Summer Daydream
Ekphrastic poem based on a painting.31 total reviews
Comment from CD Richards
Excellent free-verse tail - oops, tale, written from the perspective of one who may, or may not exist. I love the challenge to embrace this mermaid in human form, before she might turn out to be just a trick of the light or the mind.
No need to turn our minds to the analytical or methodical - even the severest skeptic likes a bit of magic once in a while.
Great job. Well chosen words and great flow make it most enjoyable to read. Best of luck!
Craig
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Excellent free-verse tail - oops, tale, written from the perspective of one who may, or may not exist. I love the challenge to embrace this mermaid in human form, before she might turn out to be just a trick of the light or the mind.
No need to turn our minds to the analytical or methodical - even the severest skeptic likes a bit of magic once in a while.
Great job. Well chosen words and great flow make it most enjoyable to read. Best of luck!
Craig
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for your uplifting comments.
Comment from Beck Fenton
I love this delightful dare to the human to see, feel, touch and believe in her immortality. The playfulness and superiority certainly shine in this poem. You did a wonderful job with your free verse! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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I love this delightful dare to the human to see, feel, touch and believe in her immortality. The playfulness and superiority certainly shine in this poem. You did a wonderful job with your free verse! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your insightful review to this work of my fantasy. It means a lot to me to be understood.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is outstanding. It's very moving. The creature of dreams. Real, but fleeting. Only to be looked upon for a moment, then swept away like the waves.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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This is outstanding. It's very moving. The creature of dreams. Real, but fleeting. Only to be looked upon for a moment, then swept away like the waves.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you for reading my work and for catching so well the illusions of a dreamer. What a gift!
Comment from Scotchy Taggart
I enjoyed the imagery very much. The thin stanza structure also was attractive to look at. The sixth stanza, the part about being an illusion, like the sun, I didn't feel the power in the same way I as when I read the other possibilities for this encounter.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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I enjoyed the imagery very much. The thin stanza structure also was attractive to look at. The sixth stanza, the part about being an illusion, like the sun, I didn't feel the power in the same way I as when I read the other possibilities for this encounter.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thank you Scotchy for reading my work and for elaborating in its context. It's a gift for me, my words to be worthy of such attention.
Comment from Ogden
Okay, I'll touch you. How? Where? Where did she go!? Rats! Now I never will know. What fools we mortals be!
The reflexes aren't what they were in the old days.
Well, your poem opened my eyes to my shortcomings.
Good job, whoever you are, wherever you come from!
Don (Ogden)
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Okay, I'll touch you. How? Where? Where did she go!? Rats! Now I never will know. What fools we mortals be!
The reflexes aren't what they were in the old days.
Well, your poem opened my eyes to my shortcomings.
Good job, whoever you are, wherever you come from!
Don (Ogden)
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Yhank you for the fun interpretation to this poem.
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You are welcome to it. :o)
Comment from royowen
I've always been intrigued by thought, what is real and what is not, what do I see, and what I cannot. Beautifully written work, articulate, expressive and a very thoughtful, reflective entry, there's a real poignancy to your work, good luck in the contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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I've always been intrigued by thought, what is real and what is not, what do I see, and what I cannot. Beautifully written work, articulate, expressive and a very thoughtful, reflective entry, there's a real poignancy to your work, good luck in the contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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The same here, royowen, switching my mind in what is real and what is a gift of my imagination. Dreaming is so nice...Thank you for your beautiful lines.
Comment from Zue65
I am definitely a fan of free verse , I like the free structure and unrestricted format of a free verse. I enjoyed reading this poem inspired by the painting. The imagery is rich and effective, the choice of words fits the message intended by the author. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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I am definitely a fan of free verse , I like the free structure and unrestricted format of a free verse. I enjoyed reading this poem inspired by the painting. The imagery is rich and effective, the choice of words fits the message intended by the author. Keep writing.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your kind words in this free verse poem.
Comment from RGstar
This is the beauty of poetry, for I found this beautiful. I see the image of an innocent girl, but is the poem , in fact, about innocence, or time, or even change itself, for dreams are always symbolized by something.
Wish I knew of which entity this is directed, for it is beautiful in delivery.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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This is the beauty of poetry, for I found this beautiful. I see the image of an innocent girl, but is the poem , in fact, about innocence, or time, or even change itself, for dreams are always symbolized by something.
Wish I knew of which entity this is directed, for it is beautiful in delivery.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thank you, dear friend.
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, :)
I wish you luck in the contest. Very good submission. I like the idea she addresses the person as 'mortal'.
I found one typo:
Earthly beiing (being), touch me if you wish
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Hello, :)
I wish you luck in the contest. Very good submission. I like the idea she addresses the person as 'mortal'.
I found one typo:
Earthly beiing (being), touch me if you wish
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thank you for reading this work and for alerting me to the typo. Corrected.
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Summer Daydream, brings to me , with these haunting words, the spirit of imagination that blends what we know is real and fantasy with that of which we're not certain.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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This free verse, Summer Daydream, brings to me , with these haunting words, the spirit of imagination that blends what we know is real and fantasy with that of which we're not certain.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thank you Bill. Daydreaming can take a person to marvelous places. Thank you for understand it.
