Traveling backwards
Stopping by to see my childhood home15 total reviews
Comment from frogbook
A great job describing your delicious and nostalgic memories in this place and then the hard facts about its change to something different. A great subject for the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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A great job describing your delicious and nostalgic memories in this place and then the hard facts about its change to something different. A great subject for the contest.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your comments and stars. I appreciate both.
Comment from Susan Burger
This is a lovely entry for the Sense of Place Contest. I could see the old farmhouse you described. How sad a part of you must have been to see that the farmhouse of your childhood is no loner the same. But in your minds eye it will always be the home you loved with many dear memories.
Nice work. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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This is a lovely entry for the Sense of Place Contest. I could see the old farmhouse you described. How sad a part of you must have been to see that the farmhouse of your childhood is no loner the same. But in your minds eye it will always be the home you loved with many dear memories.
Nice work. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your comments and stars. I will always have that old house and my childhood again in my heart.
Comment from Realist101
I particularly love the ending to this. Very mellow and true to life. I've had many houses, and only a couple felt like home. Your sense of place is really well described. Vermont is a gorgeous state.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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I particularly love the ending to this. Very mellow and true to life. I've had many houses, and only a couple felt like home. Your sense of place is really well described. Vermont is a gorgeous state.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your comments and stars. I appreciate both.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You took me back in time to where I was brought up, very similar to yours. I went back and my grandparents house was totally changed, modernised and has now lost all its charm and character. Sad, isn't it? But, we have our memories and no one can alter them. I really enjoyed this. It says this is fiction, is it? If it's fiction, you really did it well. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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You took me back in time to where I was brought up, very similar to yours. I went back and my grandparents house was totally changed, modernised and has now lost all its charm and character. Sad, isn't it? But, we have our memories and no one can alter them. I really enjoyed this. It says this is fiction, is it? If it's fiction, you really did it well. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Thanks for your review and stars. My story is a mixture of fiction and truth. I did peek in and see the kitchen floor, but didn't stay long enough to notice everything else that might have been changed. The worst thing to me was to see the porches removed, a symbol to me of sitting outside on a hot humid day and enjoying the breezes. I guess sometimes we have to see the changes before we realize the place will always be the same in our hearts. Thank you, again. for your comments.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
You did an excellent job with this piece. It's pretty much technically sound but it's the tone that really comes through well. Nice descriptions linked to the feelings. good job.
Someone has ripped up the layers of linoleum my grandmother laid, then stripping and polishing the floorboards to a deep chestnut brown - I think it may need to be stripped and polished to preserve the tense in the sentence.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Hi there,
You did an excellent job with this piece. It's pretty much technically sound but it's the tone that really comes through well. Nice descriptions linked to the feelings. good job.
Someone has ripped up the layers of linoleum my grandmother laid, then stripping and polishing the floorboards to a deep chestnut brown - I think it may need to be stripped and polished to preserve the tense in the sentence.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Good catch! I always have to struggle with those darned tenses. They keep coming and gone. Thank you for letting me know...
Comment from Rasmine
Wow! If I had a six, I would have given it to you! I can picture the farmhouse down to the wood burning stove and sock races with your brother.
I wish you all the luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Wow! If I had a six, I would have given it to you! I can picture the farmhouse down to the wood burning stove and sock races with your brother.
I wish you all the luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Thank you very much for your comments. I'll imagine the sixth star. Grin.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I like this entry. I like the contest for that matter. It's interesting to read about what people remember. Something as simple as a new sheet of linoleum can stir the heart.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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I like this entry. I like the contest for that matter. It's interesting to read about what people remember. Something as simple as a new sheet of linoleum can stir the heart.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the comments and the stars. I felt so sad when the realization hit my heart that what I cherished was gone and replaced by other's memories in the making. Glad you liked traveling with me.
Comment from MelB
This is a well written short story and contest entry. You described the place you grew up in very well. One suggestion would be to divide it up into smaller paragraphs. It makes it easier to read.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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This is a well written short story and contest entry. You described the place you grew up in very well. One suggestion would be to divide it up into smaller paragraphs. It makes it easier to read.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thanks for your comments and stars. I will have to double space as the story somehow loses my spacing.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Joy Graham
Dear Mystery Writer,
They say you can never really go home again. Things change. I can picture you sock skating on the new linoleum. A wood stove would be a lovely feature of a country home. This is a terrific story. I think you followed the theme appropriately. Lots of imagery swirls around my mind as I read your story. Best wishes in the contest.
Sincerely Joy xx
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Dear Mystery Writer,
They say you can never really go home again. Things change. I can picture you sock skating on the new linoleum. A wood stove would be a lovely feature of a country home. This is a terrific story. I think you followed the theme appropriately. Lots of imagery swirls around my mind as I read your story. Best wishes in the contest.
Sincerely Joy xx
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the comments and the stars. I appreciate both!
Comment from Sugarray77
A beautiful, descriptive story of your Vermont home. I enjoyed reading this. You blended the scene into a tribute to your grandmother. Your tale did flow well and seemed balanced. Good luck.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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A beautiful, descriptive story of your Vermont home. I enjoyed reading this. You blended the scene into a tribute to your grandmother. Your tale did flow well and seemed balanced. Good luck.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the comments and the stars. I appreciate both! Gram was such a strong and independent woman!
