What More Will It Take?
A Pantoum56 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
Beautiful. I was introduced to this style by a former site member Brooke Baldwin, I tried my hand at it and was successful to a degree. However, I went back to my comfort zone of just mainly writing rhyming quatrains. This poem is very good and the thoughts you pose are intriguing. Maybe instead of us looking skywards with our eyes, maybe we should look skywards with our hearts.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Beautiful. I was introduced to this style by a former site member Brooke Baldwin, I tried my hand at it and was successful to a degree. However, I went back to my comfort zone of just mainly writing rhyming quatrains. This poem is very good and the thoughts you pose are intriguing. Maybe instead of us looking skywards with our eyes, maybe we should look skywards with our hearts.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review.
You are not the first individual who shared to look skywards "with our hearts." Wonderful thought...
Thank you again!
diane
Comment from lyenochka
This is a deep philosophical pantoum. I like the reflection of how much we can study and know but still lack soul. One would think with all our progress technologically, we would have also grown morally, but our human failings continue. I like the repetition of the first line at then changes from thoughts of space travel to perhaps seeking God for answers.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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This is a deep philosophical pantoum. I like the reflection of how much we can study and know but still lack soul. One would think with all our progress technologically, we would have also grown morally, but our human failings continue. I like the repetition of the first line at then changes from thoughts of space travel to perhaps seeking God for answers.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review.
Wish I had the answer...
So appreciative of your kind words...
diane
Comment from Liberty Justice
Oh my, what a complicated and difficult sounding rhyme scheme to make. Indeed, you are such a poetical genius to pull the complex poetical makeup off. Your verses are well thought out and are dramatic in speaking of the chaos and conflicts going on in the world. NICE. Good luck. liberty justice
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Oh my, what a complicated and difficult sounding rhyme scheme to make. Indeed, you are such a poetical genius to pull the complex poetical makeup off. Your verses are well thought out and are dramatic in speaking of the chaos and conflicts going on in the world. NICE. Good luck. liberty justice
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Hello Liberty Justice,
Thank you for stopping by and for our excellent rating and thoughtful review...
So appreciated!
diane
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Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"What More Will It Take?" is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece.
This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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"What More Will It Take?" is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece.
This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Hello Duchess!
So pleased you stopped by.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review...
dian
dian,
it was pleasant to stop by.
Best wishes and God bless you,
the Duchess
Comment from TPAC
Tingling viewpoints targeting man abilities, perceived wrong or right of their conception, with pondering to the forth coming future. A thought-provoking read with many deposited delights. In my opinion of this write.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Tingling viewpoints targeting man abilities, perceived wrong or right of their conception, with pondering to the forth coming future. A thought-provoking read with many deposited delights. In my opinion of this write.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Hello TPAC
So pleased you stopped by and appreciated my offering.
Thank you!
diane
Comment from The kurlman
Mrs. KT, your writing is so easy to read. It not only has subject matter but it flows off
of your lips like an old rhyme. I think because you were a teacher, you really make sure what you write, is DEEP, and IMPORTANT, not silly or flimsy. Good job. The kurlman
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Mrs. KT, your writing is so easy to read. It not only has subject matter but it flows off
of your lips like an old rhyme. I think because you were a teacher, you really make sure what you write, is DEEP, and IMPORTANT, not silly or flimsy. Good job. The kurlman
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
I surely love your description of how I write! Not too many frills; that is for certain!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from MissMerri
Very nice pantoum Diane. You've handled this difficult rhyme scheme amazingly well and your poem flows nicely and makes much sense. There are some very memorable lines in this... such as, "Educated, advanced, but possessing no soul..." and also,
"Yet fears and insecurities we are always sowing," This is definitely a poem to make one stop and think. I enjoyed reading it more than once. Thanks for sharing. MM
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Very nice pantoum Diane. You've handled this difficult rhyme scheme amazingly well and your poem flows nicely and makes much sense. There are some very memorable lines in this... such as, "Educated, advanced, but possessing no soul..." and also,
"Yet fears and insecurities we are always sowing," This is definitely a poem to make one stop and think. I enjoyed reading it more than once. Thanks for sharing. MM
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend!
So pleased you enjoyed my pantoum!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review...
diane
Comment from Octavia
Pantoum's are difficult to write with a smooth flow but you managed quite well. Very creative with a strong message for mankind - when will the madness end?
Rhyme scheme was flawless!
Great job.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Pantoum's are difficult to write with a smooth flow but you managed quite well. Very creative with a strong message for mankind - when will the madness end?
Rhyme scheme was flawless!
Great job.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Hello Octavia!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
diane
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a smoothly flowing poem, with a clear message of a lesson in futility, if circumstances remain the same - profound in approach and presentation - while I can appreciate the effort in writing this form, it is a bit too contrived for me...
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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In my opinion, a smoothly flowing poem, with a clear message of a lesson in futility, if circumstances remain the same - profound in approach and presentation - while I can appreciate the effort in writing this form, it is a bit too contrived for me...
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Hello Eve!
So pleased you enjoyed my pantoum.
I find it a bit contrived as well, but I so appreciate the challenge of attempting new forms... (This one is a bugger!)
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from karenina
Alrighty then. Despite the inevitable migraine I have when I finish one, the Pantoum is hands down my favorite form to write.... That is not to say I have perfected it, or do not have to write the schematic on a legal pad before embarking on a poetic journey...but I so love the intertwining French braid of words and phrases that I am always enraptured in reading the form or writing it! Just awesome!
Karenina
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Alrighty then. Despite the inevitable migraine I have when I finish one, the Pantoum is hands down my favorite form to write.... That is not to say I have perfected it, or do not have to write the schematic on a legal pad before embarking on a poetic journey...but I so love the intertwining French braid of words and phrases that I am always enraptured in reading the form or writing it! Just awesome!
Karenina
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Hello Karenina!
You really love a pantoum? You are the very first reviewer to share that with me! Most find it too challenging or contrived. I just love the challenge it presents! (But my favorite forms are tetractys, cleave, or sestina... and free verse!)
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review!
diane
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Karenina
