Winds of Change
Naani Poetry14 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Naani. Change is a big part of our lives. Nothing stays the same forever. We must learn to adjust and accept changes to enhance our lives.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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A very well-written Naani. Change is a big part of our lives. Nothing stays the same forever. We must learn to adjust and accept changes to enhance our lives.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Thanks for your good review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This naani, Winds of Change, uses twenty-four syllables in these four lines to remind us that change IS occuring about us. Some subtle, some dynamic, but all possibly irreversible.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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This naani, Winds of Change, uses twenty-four syllables in these four lines to remind us that change IS occuring about us. Some subtle, some dynamic, but all possibly irreversible.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Thanks for your good review.
Comment from rama devi
Superb naani, universal in scope and applicable, though I recommend finding a fresher phrasing for 'winds of change' since it is quite a cliche phrasing. I wonder if there is an apt synonym for wind or change to make it sound more unique? The last two lines bring power to this poem. Bravo. Great presentation. A strong contender.
Good luck!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Superb naani, universal in scope and applicable, though I recommend finding a fresher phrasing for 'winds of change' since it is quite a cliche phrasing. I wonder if there is an apt synonym for wind or change to make it sound more unique? The last two lines bring power to this poem. Bravo. Great presentation. A strong contender.
Good luck!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Thank you.
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Comment from BeasPeas
This is excellent. Image is outstanding. I think you have a winner with this well written piece. It has continuity of thought and great word choices throughout; carries a good message. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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This is excellent. Image is outstanding. I think you have a winner with this well written piece. It has continuity of thought and great word choices throughout; carries a good message. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much for the good review.
Comment from kathleenspalding
Excellent Naani poem makes an astute observation using very few words. Beautiful choice of artwork (although it makes me want to shorten her dress so she won't slip on it, LOL). I see no errors. Great job!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Excellent Naani poem makes an astute observation using very few words. Beautiful choice of artwork (although it makes me want to shorten her dress so she won't slip on it, LOL). I see no errors. Great job!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much. I wasn?t able to add that obsevTion to the poem, but I saw it too. It made me think the rippling wind could cause her to trip on it even though she seems in total control. Oh well..... too few words, and so much to say. Haha. Thanks again. Melissa
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LOL. It does make me wonder how the landing turned out :-D You're welcome
Comment from Debbie Pope
I love every single word of this. I particularly like your central--that of winds of change blowing through our lives. They can be hurricane force sometimes, and they certainly make me feel out of control. Movement all the time. Such a well expressed poem--every word a truth. And the photo is superb. Even; though I know she is in total control of her body, it looks as though winds are blowing her up and away. Thank you for the complete package here. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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I love every single word of this. I particularly like your central--that of winds of change blowing through our lives. They can be hurricane force sometimes, and they certainly make me feel out of control. Movement all the time. Such a well expressed poem--every word a truth. And the photo is superb. Even; though I know she is in total control of her body, it looks as though winds are blowing her up and away. Thank you for the complete package here. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much for the great review. I?m glad you could see in the photo an expression of my thoughts. I appreciate your time.
Comment from zanya
Yes some pearls of wisdom reflected here in this Naani as to how our lives roll out and how sometimes events can be outside of our control 'challenging our .....control'.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Yes some pearls of wisdom reflected here in this Naani as to how our lives roll out and how sometimes events can be outside of our control 'challenging our .....control'.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thank you for commenting and taking the time to review it.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer,
Your words speak a great deal of wisdom. Unfortunately, for me, I do not handle change very well...at all. Working on it...all my adult life...but it is not easy. Your words flow well; however, there is no need for the semi-colon at the end of the third line.
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello Mystery Writer,
Your words speak a great deal of wisdom. Unfortunately, for me, I do not handle change very well...at all. Working on it...all my adult life...but it is not easy. Your words flow well; however, there is no need for the semi-colon at the end of the third line.
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thanks. I was unsure of the punctuation. I appreciate the review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author
I like the picture of how the wind is blowing the lady with her flowing dress and these lines tell us of how by
creating ripples of movement;
challenging our resolve and control.
Gert
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello author
I like the picture of how the wind is blowing the lady with her flowing dress and these lines tell us of how by
creating ripples of movement;
challenging our resolve and control.
Gert
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thank you. I am glad you see where the inspiration came from to talk about movement. I really appreciate your review.
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You are welcome author you poem is poetry in motion.
Gert
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved these words because they speak truth and honesty, the artwork is perfect and our live blows in the wind and we hope we are sailing in the right direction, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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I loved these words because they speak truth and honesty, the artwork is perfect and our live blows in the wind and we hope we are sailing in the right direction, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thanks Dolly. I appreciate you taking the time to comment and review.
