Comment from Bill Schott

Exceptional

Perfect! A little fourth wall action towards the end, but I love the drama that must have played out for poor, sensitive Shirley as the horror played out. Super!

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2018

Bill, I owe you an apology for my tardiness in thanking you for your terrific review, and that priceless sixth star, for which I am sincerely grateful.This is as loud as the system will permit: THANK YOU, BILL!!! I AM VERY SORRY FOR MY NEGLIGENCE!

I've posted relatively little prose on FS, so your sixer is quite helpful, and particularly gratifying.

Thanks again.

Don

Comment from Mary Hollingsworth

Excellent

Now writer , I had to chuckle because that would be a moment of delayed reaction for me if I had been the one called in from work. Yes a reaction from such news from me would have a dropped jaw. Thanks for the short but vivid reaction story. I love it and the drawing depicts a guy rushing off to an emergency or something really urgent. Which in a sense wasn't urgent but shocking.

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018

Thanks for the chuckle, Mary! That's what I write for.

Comment from Beck Fenton

Excellent

Made me giggle. Shirley is so upset and Stanley seems to have reached the end of understanding her. I can't help but picture her as the young lonely eye-candy of an aging actor. "She just ate the last one." Priceless. Good luck!

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018

Thanks for giggling, Beck! That's what I write for. (And 'Priceless' gave me an extra boost.)

Comment from bolu-tife

Excellent

Wow! This is an absolutely amazing read. I was captivated from start to finish. I'm looking forward to reading something else from you. Well done and keep it up.

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018

I'm pleased to meet you, Bolu! I hope you don't mind if I plagiarize you:
Wow! This is an absolutely amazing review. I was captivated and elated, too. I'm looking forward to your
delighting in more of my writing. (I seldom blow my own horn, as I did this time. I just wanted to finish with a rhyme.)

Thanks for the compliments!

Don (Ogden)I'm pleased to meet you, Bolu! I hope you don't mind if I plagiarize you:
Wow! This is an absolutely amazing review. I was captivated and elated, too. I'm looking forward to your
delighting in more of my writing. (I seldom blow my own horn, as I did this time. I just wanted to finish with a rhyme.)

Thanks for the compliments!

(i can't tell you who I am, because the contest isn't over yet.)

Comment from apky

Excellent

I couldn't stop laughing, especially at the end lines.

"Look, I'm the main character in this scene, so tell me something I don't know,
and it better be good! Why isn't your fussy fish hungry now,
and why are you nagging that I came too late?"
"She had her babies, and she just ate the last one."
"Oh."

Good luck with the contest - you deserve a win!

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2018