED (with respect.) I found your poetry a little choppy in parts. It seems more like a story than a poem.. I tripped over the line ' Man whose life was stemmed," you can stem the flow of blood, is this what you meant? Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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SPAG: whom they CONDEMNED (with respect.) I found your poetry a little choppy in parts. It seems more like a story than a poem.. I tripped over the line ' Man whose life was stemmed," you can stem the flow of blood, is this what you meant? Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thank you for reviewing. The word is 'contemned,' meaning to look on with disdain. It was explained in the author notes.
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Yep, My mistake, never come across the word before - to loathe I looked it up. Have a good day. XXK.
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Thank you. You, too. 8-)
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a visually spiritual poem, both in fluid rhyme and imagery - beautifully presented and smoothly constructed in font and format - a perfect poem for the upcoming Easter Holiday - fully compliant with the prompt - best of luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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In my opinion, a visually spiritual poem, both in fluid rhyme and imagery - beautifully presented and smoothly constructed in font and format - a perfect poem for the upcoming Easter Holiday - fully compliant with the prompt - best of luck in the contest...
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thank you. I appreciate this great review.
Comment from Joy Graham
Hello Mystery Poet,
I like the way you told this as a story. It makes complete sense to me, whereas I often find sacred poets tend to get all fancy talking and lose credibility. Just give me straight talk and I'm there.
It always bothers me the way Jesus was mistreated and how society was so blind about what they had right before them. You brought out these emotions in me as I read about them throwing dice to see who gets the possessions of the condemned.
Thank goodness the world has changed from back then. I like to think the courts are fair and just now.
Best wishes to you in this contest. You have a terrific contest entry.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Hello Mystery Poet,
I like the way you told this as a story. It makes complete sense to me, whereas I often find sacred poets tend to get all fancy talking and lose credibility. Just give me straight talk and I'm there.
It always bothers me the way Jesus was mistreated and how society was so blind about what they had right before them. You brought out these emotions in me as I read about them throwing dice to see who gets the possessions of the condemned.
Thank goodness the world has changed from back then. I like to think the courts are fair and just now.
Best wishes to you in this contest. You have a terrific contest entry.
Joy xx
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thank you for these lovely comments. It means a lot to me.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Well rhymed and great flow and ideal for the contest, I loved your words, first stanza, last line (condemned) is misspelt, easily fixed. 'The greatest story ever told', and you added your words to this story that made it very special indeed, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Well rhymed and great flow and ideal for the contest, I loved your words, first stanza, last line (condemned) is misspelt, easily fixed. 'The greatest story ever told', and you added your words to this story that made it very special indeed, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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No, the word is 'contemned,' meaning to look on with disdain. It was explained in my author notes. Thank you for a great review, even though you thought it was misspelled. I appreciate that.
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Oh so sorry I didn?t read the notes, sorry about that, I loved your poem, love Dolly x
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Thanks. I'm so glad.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is a very well written Easter poem my friend. Jesus took on all our burdens and died that day so that we might live. You tell the story well. xxx Nancy
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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This is a very well written Easter poem my friend. Jesus took on all our burdens and died that day so that we might live. You tell the story well. xxx Nancy
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thank you. I'm so glad you think so.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Yes, Christ died for those who despised Him as well as those who loved Him. We really don't fully realize the sacrifice made for us that day. All the sins of the world on one Man, past, present and future. So glad He rose and is coming again. Hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Yes, Christ died for those who despised Him as well as those who loved Him. We really don't fully realize the sacrifice made for us that day. All the sins of the world on one Man, past, present and future. So glad He rose and is coming again. Hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the support and good wishes.
Comment from RGstar
A nice journey to a story known by every corner of the world, and you told it your way, in which I like.
I like the fact that you used Roman Soldiers as your focus image, instead of the clichéd images.
Well done, for it gives a new edge to what is written.
Bravo.
A little mistake in ' contemmed' a slip of the keyboard.
Have a good Easter, and good luck in the competition.
Best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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A nice journey to a story known by every corner of the world, and you told it your way, in which I like.
I like the fact that you used Roman Soldiers as your focus image, instead of the clichéd images.
Well done, for it gives a new edge to what is written.
Bravo.
A little mistake in ' contemmed' a slip of the keyboard.
Have a good Easter, and good luck in the competition.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thank you for a lovely review. I really appreciate it. The work is 'contemned,' meaning to look on with disdain. It's explained in the author notes.
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Ok, I see. Not familiar with it. Thank you, author. Best wishes.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Dear Anonymous Poet;
Your poetry tells His story well. The soldiers gambling at His feet had no idea the miracle they were witnessing. Sometimes I wish for a time machine to go back to the day He made His sacrifice. It was a powerful day, and one we all need to remember.
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Dear Anonymous Poet;
Your poetry tells His story well. The soldiers gambling at His feet had no idea the miracle they were witnessing. Sometimes I wish for a time machine to go back to the day He made His sacrifice. It was a powerful day, and one we all need to remember.
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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I wish the same. I can only imagine it. Thank you for a great review and good wishes.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the He Is Risen (Easter Celebration) writing prompt.
Well written and the story of Jesus is clear and well told.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the He Is Risen (Easter Celebration) writing prompt.
Well written and the story of Jesus is clear and well told.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thank you. I appreciate that.
