Traveling backwards
Stopping by to see my childhood home15 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
You do a great job of creating an atmosphere about the place. The narrator is able to look inside at the kitchen and noticed the many changes. The wood flooring sounds lovely, much more attractive than linoleum. Modern heating and getting rid of the old wood stove in favor of a modern appliance would be okay with me. Great detail with the old kitchen table, which has been replaced. I remember using the kitchen for many things other than eating, as the narrator does. The narrator sees the changes, and though the narrator hasn't lived in the house for decades and it is no longer his, he still feels like it's his home. Excellent work with details. judi
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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You do a great job of creating an atmosphere about the place. The narrator is able to look inside at the kitchen and noticed the many changes. The wood flooring sounds lovely, much more attractive than linoleum. Modern heating and getting rid of the old wood stove in favor of a modern appliance would be okay with me. Great detail with the old kitchen table, which has been replaced. I remember using the kitchen for many things other than eating, as the narrator does. The narrator sees the changes, and though the narrator hasn't lived in the house for decades and it is no longer his, he still feels like it's his home. Excellent work with details. judi
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the comments and the stars. I appreciate both! The story is true and I have never gone back to see anything more. But in my dreams, I visit often.
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You're welcome. Excellent work with this. judi
Comment from tfawcus
Travelling back down memory lane is better done in the mind than in fact! The changing face of those things that were so much part of our childhood is always hard to bear. The sense of deep nostalgia here is accentuated by the fact that the house seems now to be physically empty. It sounds as if the occupants are off working 24/7 to pay for the borrowed cost of renovation. A mortgaged house and a mortgaged life. How sad.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Travelling back down memory lane is better done in the mind than in fact! The changing face of those things that were so much part of our childhood is always hard to bear. The sense of deep nostalgia here is accentuated by the fact that the house seems now to be physically empty. It sounds as if the occupants are off working 24/7 to pay for the borrowed cost of renovation. A mortgaged house and a mortgaged life. How sad.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your kind comments and stars. Yes, this is a true story and I've never been back. But my home is still in my heart and mind.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks sense of the place where author visited today, everything changed, colour of 1750, kitchen, furniture, none was there to see, porches shaved off; characteristics of author's farmhouse were missing; well worded, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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This speaks sense of the place where author visited today, everything changed, colour of 1750, kitchen, furniture, none was there to see, porches shaved off; characteristics of author's farmhouse were missing; well worded, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the kind words and stars. It's a true story from my heart. I have the memories still...
Comment from His Grayness
Very nicely done with excellent artwork to bring the reader immediately into the environment of the story. The writing is well done in all ways and there is nothing I can suggest to improve this work in any way. My thanks for a fine read! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Very nicely done with excellent artwork to bring the reader immediately into the environment of the story. The writing is well done in all ways and there is nothing I can suggest to improve this work in any way. My thanks for a fine read! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
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Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the kind words and stars. It's a true story from my heart.
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The thanks belong to you! Vance
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My delight thanks entirely to you! Vance
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good entry for the Sense of Place contest.
Your description of the narator's childhood home, now belonging to someone else and changed.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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This is a good entry for the Sense of Place contest.
Your description of the narator's childhood home, now belonging to someone else and changed.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
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Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the kind words and stars. It's a true story from my heart.
