Heavy Burdens
When all seems hopeless, I pray God hears my plea.12 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
Hi Brigitte, how are you doing sweet girl???...yes there are times it seems that things can be hopeless...but I have found out that the best the to do is to get it to God...it may not seem like He is moving fast enough on it...but He will in His time...so very well written sweet girl...I am behind...but trying to catch up...love your poem...and love the picture...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2018
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Hi Brigitte, how are you doing sweet girl???...yes there are times it seems that things can be hopeless...but I have found out that the best the to do is to get it to God...it may not seem like He is moving fast enough on it...but He will in His time...so very well written sweet girl...I am behind...but trying to catch up...love your poem...and love the picture...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 16-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2018
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Hi there. So good to be called sweet my friend. I am doing better. Thank you for reading and the lovely support. God doesn't give us more than we can handle...I keep repeating that over and over. Hope you are well, I know your writings are great, keep them coming.
Hugs and have a great weekend.
Brigitte
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I know what your saying...sigh...and you are always soooo welcome...I am so glad you are doing better...big hugs...and you have a great week...love xxoo
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This message made my Monday. Thank you friend.
Love,
Brigitte
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smiling big my sweet friend...xxoo love
Comment from Henry King
This verse of rhymed couplets is very descriptive. The narrator's tension is in the forefront like drained blood from the fingers so tight. Despair is leaking out of those wringed words like water being squeezed from washed sheets. The words flow smoothly when spoken. This smoothness adds rhythm to the poem.
In this reader's view of the words, the narrator is so tense any ephemeral response from God could be easily missed. So sad.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
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This verse of rhymed couplets is very descriptive. The narrator's tension is in the forefront like drained blood from the fingers so tight. Despair is leaking out of those wringed words like water being squeezed from washed sheets. The words flow smoothly when spoken. This smoothness adds rhythm to the poem.
In this reader's view of the words, the narrator is so tense any ephemeral response from God could be easily missed. So sad.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
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Thank you for reading and the insightful comments. You totally got "it".
I am calming therefore, God is present.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment from Susan Burger
Brigitte, I think you have written well, what many of us feel. So many times we are confused and begging God to show us the way. We know He is there, yet when we do not understand His signs we feel alone.
Your poem had good flow and you have expressed your feelings well. Good work.
My only suggestion is possibly adjusting the color. The background and font are close to the same shade. Changing one could make your words stand out more. Thanks for sharing. I am sure these words can help other's to feel they are not alone!
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
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Brigitte, I think you have written well, what many of us feel. So many times we are confused and begging God to show us the way. We know He is there, yet when we do not understand His signs we feel alone.
Your poem had good flow and you have expressed your feelings well. Good work.
My only suggestion is possibly adjusting the color. The background and font are close to the same shade. Changing one could make your words stand out more. Thanks for sharing. I am sure these words can help other's to feel they are not alone!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
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Thank you for reading and the insightful comments. You totally got "it".
I am calming therefore, God is present.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment from robina1978
I love the artwork you chose complement your poem with. So well done, you can't take your eyes of it.
We are still thinking about
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
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I love the artwork you chose complement your poem with. So well done, you can't take your eyes of it.
We are still thinking about
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
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Thank you for reading and the insightful comments. You totally got "it". The picture was perfect for me and I thank Fan Art.
I am calming therefore, God is present.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment from dragonpoet
Nicely written prayer to strengthen faith and get help from God in a smooth metered group of rhyming couplets.
I think you need a comma between lost and know in the fifth stanza.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
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Nicely written prayer to strengthen faith and get help from God in a smooth metered group of rhyming couplets.
I think you need a comma between lost and know in the fifth stanza.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
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Will go back and fix this, thank you so much.
Have a great Sunday.
Brigitte
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Glad I could help. Your welcome, Brigitte.
Same to you.
Joan
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Catherine,
This is an awesome prayer. I like the couplets/rhymes. Your message is strong & clear. I believe many people are too busy to stop, pray, & listen. I also believe He is there for each of us & we need to talk to Him--doing that will help with burdens. Thanks for sharing & caring. Jan
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
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Catherine,
This is an awesome prayer. I like the couplets/rhymes. Your message is strong & clear. I believe many people are too busy to stop, pray, & listen. I also believe He is there for each of us & we need to talk to Him--doing that will help with burdens. Thanks for sharing & caring. Jan
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
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Hi Janny and thank you for this lovely review.
Have a great Sunday.
Brigitte
Comment from Teri7
Bridget, This is a very well written poem that is so heartfelt. You used great descriptive words and interesting imagery from the art work. I think we all get to that point at times in our life. I know I do. God is the only answer. It is sometimes hard to hear, but I know HE is standing right there waiting on us to acknowledge Him. I do hope things are o.k. with you my friend! love, Teri
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Bridget, This is a very well written poem that is so heartfelt. You used great descriptive words and interesting imagery from the art work. I think we all get to that point at times in our life. I know I do. God is the only answer. It is sometimes hard to hear, but I know HE is standing right there waiting on us to acknowledge Him. I do hope things are o.k. with you my friend! love, Teri
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Thank you dear friend for this jknd review. I will be okay, I know, God is with me even though sometimes his answers to prayers are elusive. I continue to value your comments...
Blessings and love,
Brigitte
Comment from Joy Graham
The message of your poem makes me feel sad. I visit my uncle in hospital every weekend. He has depression issues, I know. I try to bring cheer with our visits. All the seniors on his floor are in varying stages of declining health and dementia. When I see them all, I realize I'm doing pretty good. All we can do is take it one day at a time and make the most of our time. Praying never hurts, but we have to recognize and be grateful for the blessings He has given us.
Our fanstory is a wonderfully supportive writing community. We're among friends.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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The message of your poem makes me feel sad. I visit my uncle in hospital every weekend. He has depression issues, I know. I try to bring cheer with our visits. All the seniors on his floor are in varying stages of declining health and dementia. When I see them all, I realize I'm doing pretty good. All we can do is take it one day at a time and make the most of our time. Praying never hurts, but we have to recognize and be grateful for the blessings He has given us.
Our fanstory is a wonderfully supportive writing community. We're among friends.
Joy xx
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Sharing post helps to lighten the burden of feeling hopeless. I rely on and love my Fan Story friends. They help get me through tough times by understanding the passion of words penned. I thank God for blessings daily. His answers to prayers are sometimes elusive but I know he is with me. Thank you for reading and the kind comments.
Blessings,
brigitte
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Brigitte;
As Christians, we are always surrounded by attacks from the enemy. At these times, we can't hear or see the Lord; though He is right beside us. Put all your faith in Him, and turn over the problems. He is with you.
Patty
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Hi, Brigitte;
As Christians, we are always surrounded by attacks from the enemy. At these times, we can't hear or see the Lord; though He is right beside us. Put all your faith in Him, and turn over the problems. He is with you.
Patty
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Yes, he is beside me and leadeth me...The devil is busy trying to invade my mind and heart but God will chase him away. I DO have faith. Thank you for this note, read, and review.
Blessings my friend,
Brigitte
Comment from Commando
An awesome Commentary and Philosophy presentation, Brigitte. The artwork by FanArtReview is astonishing. Having read your author's note first, my heart and mind was receptive to the message given me. My thought is, 'Heavy Burdens' is above any of your presentations in the category, and I'm sorry I had no six stars. Therefore, I owe you one. Thanks for sharing this heart-wrenching penning with us on FanStory...and "God bless!"
xx Bill
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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An awesome Commentary and Philosophy presentation, Brigitte. The artwork by FanArtReview is astonishing. Having read your author's note first, my heart and mind was receptive to the message given me. My thought is, 'Heavy Burdens' is above any of your presentations in the category, and I'm sorry I had no six stars. Therefore, I owe you one. Thanks for sharing this heart-wrenching penning with us on FanStory...and "God bless!"
xx Bill
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Thank you Bill my dear friend for this supportive review. I really find your comments inspiring and they keep me writing. Sharing posts is a way to lighten the load cast by the devil and brings faith back into play.
Love,
Brigitte
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Hi Brigitte,
My being here for you, "Is an honor!" Best wishes and God bless.
Love,
Bill
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Ditto, what you said.
Love,
Brigitte
