Exit highway 69
An unforgettable moment5 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks how bizarre it becomes when one moves drives for adventure and passion for intention achievement; well worded, well done. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
This speaks how bizarre it becomes when one moves drives for adventure and passion for intention achievement; well worded, well done. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
Comment from Pamusart
Hi. I liked the flow of this poem. But, I think that this line
Wheel on the gravel
Has the wrong cadence. I suggest
Wheels on gravel
Just my opinion. Up to you.
Only a child would not know the message of this poem. You guided us through it well. A delightful poem. Thank you for sharing.
Hi. I liked the flow of this poem. But, I think that this line
Wheel on the gravel
Has the wrong cadence. I suggest
Wheels on gravel
Just my opinion. Up to you.
Only a child would not know the message of this poem. You guided us through it well. A delightful poem. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
Comment from robina1978
I found it quite difficult to understand your poem .I think it is about a couple going to a place where to make love. Kisses somewhere. Then entering the parking lot your emotions loaded up.
I found it quite difficult to understand your poem .I think it is about a couple going to a place where to make love. Kisses somewhere. Then entering the parking lot your emotions loaded up.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
Comment from Henry King
There are good strong bones in this poem. The problem, the dysfunctional rhyme. Some examples include, first verse change groove to grove, it'll change the object but not the intent, instead of being stuck in a groove you will be driving out of a bunch of trees and grove rhymes with drove. Drop the s from vehicle it will then rhyme with padiddle. Third verse (On streets we less travel) travel will rhyme with gravel. Spend a little more time searching a thesarus or a rhyming dictionary.
There are good strong bones in this poem. The problem, the dysfunctional rhyme. Some examples include, first verse change groove to grove, it'll change the object but not the intent, instead of being stuck in a groove you will be driving out of a bunch of trees and grove rhymes with drove. Drop the s from vehicle it will then rhyme with padiddle. Third verse (On streets we less travel) travel will rhyme with gravel. Spend a little more time searching a thesarus or a rhyming dictionary.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
Comment from Debbie Pope
I am going to remember your name. Next time I write something where I need romantic passion, I am contacting you. You say you are a rookie. Hard to believe. You just took me on a fun journey. Expertly done, Rookie..
I am going to remember your name. Next time I write something where I need romantic passion, I am contacting you. You say you are a rookie. Hard to believe. You just took me on a fun journey. Expertly done, Rookie..
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018