Legend Chasers
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "The Wampus Cat - Part 2"An old man retells stories of fighting monsters.
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Comment from prettybluebirds
Oh, this is getting very interesting now. I look forward to the next chapter to find out where you are going with the story. I can just imagine riding through that kind of country at breakneck speed. Ouch.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Oh, this is getting very interesting now. I look forward to the next chapter to find out where you are going with the story. I can just imagine riding through that kind of country at breakneck speed. Ouch.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you, my friend. The story is about to take a huge leap into the fantasy aspect of the novel. It starts out country and ends something else.
Take care, and have a great week,
Rhonda
Comment from royowen
Wow! Well written Rhonda! An exciting and fervent episode with the mysterious cat sounds causing them all to be a little unnerved by the sounds of a "big" cat, Henry swats Lightning's rump, and he hightails it out of danger, meanwhile, how are the others going to get on? Excellent episode Rhonda, good to see you writing again, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Wow! Well written Rhonda! An exciting and fervent episode with the mysterious cat sounds causing them all to be a little unnerved by the sounds of a "big" cat, Henry swats Lightning's rump, and he hightails it out of danger, meanwhile, how are the others going to get on? Excellent episode Rhonda, good to see you writing again, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Roy!
And let me say I'm glad to see you back and so active on this site. I've gotten horribly behind on reviewing them all, but I've enjoyed each one I have.
Have a great week,
Rhonda
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Well done . Glad you're back
Comment from Thomas Bowling
You do a good job of building up the tension in your story. Plus there' is a good cliffhanger ending as the riders are racing through the trees back to the barn.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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You do a good job of building up the tension in your story. Plus there' is a good cliffhanger ending as the riders are racing through the trees back to the barn.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Thomas. I'm so behind on this site I feel terrible. Life is currently getting in the way of writing, but I supposed that's to be expected sometimes.
Have a great week,
Rhonda
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine chapter, Rhonda--that Wampus rat--err--cat bastard must be frightening indeed, I wish all it took was a slap on the ass to make my flabby muscles taut again!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Another fine chapter, Rhonda--that Wampus rat--err--cat bastard must be frightening indeed, I wish all it took was a slap on the ass to make my flabby muscles taut again!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Oh me, too! That's the benefit of writing fantasy. I can make anything work!
Comment from giraffmang
Nice instalment, Rhonda,
Great descriptions, good banter and a bit of history for the boys. Nice action to round things out.
He graced her with a quick wink, "but to answer your question - the dialogue here should probably start with a capital as it's a fresh sentence.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Nice instalment, Rhonda,
Great descriptions, good banter and a bit of history for the boys. Nice action to round things out.
He graced her with a quick wink, "but to answer your question - the dialogue here should probably start with a capital as it's a fresh sentence.
All the best
G
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much, G-Man. Thanks for finding the mistake. I do so appreciate the time you take to look for what others miss. I find it helpful and supportive.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from c_lucas
I have had the experience a time or two of running into a cougar in Arizona wilds land. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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I have had the experience a time or two of running into a cougar in Arizona wilds land. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the wonderful review. I saw a cougar once, but I was in the car. It was still scary once I realized it was so close to our farm.
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Well aimed rocks have been known to be effective. It depends on how hungry the cat is.
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Excellent point!! My dad was a very good shot with a stone!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You did a great job writing the description of the area. I could visualize in my mind. I so enjoy the characters. They're fun. You did a good job writing this.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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You did a great job writing the description of the area. I could visualize in my mind. I so enjoy the characters. They're fun. You did a good job writing this.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for the feedback, my friend.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from robina1978
Nice drawing of a wolf that complements your chapter perfectly. When Nana got threatened Henry took off his at and swatted Nana's horse on its bottom. The horse ran like when younger, still called Lightening.
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Nice drawing of a wolf that complements your chapter perfectly. When Nana got threatened Henry took off his at and swatted Nana's horse on its bottom. The horse ran like when younger, still called Lightening.
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the review, and for reading through with care.
Have a great week ahead,
Rhonda
Comment from apky
One of the foster homes I lived in had a riding school. ~ I like the way you've sneaked in this revelatory part of Nara. Darned smart.
Prairie grass, with its tangled brush, slowly gave way to twisted Mesquite trees and brushy undergrowth. Nara batted away several thorny branches as her horse picked his way through a path that was becoming less defined by the moment. ~ great descriptive passage. The reader can almost touch and smell the path.
Yeah, right - never judge a horse by its looks...
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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One of the foster homes I lived in had a riding school. ~ I like the way you've sneaked in this revelatory part of Nara. Darned smart.
Prairie grass, with its tangled brush, slowly gave way to twisted Mesquite trees and brushy undergrowth. Nara batted away several thorny branches as her horse picked his way through a path that was becoming less defined by the moment. ~ great descriptive passage. The reader can almost touch and smell the path.
Yeah, right - never judge a horse by its looks...
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Thanks for the review and comments, my friend! Horses, like people, can fool you every time!
Thanks so much,
Rhonda
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This earned a six for excitement. I knew he was called Lightning for a reason. Will the cats attack horses with riders? Don't they take guns for protection, especially when they have kids in their care.
took her further and further away <-- The word you want here is FARTHER, which is used for physical distance. FURTHER is used abstractly, as in...
to further my education
to be further along in school
Take that idea further, and you might have a useful invention.
But...
Go any farther, and you'll miss it.
I used to live farther from my office.
The mountains are farther away than they appear.
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Just remember the word FAR is in FARTHER, where you go FAR away.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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This earned a six for excitement. I knew he was called Lightning for a reason. Will the cats attack horses with riders? Don't they take guns for protection, especially when they have kids in their care.
took her further and further away <-- The word you want here is FARTHER, which is used for physical distance. FURTHER is used abstractly, as in...
to further my education
to be further along in school
Take that idea further, and you might have a useful invention.
But...
Go any farther, and you'll miss it.
I used to live farther from my office.
The mountains are farther away than they appear.
__________
Just remember the word FAR is in FARTHER, where you go FAR away.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Got it, farther!
Thanks for the six star rating, and for finding the mistaken word, further/farther. The debate is now put to rest.
Take care, my dear friend,
Rhonda
