Echoing Silence
Naani contest entry39 total reviews
Comment from William Ross
Well done on the naani, time doesn't seem to heal all wounds many last for ever. Nicely done, good luck on this and have a wonderful day
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2018
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Well done on the naani, time doesn't seem to heal all wounds many last for ever. Nicely done, good luck on this and have a wonderful day
Comment Written 15-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2018
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Hello William,
Thank you for your excellent review!
It didn't fare too well in the contest, but I surely enjoyed penning it...
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Another sad poem, Diane. I know this is true, time cannot erase a memory, sometimes it's a nice memory, but sometimes it's not and it stays to eat away at you.
Well done, another well written contest entry. Good luck! :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2018
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Another sad poem, Diane. I know this is true, time cannot erase a memory, sometimes it's a nice memory, but sometimes it's not and it stays to eat away at you.
Well done, another well written contest entry. Good luck! :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 15-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2018
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Hello Sandra,
Thank you for your excellent rating and perceptive review.
This little offering didn't fare too well in the contest, but I enjoyed penning it...
diane
Comment from tfawcus
Neatly penned just within the 25 word limit! Yes memory lingers long after the voice has gone and it is in the silent times that the words echo most strongly. A poignant poem for the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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Neatly penned just within the 25 word limit! Yes memory lingers long after the voice has gone and it is in the silent times that the words echo most strongly. A poignant poem for the contest.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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Hello Tony!
So pleased you appreciate my humble offering.
Thank you for your thoughtful review.
As for the contest, well, it didn't fare too well, but I surely enjoyed the challenge of penning a naani.
diane
Comment from Pamusart
I have a suggestion. You can ignore me if you like. What if we rhymed heat with fear instead of having a heal like this
Time and distance refuse to hear what memory still can fear
You have the sound of the echo above in this same verse. This is a good entry for the contest. Good luck in it. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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I have a suggestion. You can ignore me if you like. What if we rhymed heat with fear instead of having a heal like this
Time and distance refuse to hear what memory still can fear
You have the sound of the echo above in this same verse. This is a good entry for the contest. Good luck in it. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 15-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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Hello Pam,
Thank you for your thoughtful review...and your suggestion.
Your suggestion is appreciated; however it changes the intent of my poem, and my understanding of a naani is that it doesn't rhyme...
Thank you again!
diane
Comment from Lena Borghi
This is an evocative write which resonates with me and, like a good naani, should speak to many. There is poignancy in the sensing of an echo in the silence of absence. Good assonance and consonance in "heal and hear."
"What memory still can hear" is a powerful line.
The feeling in this write is palpable. Great naani. Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Lena
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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This is an evocative write which resonates with me and, like a good naani, should speak to many. There is poignancy in the sensing of an echo in the silence of absence. Good assonance and consonance in "heal and hear."
"What memory still can hear" is a powerful line.
The feeling in this write is palpable. Great naani. Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Lena
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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Hello Lena,
I am very appreciative and honored by your exceptional rating and review of my poetic offering.
Thank you!
diane
Comment from tony bronk
A lovely poem for this reader to read and to enjoy! I read it slowly with a comforting ease and it was nice on the mind and heart. Tony
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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A lovely poem for this reader to read and to enjoy! I read it slowly with a comforting ease and it was nice on the mind and heart. Tony
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hello Tony,
Much appreciated.
Thank you!
Comment from johnwilson
Again, I am amazed by your use of a few words to allow the reader to feel your emotions. Here, the picture gives me the feeling of loss and echo both. This is an inspiring presentation.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Again, I am amazed by your use of a few words to allow the reader to feel your emotions. Here, the picture gives me the feeling of loss and echo both. This is an inspiring presentation.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
Well, this one comes too close to home...but it was cathartic to pen it...
Again, thank you for your perceptive and thoughtful review!
So appreciated!
diane
Comment from jenintorre
This is a very poignant Naani poem. Amazing how much of a story can be told in so few words and you certainly have done it here. Well done. Best wishes Jen.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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This is a very poignant Naani poem. Amazing how much of a story can be told in so few words and you certainly have done it here. Well done. Best wishes Jen.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hello Jen!
Thank you ever so much for your thoughtful and complimentary review.
So appreciated...
diane
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I like this thought provoking poem. I like the line that talks about the words echoing in the silence. It does seem that time and distance sometimes seem to take their time healing wounds. They aren't the true healer of our wounds anyway although He does use them to help us. Thanks for sharing this. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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I like this thought provoking poem. I like the line that talks about the words echoing in the silence. It does seem that time and distance sometimes seem to take their time healing wounds. They aren't the true healer of our wounds anyway although He does use them to help us. Thanks for sharing this. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hello Jeffrey!
Thank you for your thoughtful review. I love your comments.
Much appreciative!
diane
Comment from frogbook
Great job with this one. Loved the title-it really drew me in. And the ending line was a bit of genius in it's deep and true meaning. Much enjoyed this little work. You have a talent for the short ones which is a real accomplishment.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Great job with this one. Loved the title-it really drew me in. And the ending line was a bit of genius in it's deep and true meaning. Much enjoyed this little work. You have a talent for the short ones which is a real accomplishment.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your thoughtful and complimentary review.
Not certain about the "talent for the short ones;" I write, rewrite, and then start all over again. I find them so challenging...but rewarding!
Thank you again!
diane
