Haiku (dry autumn leaves crunch)
Haiku 5-7-532 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Very nice, DD. You set the scene with vivid concrete imagery and then it all comes to a crescendo with the crushing of leaves breaking the silence under foot.
Great job and best wishes to you in the contest. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
  |
Very nice, DD. You set the scene with vivid concrete imagery and then it all comes to a crescendo with the crushing of leaves breaking the silence under foot.
Great job and best wishes to you in the contest. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 09-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
-
Thank you Gloria. I appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku poem. ~DD
Comment from lyenochka
Love the juxtaposition of sound vs. silence in this one. There's something very satisfying about crunching on dry autumn leaves. But the "meditative steps" crunching did help to divert the silent thoughts.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
|
Love the juxtaposition of sound vs. silence in this one. There's something very satisfying about crunching on dry autumn leaves. But the "meditative steps" crunching did help to divert the silent thoughts.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
-
lyenochka, thank you for taking the time to review my haiku poem. Have a lovely weekend. ~DD
Comment from June Sargent
I can hear the crunching under my feet as I walk through the woods. Very well thought out haiku. Sight as well as sound included in three short lines. Should be a contender.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
|
I can hear the crunching under my feet as I walk through the woods. Very well thought out haiku. Sight as well as sound included in three short lines. Should be a contender.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
-
Thank you June. I appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku poem. ~DD
Comment from RGstar
The solitude adds very much to this poem. The image carries a great deal, but your words are potent and work very well.
I might have just put "thoughts" instead of thought, as it adds much more of a reality to the moment. Difficult place into perspective just one thought...the mind works quickly.
My best
RGstar
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
|
The solitude adds very much to this poem. The image carries a great deal, but your words are potent and work very well.
I might have just put "thoughts" instead of thought, as it adds much more of a reality to the moment. Difficult place into perspective just one thought...the mind works quickly.
My best
RGstar
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
-
Thank you so much for taking the time to review my haiku poem. Your comments were very welcome as I did ponder the word ?thought? or ?thoughts? at the time. You have confirmed it for me. Warm regards ~DD
Comment from jlsavell
PoemsofDD,
It is quite hard for me to critique haiku since I d not fully understand it. However, it appears as if this is perfect. Our quietude can be savored and heightened by long nature walks. I understand the sudden startling effect of a breaking branch..
well done
jlsavell
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
|
PoemsofDD,
It is quite hard for me to critique haiku since I d not fully understand it. However, it appears as if this is perfect. Our quietude can be savored and heightened by long nature walks. I understand the sudden startling effect of a breaking branch..
well done
jlsavell
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
-
Thank you for taking the time to review my haiku poem. Your comments are appreciated. ~DD
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The first two lines flow and connect well.
The last lines says so much. Because I meditate I pondered
on the last line of this poem. The artwork is perfect and
compliments the words and theme of this poem.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
|
Excellent Poem! The first two lines flow and connect well.
The last lines says so much. Because I meditate I pondered
on the last line of this poem. The artwork is perfect and
compliments the words and theme of this poem.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
-
Thank you for taking the time to review my haiku poem Harmony. Your comments are very much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from ServantOfGod
Well-written, I can almost feel myself being the one taking a walk through a forest somewhere in autumn, lost in my thoughts. Keep up the good work. :)
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
|
Well-written, I can almost feel myself being the one taking a walk through a forest somewhere in autumn, lost in my thoughts. Keep up the good work. :)
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
-
Thank you so much for taking the time to review my haiku. Your comments are much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Boogienights
Lovely words lovely picture. Crunchy leaves underfoot can break concentration, but who cares? I love the color and sounds of autumn, especially if there's a big pile to jump in. Spring is right around the corner, but I like fall the best! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
|
Lovely words lovely picture. Crunchy leaves underfoot can break concentration, but who cares? I love the color and sounds of autumn, especially if there's a big pile to jump in. Spring is right around the corner, but I like fall the best! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
-
Thank you so much boogie nights. I appreciate you taking the time in reviewing my haiku poem. Have a blessed weekend. ~DD
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good entry for the 'Haiku Poetry' writing prompt.
Your short nature verse of the crunch of leaves breaking into your thoughts is clear.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
|
This is a good entry for the 'Haiku Poetry' writing prompt.
Your short nature verse of the crunch of leaves breaking into your thoughts is clear.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
-
Thank you Sharon. I appreciate you taking the time to review my haiku poem. Your comments are appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Dean Kuch
This is a very lovely, well thought out haiku, DD.
Lines one and two display a distinct grammatical connection and solid, concrete imagery.
Your kigo, or seasonal reference, is obvious.
You've chosen the more traditional 5-7-5 syllable count. And your satori, or final line, is an excellent summation delivering that 'Ah-ha!' moment haiku poetry is so well known for.
The overall presentation is stunning as well.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
 |
This is a very lovely, well thought out haiku, DD.
Lines one and two display a distinct grammatical connection and solid, concrete imagery.
Your kigo, or seasonal reference, is obvious.
You've chosen the more traditional 5-7-5 syllable count. And your satori, or final line, is an excellent summation delivering that 'Ah-ha!' moment haiku poetry is so well known for.
The overall presentation is stunning as well.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018
-
Thank you again Dean. I value these shiny six stars and your valued reviewed. Warmest regards. ~DD
