Free Verse Collection 2
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Comment from Ricky1024
Lancaster homeless shelter closes well written and very deep at that the background in the front with perfect for this as a red ads for the pain the black the darkness scripted measures were aligned perfectly objective and subjective constant perfectly and racially in place theme and imagery beautiful flowed well read well with no grammar issues as well thanks for this and have a blessed day dr. Ricky 1024
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Lancaster homeless shelter closes well written and very deep at that the background in the front with perfect for this as a red ads for the pain the black the darkness scripted measures were aligned perfectly objective and subjective constant perfectly and racially in place theme and imagery beautiful flowed well read well with no grammar issues as well thanks for this and have a blessed day dr. Ricky 1024
Comment Written 22-Feb-2018
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a very well done story in a poem that you have crafted. It is enhanced by the photographs you have interlaced throughout the verse. Very vibrant and vivid.
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This is a very well done story in a poem that you have crafted. It is enhanced by the photographs you have interlaced throughout the verse. Very vibrant and vivid.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sad write Michael, for our war heroes to end up on the streets and die like this. Your story is all too often true, beat wishes, love Dolly x
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This is a sad write Michael, for our war heroes to end up on the streets and die like this. Your story is all too often true, beat wishes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
Comment from emptypage
Well, you certainly drove home your point, Michael. We hardly have shelters here, ever, unless you go to church first before you are given the privilege of spending the night.
A flag makes a fine blanket, but a shitty shelter.
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Well, you certainly drove home your point, Michael. We hardly have shelters here, ever, unless you go to church first before you are given the privilege of spending the night.
A flag makes a fine blanket, but a shitty shelter.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
Comment from Teri7
Mike, This is a very well written story in a poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and great imagery from your words and the art works. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. I saw no errors! Blessings, Teri
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Mike, This is a very well written story in a poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and great imagery from your words and the art works. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. I saw no errors! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
Comment from nordicgirl
No sixes, but lots of praise. I know this is first hand experience, Michael, and that's a damn shame. Too bad this is so real. I hope people get the picture and do something. Lots of rah, rah patriotism, but no real care or help. Disgusting. NG
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No sixes, but lots of praise. I know this is first hand experience, Michael, and that's a damn shame. Too bad this is so real. I hope people get the picture and do something. Lots of rah, rah patriotism, but no real care or help. Disgusting. NG
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
This is an amazingly powerful free verse, Mav. The shelter for the homeless has been shut down? So poor old people and veterans are put out onto the street then? I'm thinking using the flag as a blanket might not be seen as copasetic for some. So sad. I must admit to great sadness when I learned veterans are deported after their service with the US military. Good enough to die, but not to live.
That is just so sad. What is going to happen now with these poor people?
As is signature you, an amazing flow of consciousness, emotion and imagery.
Great job!
Ange
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This is an amazingly powerful free verse, Mav. The shelter for the homeless has been shut down? So poor old people and veterans are put out onto the street then? I'm thinking using the flag as a blanket might not be seen as copasetic for some. So sad. I must admit to great sadness when I learned veterans are deported after their service with the US military. Good enough to die, but not to live.
That is just so sad. What is going to happen now with these poor people?
As is signature you, an amazing flow of consciousness, emotion and imagery.
Great job!
Ange
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
