The Fox
A Fox Faces his future11 total reviews
Comment from cupa tea
We have bunnies, chickens and ducks as well as that fox who often comes to visit hoping for a meal. lol and that's what happens to him. We catch him and move him away.
You did a great job with this poem from the perspective of a foxes point of view. Good Luck!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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We have bunnies, chickens and ducks as well as that fox who often comes to visit hoping for a meal. lol and that's what happens to him. We catch him and move him away.
You did a great job with this poem from the perspective of a foxes point of view. Good Luck!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thank you, cups tea for your lovely review and five star rating. Nice to meet you
Comment from CD Richards
I'm not certain how to take this. Is the fox "evil" for wanting to live? I don't think you're saying that.
I lost my much loved two hens to a fox a few weeks ago. It was a terrible thing, I saw one dead, and the other died as the fox fled with me chasing it.
The usual reaction is to hate the fox, describe them as evil, and try to shoot or poison them. While I try to do everything possible to stop the fox from getting to my chickens (clearly I failed this time, with disastrous results), or other baby animals around the place, I can't hate them for just wanting to live, nor can I bring myself to harm them.
Anyway, your poem is very well written. Good rhyme and meter, and the picture is delightful.
Good job,
Craig
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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I'm not certain how to take this. Is the fox "evil" for wanting to live? I don't think you're saying that.
I lost my much loved two hens to a fox a few weeks ago. It was a terrible thing, I saw one dead, and the other died as the fox fled with me chasing it.
The usual reaction is to hate the fox, describe them as evil, and try to shoot or poison them. While I try to do everything possible to stop the fox from getting to my chickens (clearly I failed this time, with disastrous results), or other baby animals around the place, I can't hate them for just wanting to live, nor can I bring myself to harm them.
Anyway, your poem is very well written. Good rhyme and meter, and the picture is delightful.
Good job,
Craig
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you, CD Richards for your nice review and rating
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good entry for the Become The Animal contest.
Your sad verse tells of the life of a fox.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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This is a good entry for the Become The Animal contest.
Your sad verse tells of the life of a fox.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Sharon for your nice review and rating. Thank you also for your good luck wishes
Comment from donette1914
very cute poem and hearing the birds and it sounded like he got to eat. very nice words i love the art work and this is a wonderful poem well done it was a pleasure thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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very cute poem and hearing the birds and it sounded like he got to eat. very nice words i love the art work and this is a wonderful poem well done it was a pleasure thank you for sharing
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you, donette1914 for your nice review and rsting. Nice to meet you.
Comment from For better for verse
Poor Mr Fox, but that's life. This was a very good piece of writing with great rhyme and meter throughout.
A worthy contest entry, so very good iuck with it.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Poor Mr Fox, but that's life. This was a very good piece of writing with great rhyme and meter throughout.
A worthy contest entry, so very good iuck with it.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you, For better for verse for your nice review and rsting. Nice to meet you. Nice, catchy handle.
Comment from cailinraine8
I enjoyed reading this... it takes us into deeper thought concerning the animals that need to kill in order to eat. What a choice! As with humans, perhaps the kinder ones really do not want to take the life of another in order to survive... this invokes sympathy for the fox from a different viewpoint. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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I enjoyed reading this... it takes us into deeper thought concerning the animals that need to kill in order to eat. What a choice! As with humans, perhaps the kinder ones really do not want to take the life of another in order to survive... this invokes sympathy for the fox from a different viewpoint. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you, cailinraine8 for your nice review and rating
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You're welcome!!
Comment from dragonpoet
This shows that foxes go to Heaven too. This fox died of hunger to go to a place that will feed him forever.
The abcb quatrains tell the story well but it seems like you are telling the foxes story from your point of view not his. If you could change all the third person references to first person, using I and me, instead of he and his, then it would seem from the animals point of view.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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This shows that foxes go to Heaven too. This fox died of hunger to go to a place that will feed him forever.
The abcb quatrains tell the story well but it seems like you are telling the foxes story from your point of view not his. If you could change all the third person references to first person, using I and me, instead of he and his, then it would seem from the animals point of view.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you, dragonpoet for your nice review and rating and for your suggestion
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You're welcome. Glad if I helped in any way.
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Comment from Sherman541
I can only hope that all fox and other animals too could have this result and be that lucky too. I love how you think for the Fox and his own fate. Lovely picture and such beautiful words. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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I can only hope that all fox and other animals too could have this result and be that lucky too. I love how you think for the Fox and his own fate. Lovely picture and such beautiful words. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you,
Sherman541 for your nice review and rating and for wishing me luck in the contest
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You are more than welcome !
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks the fox faces the future, he fails to eat a single hen for the hounds at henhouse; he comes to a forest with beautiful birds, being lucky, he was taken therefrom, he said an Amen; well worded, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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This speaks the fox faces the future, he fails to eat a single hen for the hounds at henhouse; he comes to a forest with beautiful birds, being lucky, he was taken therefrom, he said an Amen; well worded, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Dr. Alcreator for your nice review and rating
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. The fox only purpose in life is to eat and feed his family. He takes whatever is easy prey and makes sure he eats enough to build up his strength at the cost of farmers sometime.
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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A very well-written poem. The fox only purpose in life is to eat and feed his family. He takes whatever is easy prey and makes sure he eats enough to build up his strength at the cost of farmers sometime.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Sandra du Plessis for your nice review and rating. Unfortunately the fox?s prey is being driven out by man claiming their habitat. When the Fox has no natural prey he can eat, he, understandably eats what he can
