Snow Garden
6 word poem contest13 total reviews
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello!
The message and feel of your poem has much potential. With only six words with which to craft your poem/message, economy of thought is required. I would take a look at the two words of "is" and "the." They are what some writers call "nothing" words. Since you are dealing with words and not syllables, you need to maximize your message. Easily done by adding descriptors: blankets, covers, encases, etc. where is and the are now present.
Just a thought, but I hope it helps... Best Wishes
diane
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Hello!
The message and feel of your poem has much potential. With only six words with which to craft your poem/message, economy of thought is required. I would take a look at the two words of "is" and "the." They are what some writers call "nothing" words. Since you are dealing with words and not syllables, you need to maximize your message. Easily done by adding descriptors: blankets, covers, encases, etc. where is and the are now present.
Just a thought, but I hope it helps... Best Wishes
diane
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your review and advice-I will consider changing it.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written six word poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good words and lovely art work to go with your words. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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This is a very well written six word poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good words and lovely art work to go with your words. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thank you
Comment from apky
This looks so much like our garden looked a few days ago - in April - with snow covering some of the colourful flowers that had struggled out to announce spring.
Your six word poem is appropriate for the contest.
Good luck with it.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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This looks so much like our garden looked a few days ago - in April - with snow covering some of the colourful flowers that had struggled out to announce spring.
Your six word poem is appropriate for the contest.
Good luck with it.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thank you
Comment from tfawcus
The white covering does seem to accentuate the partly hidden colours of the garden. I wondered, however, if you had any particular reason for reversing the more normal word order?
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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The white covering does seem to accentuate the partly hidden colours of the garden. I wondered, however, if you had any particular reason for reversing the more normal word order?
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your review. No reason in particular-Happy Easter
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written six-word poem about a snow garden that is the most colorful winter garden wonderland one can wish for. A great photo to complement your poem.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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A very well-written six-word poem about a snow garden that is the most colorful winter garden wonderland one can wish for. A great photo to complement your poem.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Thank you
Comment from Ricky1024
Snow Garden is a 6 word contest entry kind of hard to review and six word but I'll give it a try this was well written rich in Theme and imagery.
It flowed well read well there wasn't any grammar issues.
Being only six words in one line, Adjective Content and Objective Content...
(Along with the Descriptive Measures)
Lined up perfectly.
Good luck in the contest Dr. Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Snow Garden is a 6 word contest entry kind of hard to review and six word but I'll give it a try this was well written rich in Theme and imagery.
It flowed well read well there wasn't any grammar issues.
Being only six words in one line, Adjective Content and Objective Content...
(Along with the Descriptive Measures)
Lined up perfectly.
Good luck in the contest Dr. Ricky 1024
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thank you
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Very lovely. I adore the photo that accompanies your poem. How challenging to write such a short poem, but you have pulled it off. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Very lovely. I adore the photo that accompanies your poem. How challenging to write such a short poem, but you have pulled it off. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thank you
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Magic Dragon, with only six words you paint a pretty picture with your words. A cold one, too. Good job! I enjoyed it and your nicely chosen picture, which compliments your verse so effectively. I notice it is for the competition, so best of luck with this entry, thanks, Ana.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Hello Magic Dragon, with only six words you paint a pretty picture with your words. A cold one, too. Good job! I enjoyed it and your nicely chosen picture, which compliments your verse so effectively. I notice it is for the competition, so best of luck with this entry, thanks, Ana.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thank you
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Six Woed Poetry writing prompt.
Your story of the garden covered with snow is clear in so few words.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Six Woed Poetry writing prompt.
Your story of the garden covered with snow is clear in so few words.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Thank you
Comment from rama devi
I like the inner meaning of this...all the colors are united by sharing the same fate of being 'whitened' with snow. When people of different races and backgrounds share the same hardships, equality abounds. Well portrayed. Nice picture. Good flow. Good luck!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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I like the inner meaning of this...all the colors are united by sharing the same fate of being 'whitened' with snow. When people of different races and backgrounds share the same hardships, equality abounds. Well portrayed. Nice picture. Good flow. Good luck!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 25-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Thank you
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*welcome* :)
