Alone
The flu killed everyone without mercy.7 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
The report of a volunteer will definitely draw in as it could be any of us who just wanted to volunteer. We find ourselves overwhelmed with a situation that we did not "sign on for" This is a metaphor for the reader to look at what they do to survive the loneliness. I like the last two lines. I like the simile of spewing. Well written.
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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The report of a volunteer will definitely draw in as it could be any of us who just wanted to volunteer. We find ourselves overwhelmed with a situation that we did not "sign on for" This is a metaphor for the reader to look at what they do to survive the loneliness. I like the last two lines. I like the simile of spewing. Well written.
Comment Written 04-May-2018
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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Thank you, Liz. I appreciate the way you read and then write a review.
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
This is make a good Sci-Fi story. Starting out with the cough and all of that and everybody dying but you. How unimaginable but then it seems to have been fun at first to be the only Survivor but after about 3 days you said you were about to lose it to think that you were the only one that survived yeah that could be kind of crazy thanks for the opportunity to read it I hope that's never the case though LOL. That picture is gross and I guess that's the way it was supposed to be I wouldn't want to look like that thank you for the imagination
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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This is make a good Sci-Fi story. Starting out with the cough and all of that and everybody dying but you. How unimaginable but then it seems to have been fun at first to be the only Survivor but after about 3 days you said you were about to lose it to think that you were the only one that survived yeah that could be kind of crazy thanks for the opportunity to read it I hope that's never the case though LOL. That picture is gross and I guess that's the way it was supposed to be I wouldn't want to look like that thank you for the imagination
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Thank you very much for the comments and the stars. I would never want to be in that situation ever! Grin. But the writing is fun.
Comment from justswf
Wow. Vivid to say the least. Sad, So lonely yet so hopeful. You have a very easy style of writing it flows nicely. Despite the topic it was a great read. Keep up the great work.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Wow. Vivid to say the least. Sad, So lonely yet so hopeful. You have a very easy style of writing it flows nicely. Despite the topic it was a great read. Keep up the great work.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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I am very honored with your comments and the 6 stars. Thank you very much.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I enjoyed this piece. It's one of the best ones in the competition. The point of view is good and maintained throughout. I always feel these kind of tales have more impact on the smaller level which is what you've accomplished here.
Nice
GMG
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Hi there,
I enjoyed this piece. It's one of the best ones in the competition. The point of view is good and maintained throughout. I always feel these kind of tales have more impact on the smaller level which is what you've accomplished here.
Nice
GMG
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your comments and stars. I appreciate both.
Comment from apky
A rather frightening but enjoyable read. Yes, everybody wants to stay safe and healthy.
Apart from the line breaks formatting, I found no spags. Well done and good luck with the contest.
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I remember when the television station went blank. One guy was broadcasting the continual news
he started coughing. He, thankfully, turned off the video, and finally, the coughing stopped.(line break)
I'm the last one left alive at Golden Oaks Hospital.
one of my top priorities.(line break)
I've been eating the perishables in the cafeteria.
cold milk. I'm eating better than I ever did at home. Crazy, huh?(line break)
The power went out yesterday. I wonder how long the generators will run? I'm cooking up everything I can.(line break)
I can't believe I'm the only survivor. I am sure the leaders of the government are safe in the top-secret
better now than I did before. That's crazy.(line break)
On sunny days I take the stairs to the roof and watch for airplanes.
It will help clear away the smell of rotting flesh.(line break)
The generators lasted three days. I carry a big flashlight with me everywhere I go.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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A rather frightening but enjoyable read. Yes, everybody wants to stay safe and healthy.
Apart from the line breaks formatting, I found no spags. Well done and good luck with the contest.
no.(line break needed here)
I remember when the television station went blank. One guy was broadcasting the continual news
he started coughing. He, thankfully, turned off the video, and finally, the coughing stopped.(line break)
I'm the last one left alive at Golden Oaks Hospital.
one of my top priorities.(line break)
I've been eating the perishables in the cafeteria.
cold milk. I'm eating better than I ever did at home. Crazy, huh?(line break)
The power went out yesterday. I wonder how long the generators will run? I'm cooking up everything I can.(line break)
I can't believe I'm the only survivor. I am sure the leaders of the government are safe in the top-secret
better now than I did before. That's crazy.(line break)
On sunny days I take the stairs to the roof and watch for airplanes.
It will help clear away the smell of rotting flesh.(line break)
The generators lasted three days. I carry a big flashlight with me everywhere I go.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the review and the stars. I should have previewed the post because it didn't carry my line breaks. Thanks a million for picking up on that! I think I fixed it all.
Comment from Jean Lutz
Wow. Your story is more frightening than the flu. I thought maybe I should put on a mask and gloves before reading and reviewing. Looks like everyone I know is equally divided on shot or not. Best to you with the entry.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Wow. Your story is more frightening than the flu. I thought maybe I should put on a mask and gloves before reading and reviewing. Looks like everyone I know is equally divided on shot or not. Best to you with the entry.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the comments and the stars. My fingers are crossed.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good entry for the Sunday, Monday, Doomsday writing prompt.
Well written, rather gory and grim, but I guess that's the whole point, isn't it?
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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This is a good entry for the Sunday, Monday, Doomsday writing prompt.
Well written, rather gory and grim, but I guess that's the whole point, isn't it?
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 01-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the comments and the stars. I've always thought I would want to survive something like this... I think I changed my own mind. Grin.
