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Comment from nomi338
Bro, you are weird. LOL. Milking fish? Riding ants? Sounds like somebody got into the stash and hit it hard, know what I mean? I always enjoy reading you because I never know where you're gonna come from each time. Your writing really blows my mind and that's a good thing. Keep on keeping me on my toes. Just don't step down too hard, my toes are kinda' fragile. LOL.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Bro, you are weird. LOL. Milking fish? Riding ants? Sounds like somebody got into the stash and hit it hard, know what I mean? I always enjoy reading you because I never know where you're gonna come from each time. Your writing really blows my mind and that's a good thing. Keep on keeping me on my toes. Just don't step down too hard, my toes are kinda' fragile. LOL.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thanks, nomi. I?m probably a couple bricks short of a load.
Comment from judiverse
This is quite fanciful--milking fish in Peru or riding ants in Katmandu. Excellent and inventive use of rhyme. Last line is so filled with rhyme--clever. This has a jaunty and good-natured feel about it, it make you forget for a while serious matters that may be on your mind. I am not qualified to speak to the shape of a shrew. judi
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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This is quite fanciful--milking fish in Peru or riding ants in Katmandu. Excellent and inventive use of rhyme. Last line is so filled with rhyme--clever. This has a jaunty and good-natured feel about it, it make you forget for a while serious matters that may be on your mind. I am not qualified to speak to the shape of a shrew. judi
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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This looks like a shrew the way a square looks like a polar bear.
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This looks like a shrew the way a square looks like a polar bear.
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. Well, I'm not sure it looks like a shrew. I'm guessing you mean the shape of the poem which looks more like a Christmas tree. Loved all the internal rhymes in the last line!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Lol. Well, I'm not sure it looks like a shrew. I'm guessing you mean the shape of the poem which looks more like a Christmas tree. Loved all the internal rhymes in the last line!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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The Shrew Who Stole Christmas
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good monorhyme as well as being shaped like a shrew. I love their cute pointy noses.
The best shrew data, is fresh and new <-- Remove that comma. It separates the subject from its predicate, a big no-no. :)
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Good monorhyme as well as being shaped like a shrew. I love their cute pointy noses.
The best shrew data, is fresh and new <-- Remove that comma. It separates the subject from its predicate, a big no-no. :)
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Phyllis
Comment from Sugarray77
This is so funny. And yes, it does look like the outline of a shrew. Great rhyming and a fun approach to this verse. Well done and I look forward to the next one of these that you pen.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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This is so funny. And yes, it does look like the outline of a shrew. Great rhyming and a fun approach to this verse. Well done and I look forward to the next one of these that you pen.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thankd, SugarRay
