A Potpourri of Poetic Curiosities
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
On reading your notes you seemed to have captured the spirit of the Mondo poem well with your question, and then the answer. My question would be whose dung would we be using LOL.
I rather enjoyed this one Craig, both your poem and your notes.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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On reading your notes you seemed to have captured the spirit of the Mondo poem well with your question, and then the answer. My question would be whose dung would we be using LOL.
I rather enjoyed this one Craig, both your poem and your notes.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thanks very much, Valda, for the great comments. I think our pollies provide more than an adequate supply of dung already! Cheers, Craig
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I'd have to agree with that.
Comment from Teri7
This is very interesting what you have penned about the black Larks. You used very good descriptive words and very good comments! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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This is very interesting what you have penned about the black Larks. You used very good descriptive words and very good comments! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Thank you very much, Teri. Your kind comments are always most welcome. Craig
P.S. I'm going to put your CD on again in a few minutes, so I can listen to it nice and loud :)
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lol I hope it blesses you my friend! Enjoy it!
Comment from --Turtle.
I like the comparative question and contemplation in this poem, a mondo dealing with xenophobia.
self-imposed obsidion
Ah, the art of war from inside out. This gives the sense of a game I used to play, civilizations? maybe it was age of empires, there's a lot of games like it, but I think the age of empires might be the best.
When I read the last line of this poem, I got the flash sound image of age of empires, where the computer voice informs me. "You are under attack." (Which tended to be followed by little screams and grunts.) But in this case, the image was just the ominous 'You are under attack' for an unarmed passerby... the game A.I. only being smart enough to know, that entity is coming from somewhere else... thereby, be afraid, be very afraid.
I like the use of the black lark, and the unspoken effect. A xenophobe may very well surround themselves with a lot of bullcrap, and other unsightly things, anything to protect themselves. May be effective... but you're still surrounded by bullcrap 24/7.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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I like the comparative question and contemplation in this poem, a mondo dealing with xenophobia.
self-imposed obsidion
Ah, the art of war from inside out. This gives the sense of a game I used to play, civilizations? maybe it was age of empires, there's a lot of games like it, but I think the age of empires might be the best.
When I read the last line of this poem, I got the flash sound image of age of empires, where the computer voice informs me. "You are under attack." (Which tended to be followed by little screams and grunts.) But in this case, the image was just the ominous 'You are under attack' for an unarmed passerby... the game A.I. only being smart enough to know, that entity is coming from somewhere else... thereby, be afraid, be very afraid.
I like the use of the black lark, and the unspoken effect. A xenophobe may very well surround themselves with a lot of bullcrap, and other unsightly things, anything to protect themselves. May be effective... but you're still surrounded by bullcrap 24/7.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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As usual, you hit the nail on the head! I wasn't particularly happy with this one. It felt a bit awkward, and too many big words. But try as I might, I couldn't come up with alternatives, and I really wanted to do a poem about a bird surrounding itself with pooh. Thanks for the continued support, and insightful comments, Turtle. Cheers, Craig
Comment from Gloria ....
It's an interesting form isn't it and one worth mastering to use as a poetic literary device. I am unsure of what your POV is here which makes the poem read as purely esoteric and intellectual.
That said it's always great to try out new things even though I think I'll pass on the ring of cow dung unless I absolutely must. ;-)
Great job, Craig.
Gloria
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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It's an interesting form isn't it and one worth mastering to use as a poetic literary device. I am unsure of what your POV is here which makes the poem read as purely esoteric and intellectual.
That said it's always great to try out new things even though I think I'll pass on the ring of cow dung unless I absolutely must. ;-)
Great job, Craig.
Gloria
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Oh you should try it, Gloria. It wasn't until I had her lying face first in cow dung (with the cows standing around looking on suspiciously), digging out fence-post holes that my other half came to realise I really knew how to show a girl a good time :) Many thanks - Craig
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I really like that word, it's funny because you are studying your much treasures Christmas present and I am studying Dickens just now and some of the words I am referring to the dictionary and they are simply not there! Your poem and notes have given information I did not know and what animals do to preserve themselves never ceases to amaze me, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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I really like that word, it's funny because you are studying your much treasures Christmas present and I am studying Dickens just now and some of the words I am referring to the dictionary and they are simply not there! Your poem and notes have given information I did not know and what animals do to preserve themselves never ceases to amaze me, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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They really, on a whole, are a great deal more clever than we give them credit for. Seems there's only one that consistently seeks ways to destroy, rather than protect itself ;-)
Many thanks for the lovely review, Dolly, and I'm glad the information from my little project has been useful. I hated Dickens when I was in school (but loved Shakespeare), and haven't read any since. Perhaps if I approached him again as an adult, it might be different :)
Cheers,
Craig
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Craig;
From what I understand about the Mondo poetic form, I think you nailed it. Great use of the new word, and working in a phobia to emphasize the point was inspired.
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hi, Craig;
From what I understand about the Mondo poetic form, I think you nailed it. Great use of the new word, and working in a phobia to emphasize the point was inspired.
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much for the lovely review, Patty. It's always scary trying something new, so I'm glad you think it worked :) Most grateful - Craig
Comment from Katie Solis
As always, I love your word of the day poems. I do not have too much experience with mondo poems, but based on your explanation I think that you did a good job. The syllable count was perfect, and your ending was very thought provoking.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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As always, I love your word of the day poems. I do not have too much experience with mondo poems, but based on your explanation I think that you did a good job. The syllable count was perfect, and your ending was very thought provoking.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thanks very much for the kind and supportive comments, Katie. Glad you're finding these odd words of some value :)
Cheers, Craig
Comment from Joy Graham
That's an interesting poetry style I have not seen. I'm trying to figure out how to pronounce katuata. It's a chore just to spell it. Zoinks as Scooby Doo's friend says.
I can see the benefits of surrounding my house with cow dung or even people dung. Maybe then we'd be safe from getting out living room windows shot at again?
Joy xx
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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That's an interesting poetry style I have not seen. I'm trying to figure out how to pronounce katuata. It's a chore just to spell it. Zoinks as Scooby Doo's friend says.
I can see the benefits of surrounding my house with cow dung or even people dung. Maybe then we'd be safe from getting out living room windows shot at again?
Joy xx
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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LOL Not to mention, you'd be able to grow a lovely rose border :)
Many thanks, Joy.
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hi Craig,
I've never attempted a Mondo poem. It appears to me that you have executed the form perfectly, with a good deal of thought put into this clever poem. Besides the new word "obsidion", you also taught me "xenophobic". That's quite interesting that the black larks like to put dung around their nests. Let's hope that we humans never have to resort to doing that to keep from being trampled. :)
Well done, Craig! ~~ Connie
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hi Craig,
I've never attempted a Mondo poem. It appears to me that you have executed the form perfectly, with a good deal of thought put into this clever poem. Besides the new word "obsidion", you also taught me "xenophobic". That's quite interesting that the black larks like to put dung around their nests. Let's hope that we humans never have to resort to doing that to keep from being trampled. :)
Well done, Craig! ~~ Connie
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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I don't know, Connie - some would say certain humans are good at surrounding themselves with s***!
Thanks so much for the supportive review - Craig
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LOL
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Mondo poem accordng to the notes about the two katautas one as a question and the other an answer to create a Mondo. The black larks have a unique way to keep away the unknown enemy.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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A very well-written Mondo poem accordng to the notes about the two katautas one as a question and the other an answer to create a Mondo. The black larks have a unique way to keep away the unknown enemy.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Indeed, Sandra. I don't think it's a commonly recommended battle tactic for humans, although some seem to have adopted it! Cheers, Craig
