Pika
No where to run to, baby. No where to hide.72 total reviews
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
This was most interesting, Sis Cat. I have never heard of this critter before. What a life! ... always in search of cooler climes. Poor little thing. He almost looks like a cross between a rabbit and a chipmunk.
You've created excellent imagery for your reader, and your poem is informative as well as an excellent commentary on the effects climate change can have on Earth and its inhabitants. Sounds like the Pika will be one of the first species to become extinct with global warming. :(
Very well written and presented. A pleasure to read! ~~ Connie
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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This was most interesting, Sis Cat. I have never heard of this critter before. What a life! ... always in search of cooler climes. Poor little thing. He almost looks like a cross between a rabbit and a chipmunk.
You've created excellent imagery for your reader, and your poem is informative as well as an excellent commentary on the effects climate change can have on Earth and its inhabitants. Sounds like the Pika will be one of the first species to become extinct with global warming. :(
Very well written and presented. A pleasure to read! ~~ Connie
Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2018
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Yes, Connie, by the end of this century the Pika will become extinct at all lower elevations throughout the West.
The Society of Classical Poets has selected my poem for publication in May.
Thank you for your review, and thank you for your collaboration with MercurySeven. I wish I could have given you a six directly.
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Congrats, Sis Cat! That is quite an honour to have your poem published by the Society of Classical Poets. You must be soOOO thrilled!
It is I who should be thanking you for the most wonderful review that you gave us for The Mermaid and the Galleon. Your high praise means more to us than six stars ever could, though the sixth star was certainly a very nice cherry on top. Thank you so much!!
We had a blast writing it, and for me (I can't speak for Rob) it was a great learning experience as well. I think Mercury Seven is one of the best poets on this site, and I was absolutely delighted that he asked me to co-write a poem with him.
Wishing you a wonderful day!
Connie
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Sis, this is a well written poem which tells an interesting story. Good enjambment throughout and perfect abab rhyme. I do not know this animal but it is sad when changes in climate have this effect on wild life. You expressed this well. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Hi Sis, this is a well written poem which tells an interesting story. Good enjambment throughout and perfect abab rhyme. I do not know this animal but it is sad when changes in climate have this effect on wild life. You expressed this well. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Dorothy, for your review and for wishes of good luck in the contest. Thanks also for noting my use if enjambment. It seemed natural to write the sentences this way rather than having the thoughts end at the end of each line. Thanks.
Comment from Bichon
Fantastic job with this poem. You have described this unique mammal in a great way, and your use of descriptive words really pull the poem together. Great work.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Fantastic job with this poem. You have described this unique mammal in a great way, and your use of descriptive words really pull the poem together. Great work.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Yes, Bichon, I use descriptive words to paint a picture. I always start off writing a poem by asking, "What is the story?" Once I have a story, I write as if I wrote a script for a film director. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A very good image of the pika,
and a well penned poem, Sis Cat,
that shows his plight because
of global warming.
-Notes are appreciated.
-There is good flow and
progression in your poem
that rhymes well.
-You cause the reader to feel
a sense of empathy and sadness
for this animal, as "glaciers melt"
and he "awaits the snow."
-An excellent entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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-A very good image of the pika,
and a well penned poem, Sis Cat,
that shows his plight because
of global warming.
-Notes are appreciated.
-There is good flow and
progression in your poem
that rhymes well.
-You cause the reader to feel
a sense of empathy and sadness
for this animal, as "glaciers melt"
and he "awaits the snow."
-An excellent entry; good luck.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Pam, for your generous, detailed, six star review and wishes of good luck in the contest. I much appreciate it.
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You are very welcome and deserving.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Andre,
You've written a fine rhymed poem for the contest
in the form of a sonnet with excellent rhymes
and iambic pentameter. It reads very well with the
use of natural enjambment.
Being on the east coast, I'm not familiar
with the little pika. Interesting adaptation to a
narrow range of temperatures.
I would think it would go underground
and come out at night for cooler temperatures.
Well done, no sixes left.
Best wishes to you
RS
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Hello Andre,
You've written a fine rhymed poem for the contest
in the form of a sonnet with excellent rhymes
and iambic pentameter. It reads very well with the
use of natural enjambment.
Being on the east coast, I'm not familiar
with the little pika. Interesting adaptation to a
narrow range of temperatures.
I would think it would go underground
and come out at night for cooler temperatures.
Well done, no sixes left.
Best wishes to you
RS
Comment Written 01-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Oh, thank you, RS, for your review. Pikas live in the talus--the rocky surface of peaks--because they can keep out of the sun. Nevertheless, as temperatures rise, pikas have become extinct at lower elevations while the survivors moved higher up peaks.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello and I sincerely hope this does not happen to these little fellows. This is a well written rhyming piece of poetic art. I love your ability to get the story across to us and in beautiful form! Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Hello and I sincerely hope this does not happen to these little fellows. This is a well written rhyming piece of poetic art. I love your ability to get the story across to us and in beautiful form! Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 01-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Kiwi, for your review and contest good luck for my narrative poem.
Unfortunately for the pikas and, by extension ourselves, they are becoming extinct at lower elevations and on mountains that are not high enough to flee for cooler climes. Scientists have tracked the pikas' gradual disappearance for decades.
Comment from Beck Fenton
You have painted a delightful picture of a cute little rodent (smile) until the very end! Poor little fella. His life depends on something out of his control. The art you included was perfect. Thanks for this poem. I'm glad I read it.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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You have painted a delightful picture of a cute little rodent (smile) until the very end! Poor little fella. His life depends on something out of his control. The art you included was perfect. Thanks for this poem. I'm glad I read it.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Beck, for your review. Yes, the climate is out of the control of this cute little fellow. I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.
Comment from ameen786
Hi Andre, thank you for the informative notes and I was wondering how the Pikas were able to survive thus far with the climate warming each year; the poem reflects the sad truth in meaningful phrases, superb alliteration and excellent rhyming.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Hi Andre, thank you for the informative notes and I was wondering how the Pikas were able to survive thus far with the climate warming each year; the poem reflects the sad truth in meaningful phrases, superb alliteration and excellent rhyming.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Yes, Ameen, I'm alarmed that the pikas have become extinct along vast mountain ranges in the West over the past hundred years. Scientists predict that by the end of this century, pikas will only live on the highest mountains, like Mount Shasta.
Thank you for your review of my informative poem and notes.
Comment from Nika2016
I like the sounds in Sierra summers...He is a homely little creature..looking like a squirrel and a rat...
but you gave to us a lesson in natural history...
in a poem...smile
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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I like the sounds in Sierra summers...He is a homely little creature..looking like a squirrel and a rat...
but you gave to us a lesson in natural history...
in a poem...smile
Comment Written 01-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Yes, yes, yes, Nika. I love the sound of Sierra summers, too! I originally wrote "The alpine summer," but when I saw an opportunity to use "Sierra," I went for it. Thank you for your review of my poem which gave a natural history lesson.
Comment from Janet Foor
A very written sonnet on the plight of the Pika Andre. I didn't even know about this little guy so it was also very informative. We really have done a number on our planet. Thank you for sharing.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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A very written sonnet on the plight of the Pika Andre. I didn't even know about this little guy so it was also very informative. We really have done a number on our planet. Thank you for sharing.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 01-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Yes, Janet, scientists predict that by the end of this century, pikas will only live on the highest mountains, like Mount Shasta. Pikas have and will continue to die out at lower elevations and on mountains that are not high enough for them to seek refuge in cooler climes.
Thank you for your review and blessings.
