When I was a young man...
I wore a coat.66 total reviews
Comment from Lighthouse Keeper
"those walls will fall when life goes wrong".
That's a great line with a beautiful flow to it. Nice balance of consonants and vowel sounds blending well throughout. Great sentiment summarized smoothly with efficient word use and tone.
Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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"those walls will fall when life goes wrong".
That's a great line with a beautiful flow to it. Nice balance of consonants and vowel sounds blending well throughout. Great sentiment summarized smoothly with efficient word use and tone.
Well done.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Thanks, for these delightful words and a supportive review, blessings, Roy
Comment from Ulla
Hi Roy, so very true. If we build our life as a house of cards, it will not hold, and one day it will all collapse around us ending in chaos. A strong foundation is needed to keep us afloat. Yet another beautifully written poem. You're so talented. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Hi Roy, so very true. If we build our life as a house of cards, it will not hold, and one day it will all collapse around us ending in chaos. A strong foundation is needed to keep us afloat. Yet another beautifully written poem. You're so talented. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Thanks Ulla, for these delightful words and a supportive review, blessings, Roy
Comment from judiverse
As you note, things wear out with time. Clothing wears, as do buildings unless their foundation is strong. A firm foundation is necessary. I believe that is what you refer to in the last stanza--faith is the foundation that will keep man together. Excellent work with your AABB rhyme. It reads very smoothly. judi
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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As you note, things wear out with time. Clothing wears, as do buildings unless their foundation is strong. A firm foundation is necessary. I believe that is what you refer to in the last stanza--faith is the foundation that will keep man together. Excellent work with your AABB rhyme. It reads very smoothly. judi
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Thanks Judi,, for these delightful words and a supportive review, blessings, Roy
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You're very welcome. Take care. judi
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Your poem is terrific, Roy. Reading your very first line took me back to the night my husband died, and I sat down to explain to my children that their dad was still alive but living with God now, what was left was his coat, it was worn out and he couldn't live in it anymore. I do believe that, and as I watch my skin crinkle up I realise my coat is wearing a bit thin now, too. I enjoyed reading your poem,my friend, and your author's notes. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Your poem is terrific, Roy. Reading your very first line took me back to the night my husband died, and I sat down to explain to my children that their dad was still alive but living with God now, what was left was his coat, it was worn out and he couldn't live in it anymore. I do believe that, and as I watch my skin crinkle up I realise my coat is wearing a bit thin now, too. I enjoyed reading your poem,my friend, and your author's notes. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Thanks dear Sandra , for these delightful words and a supportive review, blessings, Roy
Comment from GWinterwin
Great poem with words that truly touch the heart. Good rhyming and word flow as you tell of the struggles of life. Also giving God the glory for anything good in your life. Yes the blind leading the blind I believe is one of our countries big problems now.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Great poem with words that truly touch the heart. Good rhyming and word flow as you tell of the struggles of life. Also giving God the glory for anything good in your life. Yes the blind leading the blind I believe is one of our countries big problems now.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Thanks, there are lots blind here my friend, and thanks for these delightful words and a supportive review, blessings, Roy
Comment from JanPerry
gorgeous work. Have you written books yet? Probably time to do it now. Love the analogies and well done.
Thanks for your reviews. I don't get many on here.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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gorgeous work. Have you written books yet? Probably time to do it now. Love the analogies and well done.
Thanks for your reviews. I don't get many on here.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Thanks Jan, for these super words and a lovely review, Jan, I have been so slack no I haven't. blessings, Roy
Comment from Pantygynt
Three biblical quotations from different versions rolled into a single poem of three quatrains of rhyming couplets in iambic tetrameter. This encourages the reader to follow in the Lord's footsteps as otherwise he will be led as if by a blind man and as the proverb says, both will end up in the ditch
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Three biblical quotations from different versions rolled into a single poem of three quatrains of rhyming couplets in iambic tetrameter. This encourages the reader to follow in the Lord's footsteps as otherwise he will be led as if by a blind man and as the proverb says, both will end up in the ditch
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Thanks Jim, for these supportive words and review, blessings, Roy
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Roy. I enjoyed reading your poem. Some good lines within. My favorites:
"unless one builds foundations strong,
those walls will fall when life goes wrong."
and
"Upon this dappled light I walk;"
Marilyn
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Hi Roy. I enjoyed reading your poem. Some good lines within. My favorites:
"unless one builds foundations strong,
those walls will fall when life goes wrong."
and
"Upon this dappled light I walk;"
Marilyn
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Thanks Marilyn, for these delightful words and a supportive review, blessings, Roy
Comment from scongrove
Beautiful message Roy! :)
I love how you express your words with such inspiring meaning. I can relate to this. You can't hide all your imperfections and your past. It will eventually reveal itself with time. Letting go and freeing yourself of all those things is a way of healing.
Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading this.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Beautiful message Roy! :)
I love how you express your words with such inspiring meaning. I can relate to this. You can't hide all your imperfections and your past. It will eventually reveal itself with time. Letting go and freeing yourself of all those things is a way of healing.
Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading this.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Thanks dear Shana, for super encouraging words and your wonderfully supportive blessings, Roy
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You're very welcome my dear friend :)
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Roy
Enjoyed the message from the picture and your poem. Virtual six. One often wonders how we survived what we did when we were young if it had we not kept our faith.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Good morning, Roy
Enjoyed the message from the picture and your poem. Virtual six. One often wonders how we survived what we did when we were young if it had we not kept our faith.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Thanks Ray, for your marvellous comments and super review, blessings, Roy
