Comment from Angela Post

Excellent

I like the contrast of "no exit from your self made cell". The art you chose is a good fit. I like the author notes that your provided. I agree that so many things isolate us and that many become trapped for a long while in a self made cell. Good food for thought.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

We hold the key to our own suffering. If one opens their heArt to their Higher power, all things are possible,.
Karenina

Comment from F. Wehr3

Excellent

That was deep, K. I hesitatingly enjoyed it, if you know what I mean. It's hauntingly good, but at the same time really sad. I enjoyed some of your word choices like gravid. Interesting rhyme scheme as well. Great job!

Take care,
Russell

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

It is not an easy glimpse into the darkness. I understand.
Thank you,
Karenina

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

Honestly great read... the each stanza stands unto itself and sews itself into the next thoughts.
You wear your smile like a shroud,
the mystery hides deep within...

A worried rain in gravid cloud,
threatens to burst and spill your sin...

Within your soul a shadow crawls,
intent on overtaking you...

You howl as you climb the walls,
no exit from your self made cell...

You've left behind all hallowed halls,
your sentence is a living hell.

What else is there to say one does not stand out over the other. yours, diana

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

I appreciate your com p r e h we naive and encouraging review!
Karenina

Comment from Harry Smith

Excellent

Beautifully written is this poem with lots of imagery and the picture selection is perfect for the poem. I really enjoyed reading this poem and will be back to read more.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

It will always be a pleasure to have you stop by! Thank you,
Karenina

Comment from jdrhye

Excellent

Well depicted hopelessness and depression. It's dark but revealing. The depth of emotion is prevelant. The artwork chosen to help your words stand out is good. Seems very different than what you normally write however, still astoundingly poetic.
J

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

I am a bit of a risk taker.

I enjoy stretching the limits...sometimes I stumble, but always learn!

Karenina

Comment from Jacqueline Ramos

Excellent

Gee Karenina, this is deep and oh so true. Nobody can imprison us like ourselves and this truly is a living hell. Saddest above all is when escape is just a sincere prayer away and the imprisoned continually says, "No thanks." Great poem, even greater message.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018

Nobody can help them but themselves.....we can stand by to assist when they admit they are powerless over the substance...but pushing them when they are not ready only causes heartache.

Thanks,

Karenina

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

this one is outstanding. love the line "a worried rain in gravid cloud".
really compelling message. consider this: if you rhyme line 6 with shroud you will have a pattern that looks like this; a b a b c a c d c d . kinda cool....meeshu

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018

I'll take a look at that.... Thanks for the suggestion. Glad you enjoyed the poem overall and my favorite line, in particular.

Thanks, Karenina

reply by meeshu on 31-Mar-2018

thanx for gravid

reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018

Anytime! :)--Karenina

Comment from Cindy McIntyre

Excellent

Such a wonderful poem. As I read your comments about isolation due to addition, anger, and depression, I could see this poem being able to touch a lot of lives. Very emotional read.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018

Many thanks. No secret addiction is disassembling our society....let us try to touch one life at a time!

Karenina

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Super write, strong poetic structuring, filled with captivating views of interests well expressed in this work. I found this write beaming with creativity and comforting to thoughts of profound consideration. All in my opinion.

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018

Thank you...I have just come from your latest post and feel I am on a much lower spiritual awareness plane than you...still, I felt your quest and that is a start. As for this poem....I thank you for your time and comments. It is a harsh world and I often can see why so many feel the need to numb themselves from harsh realities of life....still, there is a better way and I am smart enough (now) to realize I cannot find it for them or force them to see it.

Karenina

Comment from Eternal Muse

Exceptional

This cuts very, very deep. A lot of us carry "a mystery deep within." What's worse, a lot of people are " bottlers" and they carry it inside for years and decades not sharing with a single soul. Is there a door? I believe so, but only in sharing and getting it out can they become completely free. In case of a criminal, it's serving the sentence and paying their debt to society. And of course, a prayer. A remorse, a penitence. God will always forgive.

A very thought provoking poem.

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018

Yes. I do believe there is a way out for every soul so tortured. Sadly, it is so often a family member or friend who loses their balance and gets sucked into the addictive vortex..... We cannot help those who do not see a problem...and that is most painful! (Think of A!)---

Many thanks,

Karenina