Pecos Valley
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Comment from nancy_e_davis
Who is the stranger on the stage. It seems he has the only rational advice to give to Laurel.
"You make your inquiries, ma'am. That's sensible. But, judge no man on evidence like that," the stranger stated.
Now that's good advice. Gossip don't give it.
Bad blood between Cottom and Mr. Shelton. I have a feeling it will be resolved. Well done Brett. NAncy
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Who is the stranger on the stage. It seems he has the only rational advice to give to Laurel.
"You make your inquiries, ma'am. That's sensible. But, judge no man on evidence like that," the stranger stated.
Now that's good advice. Gossip don't give it.
Bad blood between Cottom and Mr. Shelton. I have a feeling it will be resolved. Well done Brett. NAncy
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my story.
Comment from Sugarray77
You are continuing to develop this story nicely. I enjoyed reading this and think you are building it with enough suspense and friction to grab and keep the reader's attention. Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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You are continuing to develop this story nicely. I enjoyed reading this and think you are building it with enough suspense and friction to grab and keep the reader's attention. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale.
Comment from robina1978
The photo of the two horses/ponies, complements this chapter very well. I did read chapter 8 as you suggested. But it is still not easy for me. I will persevere and get the hang of it.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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The photo of the two horses/ponies, complements this chapter very well. I did read chapter 8 as you suggested. But it is still not easy for me. I will persevere and get the hang of it.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale.
Comment from Debbie Pope
Well, Wyatt is going to get his chance, huh. I'll be sure and catch the next chapter. This chapter was helpful to me. No action involved. It just set the stage and did some character development, particularly for the ladies in the stagecoach. It wasn't impelled by action, but the chapter moved well. There was no fluff to slow it down. Good job.
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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Well, Wyatt is going to get his chance, huh. I'll be sure and catch the next chapter. This chapter was helpful to me. No action involved. It just set the stage and did some character development, particularly for the ladies in the stagecoach. It wasn't impelled by action, but the chapter moved well. There was no fluff to slow it down. Good job.
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Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale.
Comment from Rasmine
Getting good, Brett. Very intense.
I did get a little confused when the stranger started talking. I didn't see where he came from. Also, I found a typo, and have a suggestion (not in that order):
With all this talk about murders (comma) she wondered what she'd gotten herself in the middle of (Maybe this sentence could be reworded; it's a bit awkward)?
Just because he lived in Cochise Canyon didn't make Hayden Kearny a killer, did it? (no quote if it's a thought -- also maybe you could put thoughts in italics to separate it from the other writing?)"
Also, remember to list all your characters. (I'm getting this mixed up with Ben's but now I shouldn't -- he muted me for editing and making suggestions, hope I didn't hurt him too bad.)
Hey, TC,
Nome
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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Getting good, Brett. Very intense.
I did get a little confused when the stranger started talking. I didn't see where he came from. Also, I found a typo, and have a suggestion (not in that order):
With all this talk about murders (comma) she wondered what she'd gotten herself in the middle of (Maybe this sentence could be reworded; it's a bit awkward)?
Just because he lived in Cochise Canyon didn't make Hayden Kearny a killer, did it? (no quote if it's a thought -- also maybe you could put thoughts in italics to separate it from the other writing?)"
Also, remember to list all your characters. (I'm getting this mixed up with Ben's but now I shouldn't -- he muted me for editing and making suggestions, hope I didn't hurt him too bad.)
Hey, TC,
Nome
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Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my story.
